Rebuttal Essay – Tabitha Corrao

What Makes DTAP So Successful

As an act to clean up the streets across American, states like New York, are now funding money to a program called Drug Treatment Alternative to Prison Program (DTAP). The mission of the Drug Treatment Alternative to Prison Program is to give drug offenders, such as drug abusers, an alternative to prison by giving drug abusers an alterative to go into a drug rehabilitation center. States are hoping that by giving drug offenders another alternative they will not only put drug dealers out of business, ultimately lowering crime rate but also save the state money. The states hope to save money by paying for helpful inexpensive rehab rather than jail time, where drug offenders receive no help with their problems.

The mission of DTAP (Drug Treatment Alterative to Prison Programs) seems like the perfect plan to clean up streets but not everyone believes in the plan. Someone might have doubts in the program because it is said that drug rehabs do not always work for everyone. According to the Treatment Episode Data Set in 2008, 1,626,740 people were checked into some type of Substance Abuse Treatment Service. Of those 1,626,740 people about 38% were discharged because they dropped out of treatment, had treatment terminated by the facility, were incarcerated or failed to complete treatment for other reasons. That is about 618,161 people who did not complete rehabilitation in the year 2008.

With that being said, should someone’s future be determined based off previously collected statics? What I mean here is, should a current drug offender be withheld different alteratives based only on success and failure rates alone.  According to DrugRehabs.org, “Studies show that the success of one’s recovery is determined not only by the type of drug rehab program they attend, but the amount of effort put into applying what is learned in treatment when returning home…” In other words success rates can not be determined based on statics. One could argue that not every person puts the same amount of effort into treatment center.

Another argument someone could argue is that DTAP participants are more likely complete treatment because they are in treatment longer than those who are in long-term residential treatments. According to The National Center on Addiction and Substance Abuse, “DTAP participants remain in treatment six times longer than individuals in other long-term residential treatment (a median of 17.8 months compared to three months).” These rates are important because an individual who stays in treatment long has a better chance of staying sober.

In addition to the argument Joseph A. Califano, Jr., CASA president and former U.S. Secretary of Health stated “This program in which failure is a one-way ticket to prison shows the effectiveness of coerced treatment,” What Joseph A. Califano means is success rates are more higher among people who are threaten to go to jail if they fail as to someone who puts themselves in treatment. Someone can argue that the pressure of success in DTAPs’ is so strong that it actually helps a person succeed a healthy drug free lifestyle.

All in all, drug offenders should not be withheld alternatives based on success and failure rates alone. DTAP was designed to steer drug abusers into a healthy drug free lifestyles. Safety precautions, such as making the treatment longer and making failure feared, helps make DTAP become so successful.

 

Drug Rehab Alcohol Drug Rehabilitation Addiction Treatment Programs. National Drug and Alcohol Abuse Helpline, 2002. Web. 02 Apr. 2012.

Press Releases:.” CASAColumbia.org: News Room: INNOVATIVE DRUG TREATMENT ALTERNATIVE TO PRISON PROGRAM REDUCES CRIME, PRISON COSTS. The National Center on Addiction and Substance Abuse at Columbia University, 2003. Web. 02 Apr. 2012.

“TEDS 2008 Discharge Report, Highlights.” SAMHSA. Substance Abuse and Mental Health Services Administration, 19 Apr. 2011. Web. 02 Apr. 2012.

 

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Rebuttal Essay – Bill Brooks

Keep your hands off my Science

The two main opponents that the field of embryonic stem (ES) cell research faces are political and moral in nature.  The political view of the situation states that there should not be research conducted if it results in human tissues being destroyed.  And the moral dilemma is that the embryo utilized is/could have been a human itself.  These two opinions stem from the same basic principle which is that a human embryo can be viewed, in very specific circumstances, as a human or part of a human.  These two views are very closely linked by this opinion, and therefore can be dealt with simultaneously.

As stated before much of the aversion to the use of ES cells in regenerative medicine has been derived from the Dwickey-Wicker amendment in 1996 which prohibited the funding for research that destroyed any human tissue.  While the concern for causing or incentivizing the destruction of a potential human life is obvious, the basis of this amendment is flawed.  At first glance this amendment seems irrefutable, but upon closer inspection the fallacy of the document is perceptible.  The fallacy lies within the notion that a nearly single celled tissue is human solely because of the fact that it was human derived.  Other pseudo-moral laws that strive to define a human life differ in what is human and what is not.

While separation of church and state has been pushed for almost since the inhabitation of the United States, being first cited in Thomas Jefferson’s 1802 letter to the Dansbury Baptist Association, there seems to still be a mixing of Christian ideals within the current laws.  While the Conference of Catholic Bishops has been open with their opinion that the destruction of any human embryo is grossly immoral, either by research or by abortion, the vast majority of states in America have late term abortion laws which allow second and even third trimester abortions.  The discrepancy is immediately apparent in these two views.  Now, certainly most would agree that a discrepancy between political and religious parties is acceptable.  However, nearly all of the arguments for the current abortion laws were derived from a moral standpoint which is what makes this discrepancy interesting.  The famous Roe v Wade Supreme Court case ruled that in order to be a human then the infant (for lack of a better term) must be “viable” or able to live outside of the mother’s womb without life support.  This is certainly different that the definition of life when it comes to embryonic stem cell research.

These discrepancies themselves do not point to a completely flawed system, but when abortion laws viewed in tandem with the current laws concerning research conducted with human embryos there is an undeniable misstep in logic.  It seems that crucial terminology like defining what a life is should be the same across the board.  Although it is true that certain words can take on different meanings when viewed under different light, as is the main argument for such laws as medicinal narcotics, illegal in some settings and legal and necessary in others, something as critical as defining human life should not change regardless of the scenario.  The question of why aborting an embryo is legal but using it in a lab to save lives is not is prevalent in this topic.  Both scenarios, at the same stage of development are viewed entirely differently.  In the eyes of many scientists, who know the true power of these types of cells, they should be viewed as one in the same.

Another major concern of the opponents of this field of research is that using embryos for research may lead to incentivizing abortion for the purpose of research.  It has been proposed that the donation of usable tissues would merit a payment of some source, which may lead to an increase in abortions for the exclusive purpose of a payment especially in poor areas of the country.  This, while a valid claim, has an all too simple solution being: do not offer payment.  If a woman has already chosen to have an abortion and the donation of tissue could be used for research then a reduction or free of charge termination could be performed which would give no incentive to have abortions for financial gain.

Many anti-abortion and religious groups also view the usage of previously aborted and cryogenically frozen embryos for research as wrong.  Often times it is due to the fact that they view these practices themselves wrong and do not want these tissues used for any other purpose, even though they will be destroyed anyways.  This view is flawed because knowing that these tissues hold the potential to save lives or greatly increase the quality of life of a person afflicted with an illness it seems morally wrong to allow to be destroyed without any benefit.  If the tissues are going to be destroyed anyway they might as well be used to help someone else.

It is important to remember that this type of research deals with the utilization of human tissue often not much bigger than the period at the end of this sentence.  To classify this conglomeration of cells as human is to say that soil should be considered a tree because it may one day give rise to one.  There is no argument that it must be a daunting task to define when a fertilize egg becomes a human but it seems that in some instances it is apparent that it is not one.  Just as there is no doubt when stating that a toddler is a human, there should be no doubt that an embryo of just a few cells is not a human.

 

Works Cited

Stem Cell Research and the Church “Stem-cell Research and the Catholic Church.” American Catholic: Web. 02 Apr. 2012.

Jefferson’s Letter “Jefferson’s Letter to the Danbury BaptistsThe Final Letter, as Sent.” Jefferson’s Letter to the Danbury Baptists (June 1998). Web. 02 Apr. 2012.

Abortion Wars PBS. PBS. Web. 02 Apr. 2012.

What Will Become of Embryonic Stem Cells Zacharias, David G. et al. Mayo Clinic Proceedings (Jul 2011) pgs. 634-638 Web. 7 Mar. 2012.

Reece, Jane B., and Neil A. Campbell. Biology. Eighth ed. Boston: Benjamin Cummings, 2011. Pgs (1015-1034) Print.


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Rebuttal Argument – Aime lonsdorf

Many medical professionals believe that a person’s obesity can be calculated through a person’s body mass index (BMI), a ratio of a person’s height and weight. The system was deemed nearly perfect by Surgeon General David Satcher in 2001, after he announced that America was the most obese nation (Surgeon General). Although the system admits to having some minor flaws: it is gender and age specific in children only and it uses the same criteria across the board, it is becoming more and more clear how the once seemingly nearly perfect system is far from perfect. For over a decade, medical professionals have been using the BMI system to calculate a person’s percentage of body fat. However, recently, more and more medical professionals have begun to claim that the system is faulty and should not be used to indicate a person’s level of obesity due to the fact that it is not accurately reflective. Currently, medical professionals are producing numerous studies that favor other methods of calculating obesity over the BMI system, although most are still in the testing proscess. The BMI has too many flaws and should not continue to be implemented into American medical practices.

The BMI system is self admittedly faulty. One of the biggest flaws in the system is people who obtain large amounts of muscle mass. While he or she may be physically fit, and relatively healthy, the Center for Disease Control (CDC) would consider a person fitting this description overweight (Devlin). Prime examples of the BMI system mistakenly classifying people are basketball star Kobe Bryant and actor Brad Pitt, none of whom appear to be overweight. Arnold Schwarzenegger, a world class body builder and actor, was categorized into the highest level of obesity (Devlin). With clearly faulty classifications such as these, how can we trust the system? The blatantly defective evidence that disproves the BMI system leads to the question of whether or not America really was the most obese nation in 2001 as previously stated by the Surgeon General.

A series of studies have proven that a person’s BMI does not accurately reflect his or her body fat percentage. A research team from Michigan State University conducted a study that proved, as previously noted, BMI does not accurately calculate body fat. The major issue that occurs is that the same criteria for BMI are used for all adults of a specific gender. According to the research team, it does not make any difference to the BMI system whether you are a 21 year-old olympic athlete or a 75 year-old, immobile man (BMI Not Accurate).

According to the research team BMI should be used cautiously when classifying a persons fatness, especially amongst people who are college aged since most young adults have a high percentage of muscle mass (BMI Not Accurate). The system cannot distinguish the difference between fat and muscle.

WebMD produced an article claiming that a better form of calculating BMI can easily be achieved by measuring a person’s height and hip circumference. This new measurement technique, called the BAI has thus far been able to accurately validate the  fat percentage of African-Americans and a majority of the Hispanic population. This method also has some limitations, but is still in the testing process (Doheny, Kathleen).

According to a 2004 study conducted by The American Journal of Clinical Nutrition, the addition of calculating a persons waist circumference (WC) to their BMI is a better predictor of obesity risk and the illnesses that come with being overweight than the BMI system alone; however the evidence is inconclusive due to the fact that there is not a significant amount of data supporting this theory outside of the American Journal of Clinical Nutrition’s own testing (Janssen, Ian). LiveStrong.com article Alternatives to BMI confirms this theory by stating that measuring the natural waist can give an almost accurate indication of the amount of abdominal fat a person contains. Women with WC of 35 inches or more and men with a WC of 40 inches or more are considered to be risk factors (Holley, Casey).

If the BMI system is clearly flawed and there are other better and more efficient methods of measuring the percentage of a person’s body fat, why are doctors still using it? If a person cannot accurately measure their actual fat percentage, how can we assume that America was at one time the world’s fattest nation? Well, looking deeper into the facts we can prove that this is untrue.

The Huffington Post released an article last year stating that the USA ranks 9th in regards to the percentage of the population that is considered to be obese. But, America is also the most Westernized nation, meaning it is the most industrialized nation with one of the largest populations, giving it an even fatter appearance when compared to other nations. The article primarily discusses how it is not just America that was wrongly accused of being obese, but the entire world; both first world, advancing and third world nations are seemingly increasing in their BMI statistics. The truth is, more and more people are becoming increasingly more fit. If BMI was to be calculated correctly, the US would be near the top of the list, but not the top. That spot is reserved for the small island nation of Nauru (Fattest Place).

While it is clear that alternative methods to the BMI system are not yet medically accepted, it is also clear that to keep using the BMI system would not be beneficial towards the medical community in any means. The only absolute proof that has come from the realization that the BMI system is heavily flawed is the notion that America may in fact not be as obese as though of by the world’s populations. It is important that medical professionals continue to test alternative theories so that the public can be provided with a more reliable method of calculating a person’s body fat percentage.

 

 

“BMI Not Accurate Indicator Of Body Fat.” Medical News Today. MediLexicon International, 09 Mar. 2007. Web. 02 Apr. 2012. http://www.medicalnewstoday.com/releases/64577.php>.

Devlin. “Devlin’s Angle.” Do You Believe in Fairies, Unicorns, or the BMI? Web. 02 Apr. 2012. <http://www.maa.org/devlin/devlin_05_09.html>.

Doheny, Kathleen. “New Alternative to BMI for Measuring Body Fat.” WebMD. WebMD. Web. 02 Apr. 2012. http://www.webmd.com/diet/news/20110303/new-alternative-to-bmi-for-measuring-body-fat>.

Holley, Casey. “Alternatives to BMI.” LIVESTRONG.COM. Web. 02 Apr. 2012. <http://www.livestrong.com/article/113959-alternatives-bmi/>.

Janssen, Ian. “The American Journal of Clinical Nutrition.” Waist Circumference and Not Body Mass Index Explains Obesity-related Health Risk. Web. 02 Apr. 2012. <http://www.ajcn.org/content/79/3/379.short>.

“The Fattest Place On Earth.” The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 01 Apr. 2011. Web. 02 Apr. 2012. <http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2011/01/04/the-fattest-place-on-earth_n_804361.html>.

“The Surgeon General’s Call To Action To Prevent and Decrease Overweight and Obesity.” Surgeon General. Web. 19 Mar. 2012. <http://www.surgeongeneral.gov/topics/obesity/calltoaction/1_1.html>

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Rebuttal Essay – Joe Mleczko

Time for a Change

Affirmative action set itself up for failure at its start. Over the many decades since its introduction to the American society, it has begun exponentially hurting more people than it benefits. The problem is that there are still people that truly believe without the policies of affirmative action, the United States would fall back into a world of bigotry and racism. While this is a hard issue to argue either way (being that it is based solely on speculation) there are a few reasons Americans have to denounce that notion.

Like many problems in the world, constant “rehabilitation” is not required. For example, when an alcoholic makes an attempt to sober up, he may begin a 28-day rehab stay. After those 28 days, he acknowledges he must be cognizant of alcohol abuse; however, it would be unnecessary to continue the rehab stay forever. Affirmative action was the rehabilitation administered to the country at the height of its civil rights movement. Aggressive action was absolutely necessary, but years later it is now time for the country to check out of rehab. Like the recovering alcoholic must always focus on being sober, the United States will always have to promote diversity, just in a less extreme way. For example, according to New York Times writer Richard Pérez-Peña, California state colleges have implemented what they call a “holistic review.” With this system, rather than lump all members from one race together, they take a serious look at background and challenges the person has overcome (Pérez-Peña). This way minorities coming from “good” backgrounds are not given anymore assistance than those in the majority with similar backgrounds, and anyone that comes from a rough upbringing will receive aid regardless of race.

Currently in the United States, being racist is socially unacceptable. This happened due to the progression of “color-blindness,” in which people are evaluated in every day situations based on characteristics other than race. According to Kansas State University professor, Krishna Tummala, affirmative action has effectively brought minorities into the mainstream seeing as they are, socially, far more accepted. To restate, affirmative action countered decisions based on race; so now that race is so often overlooked in society (partially with the help of affirmative action) it stands to reason that affirmative action is no longer needed (Potucek). In support of this idea is the example of the California state schools using their holistic review after many affirmative action policies were abolished in the state. Immediately after the change in affirmative action policies, the state saw a decrease in minority admissions. However, this was countered by the implementation of the holistic review, which saw an increase in minority admissions without explicitly looking at race. This holistic review, as stated above, assesses each person’s background and those truly deserving of aid, receive it. This proves that admission offices elect to promote diversity, even without affirmative action.

The idea of abolishing affirmative action is met with opposition. In a New York Times article, author Adam Liptak superficially dissects the topic of eliminating affirmative action from places of higher education. He said, “The consequences of such a decision would be striking. It would, all sides agree, reduce the number of African-American and Latino students at nearly every selective college and graduate school, with more Asian-American and white students gaining entrance instead.” (Liptak)

The problem here begins with the assertion that “all sides agree,” but in the interest of brevity it can be overlooked. The other part of the problem is line claiming Asian-American and white students would gain entrance more so than current numbers show (to be clear, Asian-Americans are considered to be minorities, so they benefit from affirmative action…). This is insulting on a couple levels and can be interpreted multiple ways. One interpretation is that Liptak believes the abolition of affirmative action would allow for racist admission officers to “go back” to denying minorities due to some racial animosity. The other possible interpretation is extremely insulting towards minorities. Liptak is essentially saying that certain racial groups lack the ability to gain acceptance to elite schools. It can be agreed that intellects of present day come from every background possible. Therefore, with diversity in mind, but more importantly ability, anyone with the proper credentials will have the opportunity to earn acceptance, without the policies of affirmative action.

Another Kansas State University professor, John Fliter, believes affirmative action promotes diverse student bodies and work forces (Potucek). While this claim is true, it does not mean affirmative action is necessary to promote diversity. The United States is made up of so many different people; while at first acceptance of others had to be forced, the nation has since evolved into a much more uniform people that would not function without acceptance of others. Even if this evolution can be attributed to affirmative action, that does not justify keeping its policies around.

The American Association for Affirmative Action, or the AAAA, is an association focused on opposing any federal or state action that attempts to remove affirmative action policies (AAAA). According to their website, “The purpose of affirmative action is to give our nation a way to finally address the systemic exclusion of individuals of talent on the basis of their gender, or race from opportunities to develop, perform, achieve and contribute.” Other than the fact that saying in 2012 affirmative action is finally addressing something that the policies addressed in the 1960’s sounds silly, this organization is essentially saying that without affirmative action significant discrimination would be revived. This claim is based on no evidence whatsoever. In fact evidence supports that diversity would remain even without affirmative action. In Washington State where affirmative action has been banned since 1998, a similar holistic review was instituted and minority acceptance numbers have proven to be stay consistent with the affirmative action era, proving diversity can be maintained without affirmative action (Pérez-Peña).

Timing is everything and for its time, affirmative action did a great job producing diversity in an era run by the majority. Now, less extreme measures can maintain diversity, like those implemented in California and Washington state schools. These less extreme measures ensure that underprivileged individuals are assisted as necessary, but those in the majority truly deserving of acceptance also are not discriminated against.

Fifty years of rehabilitation was long enough for the United States. While still keeping diversity in mind, the nation can handle its “sobriety” in simpler ways.

Works Cited

About the AAAA.” About the American Association for Affirmative Action. Web. 30 Mar. 2012.

Liptak, Adam. “Justices Take Up Race as a Factor in College Entry.” Editorial. The New York Times. The New York Times, 21 Feb. 2012. Web. 30 Mar. 2012.

Perez-Pena, Richard. “To Enroll More Minority Students, Colleges Work Around the Courts.” Nytime.com. The New York Times, 1 Apr. 2012. Web. 2 Apr. 2012.

Potucek, Rachel. “Affirmative Action: Pros and Cons.” Kansas State University. Kansas State University, Fall 2003. Web. 30 Mar. 2012.

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A12: Rebuttal Essay

My Worthy Opponent is Wrong

Your second short paper is due TUE APR 03. It will make an argument essential to your Research Position Paper, due April 19. You’ll write three short papers in total this semester, each proving something essential about your Research Paper. Then you’ll combine the results of your efforts on the three shorter papers into a single longer paper. Here’s the schedule, taken from the course outline.

THU MAR 08 Definition Argument 1000 words
TUE MAR 27 Definition Essay Rewrite
TUE APR 03 Rebuttal Argument 1000 words
TUE APR 10 All 15 Sources Annotated
THU APR 12 Causal Argument 1000 words
THU APR 19 Research Position Paper 3000 words

This Rebuttal Argument will identify (and demolish) the argument you feel is the strongest rebuttal to your own thesis. You know there are plenty of good arguments against your thesis. You’ve chosen a controversial thesis deliberately, knowing that—in fact because—it’s contrary to common knowledge. Lucky for you, common knowledge is almost always wrong, but still you must defend your position against it.

Rebuttal arguments are respectful, specific, and firm. They acknowledge that your position is not the most popular opinion on a topic and that reasonable people hold opinions very different from your own but that nonetheless, yours is the correct position.

What’s the “Opposite” of my thesis?
You may think the only legitimate rebuttal position is the opposite of your thesis, but that’s not true. First, we can’t always clearly state the opposite of a position; second, there are far more than two points of view on a topic. Let me offer an example. Your thesis may be that, contrary to popular opinion, car seats are unsafe for infants, toddlers, and young children. In your research, you may discover experts or studies that claim any of the following:

  1. Car seats are safe for infants, toddlers, and young children
  2. Car seats are safe for toddlers (or infants, or young children, but not all three)
  3. Car seats aren’t perfect, but they’re safer than no car seats
  4. Car seats are safe if used correctly
  5. Car seats are effective in several different types of accident
  6. Car seats are safe if they’re the right size
  7. Car seats are safe unless they’re faulty, broken, or improperly fitted

The best rebuttal argument takes on a real opponent, not a “straw man.” While it may be satisfying to offer a weak argument against your thesis that you can easily demolish, your victory is unlikely to impress your readers as persuasive. Instead, you need to imagine what your most hostile and critical reader is thinking about your argument, acknowledge that she has reasonable objections to your thesis, and then lower the boom on her.

So, what’s your rebuttal? Your rebuttal is to detail all the qualifications that must be met to make a car seat safe, taken directly from your opponents’ arguments. To not injure children, car seats have to be of good quality, the right size for the child (whose size keeps changing), and installed correctly; furthermore, the accident has to be the right kind of accident. If any of these conditions are not met, the child can be injured worse than if there had been no car seat! One by one, you could detail the likelihood that each of the conditions will not be met

Works Cited
Whether the sources you cite in this essay already appear in your earlier posts or not, you’ll need a Works Cited for this assignment. Check the links yourself to be sure they lead back to a page we can all access (even if it’s the page in the databases that “launches” the actual document).

Useful Models
You’ll find several examples of how a professional essay might be refuted with a variety of rebuttals in the Rebuttal Practice post.

Early Feedback to Your Classmates
Should students post early looking for guidance in planning their rebuttal essays, I will respond as promptly as possible, to give the rest of you a chance to learn from our conversations. I applaud the enterprise of early posters, and I’ll always respond as helpfully as I can if I have the time.

ASSIGNMENT SPECIFICS

  • Write your second Shorter Argument paper.
  • The paper will take the form of a Rebuttal Argument, as described above and explained further in the “Rebuttal Practice” post.
  • Identify the strongest rebuttal (or rebuttals)that can be made against your thesis.
  • Examine those rebuttal positions carefully.
  • Refute those positions.
  • Include Works Cited.
  • Call your post Rebuttal Essay—Author Name.
  • But in addition to that placeholder title, also give your essay a proper title. For example, this post is titled “My Worthy Opponent is Wrong.”
  • Publish your definition essay in the A12: Rebuttal Essay category.

GRADE DETAILS

  • DUE TUE APR 03 before class.
  • Customary late penalties. (0-24 hours 10%) (24-48 hours 20%) (48+ hours, 0 grade)
  • Shorter Arguments grade category (20%)
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Rebuttal Practice

A Price Too High

Is Nuclear Power Worth the Risk?

Bob Herbert asks the question in the Opinion pages of the New York Times. It’s pretty clear from the evidence he cites that he thinks the answer is No, it’s not worth the risk (or Yes, the price is too high, if that’s how you phrase the question).

Since he’s willing (sort of) to go on the record with his objections, let’s examine his essay as an opportunity for rebuttal, the better to understand what rebuttal means when it comes time to craft your own essays, days from now.

Insufficient Evidence Rebuttal
WHAT ISN’T: It’s not an effective rebuttal to request more evidence from the author. If the author offers insufficient evidence, or no evidence at all, one good piece of evidence of your own for an opposing point of view can easily refute it.
WHAT IS: Providing that good evidence is an effective rebuttal.

Irrelevant Evidence Rebuttal
WHAT ISN’T: It’s not an effective rebuttal to complain that you really don’t see what the evidence provided has to do with the argument. If the author offers irrelevant evidence, logic should tell you what the evidence does prove, or could prove.
WHAT IS: Pointing out that the evidence supports a different conclusion than the author’s is an effective rebuttal.

Inconclusive Evidence Rebuttal
WHAT ISN’T: It’s not an effective rebuttal to say that the evidence provided doesn’t quite add up to a proof. If the author offers substantial evidence that doesn’t actually support the argument though, as Bob Herbert does in A Price Too High?, you should be able to identify the logical fallacy at fault.
WHAT IS: Demonstrating how a correct interpretation of the evidence proves something other than the author’s argument is an effective rebuttal. In rebuttal of Bob Herbert’s four-paragraph description of cost overruns, for example, you could say: Herbert makes a good case for unanticipated costs of building nuclear power plants, but offers nothing to indicate that the higher costs are unsustainable. Is the electricity generated by nuclear plants more expensive per kilowatt-hour than coal-fired juice? If it is, he should have said so; probably would have said so. If in fact nuclear power is as affordable as traditional electricity, his fretting about cost overruns is a fruitless complaint without real substance.

Stacking the Deck Rebuttal
WHAT ISN’T: It’s not an effective rebuttal to say that the author is unfair to your “side” of the argument and should offer evidence to support your position. But if the author clearly (but usually stealthily) “stacks the deck” by suppressing evidence, as Rob Herbert does in A Price Too High?, you should be able to call him on it easily.
WHAT IS: You could say, for instance: Bob Herbert acts as if the only benefit we obtain from nuclear power is reduced greenhouse gas emissions. If that were the case, the price might truly be too high. But he neglects to mention nuclear power replaces unsustainable fossil fuels; makes us less dependent on foreign oil imports; eliminates the mercury, sulfur, and countless other emissions from burning coal, and improves our national security by making us less beholden to Middle East dictators.

False Analogy Rebuttal
TRUE ANALOGY / FALSE ANALOGY Analogy is prediction based on close comparisons. If I’m planning to release The Matrix Revolutions shortly after the outrageous success of The Matrix and The Matrix Reloaded, I point out that the new film shares the same writing and directing team, an almost identical cast, and the same subject matter as the first two films, and should therefore be a huge success too. What one difference made that analogy false? The new actress who played the Oracle? Or the fact that the script was anticlimactic and the audience was already saturated with better material?
WHAT ISN’T: When Bob Herbert compares the nuclear disaster at Fukushima with the Gulf of Mexico oil spill, he emphasizes that they were both almost unimaginable: nobody could have predicted them, he says. He uses that similarity to prove that a similar nuclear catastrophe could happen here. But surely the fact that Fukushima was unpredictable didn’t cause it to occur. It’s not an effective rebuttal to say that Herbert “uses false analogy” when comparing Fukushima to nuclear plants in the US. But it’s a start.
WHAT IS: An effective rebuttal of a false analogy is one that points out the essential difference that keeps the third Matrix from repeating the first two movies, or in this case, the essential difference between Japanese nuclear plants and US plants. If none are positioned as precariously as Fukushima—on massive, active earthquake-prone fault lines just hundreds of feet from the ocean—he’s got no business saying that the failure of one predicts the failure of the other.

False Choice Rebuttal
FALSE CHOICE Once a false analogy has been made, almost certainly a false choice will follow. Should we put money into getting people jobs, or should we slash government budgets, putting more people out of work? Neither alone may be the real answer, but debates are often framed between two such false choices. The third choice, that we should slash the parts of the budget that reduce employment and spend the savings putting people to work, never gets a hearing.
WHAT ISN’T: When Bob Herbert frames his second question: “whether it makes sense to follow through on plans to increase our reliance on nuclear power, thus heightening the risk of a terrible problem occurring here in the United States,” he’s offering a false choice based on the assumption that more nuclear power necessarily increases risk. It’s not an effective rebuttal to say that Herbert “offers a false choice” when asking us to choose energy futures, but it’s a start.
WHAT IS: An effective rebuttal of a false choice is one that points out the unnamed third choice, in this case, that every new nuclear plant either be built to address all known risks or not be built at all. Another would be to point to countries like France that, unlike Japan, have relied on nuclear power for almost all their energy needs for decades without serious incidents. Do we have to choose between Japan and no nukes? Or could we choose safe nukes?

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Visual Argument- Sam Sarlo

UNPLANNED PREGNANCY PREVENTION: AWKWARD TIMES
-The opening scene shows a girl kneeling on a bed suggestively taking off her scarf, then her guy starts hurriedly ripping off his clothes and tripping over his pants, indicating the false sense of urgency that his sexual desires cause him to feel, and possibly hinting that he has been waiting a long time for this.
-The next scene is a very short shot of a couple rolling over in bed and breaking the bed frame.
-next a couple wearing businesswear stumble into what looks like a closet or storeroom presumably to have sex during an office party, judging by the lei worn by the man, only to find it occupied by another couple.
-The last scene shows a man in bright blue underwear struggling to pull a pair of tight jeans off a woman on a couch, then finally succeeding and sliding on top of her.
-The end of the ad cuts to text and voiceover that say “You didn’t give up on sex, don’t give up on birth control. There are more methods than you think, find yours at bedsider.org.”
The visual argument made in the Ad Council spot for unplanned pregnancy prevention  aims to encourage the use of birth control by appealing to to the audience members’ sense of humor and logic through scenes of awkwardness and sexual desire that they can relate to. All of the actors in the ad were relatively young, which implies that the advertisement is directed more at young adults who are more likely to experience unplanned pregnancy and may not be aware of all of their options for birth control. The scenes of frenzied undressing remind us of times that sexual desire may have clouded our judgement, and encourages us to think ahead so that we will be prepared when the moment arrives. I went to bedsider.org, the webpage for this ad campaign, and it has a number of educational resources including a birth control method comparison and a tool that helps you find out if you are eligible for free birth control. I think that backing up the message in the ad with immediately available resources for the viewers who choose to act on it goes a long way toward their cause of preventing unplanned pregnancy. While without this resource the message of the ad may only nag at the viewer’s mind for a minute before it’s forgotten, showing the website at the end of the ad greatly increases the odds of the viewer taking immediate action, which is presumably the whole point of the ad.
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Bob Dylan ~ The Times they are A-Changin’ (Intro to Watchmen)

Favorite film intro of all time, Watchmen captured the best and worse of the 70s and 80s, and the Bob Dylan music certainly helps.  Worth a watch, for the history.

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Visual Argument- Tyson Still

The article i chose to talk about is Texting and Driving Prevention

My thoughts:

The commercial opens up with 2 girls close to the camera, but the main focus is on a girl in a pink shirt, blue jeans, and hair in a ponytail texting on her cell phone about to walk up a flight of stairs. She seems to be in a high school or could be in a college. Her age could range from 18 to 23.

In the same camera shot as she is beginning to walk up the stairs, still texting on her cell phone, she then trips and falls on the stairs dropping her papers and her cell phone. At first it seems as if she is going to lay there in a shocked moment, butout of embarassment she tries to hurry and grab her phone and papers before help comes to see if she is okay. While doing so the camera shows the girl who was in the picture the whole time close to the cammera and another female walking up the steps about to go help her. Then it seems right as they get there she tells the one girl something, which I’m assuming she is saying she is okay.

The next shot that comes up is an emphasized message which says “NOT EVERYONE SHOULD TEXT AND WALK”. This message shows that yes texting and walking can be dangerous if you’re not careful, but it isn’t dangerous for all. It says not everyone should text and walk which is like saying yes texting and walking is for some people, but not everyone is good at it.

Next scene is a close up on a girl’s cell phone, and as she is driving in a jeep with a guy in the passenger seat and another girl and uy in the back seat. While driving the guy in the passenger seat is talking to the ones in the back seat. The driver who is young aged, late teens to early twenties, is texting rapidly and not paying attention to the road completely. she takes two quick glances at the road while still texting.

The next big part in this seen is while she is texting she must have received a message because as the camera shows her texting to someone, she smiles in the middle of her texting which indicates someone texted her also. This message that must of came to her phone, gave her An extra couple of seconds of looking down at the phone trying to read the message.

In the ending of this scene, she finally looks up for a third time which by then it seems to be to late as the camera gets a shot of a mo9ther and her young daughter walking a cross the street. Te girl that is driving seems as if she is about to run the stop sign, that is in big while letters in the street. As the camera zooms out to show a picture of the whole set up of the jeep, the street, and the mother and daughter, the driver slams on her breaks as the scene cuts out. This indicates that the driver must of hit the mother and daughter which is prooving her careless driving and lack of attention on the road.

The next seen then says ” No One Should Text And Drive”. Then is goes on to say “Stop The Texts Stop The Wrecks”. This is indicating a comparison between the message before that one and this one. How it is basically saying that texting and walking is okay for some people but not all is skilled enough to do it, but no one is really skilled enough to text and drive.

In this scene no one in the car was paying attention thats why the accident happened. Even if the passengers were more responsible to tell the driver to stop texting or helped her look out for the road the accident could have been prevented. The girl obviously isn’t skilled enough to drive and text and from the start she put herself and the others in danger.

The ad is very effective in sending this message of texting a driving preventions. In the overview it says “A texting driver is 23 times more likely to get into a crash than a non-texting driver.” This is a great message to pass along becaus enot many people see the danger in texting iand driving. The feel as though if they keep glancing up at the road they will be okay, but the problem is anything can happen in a split second when someone is driving.

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A11 Definitional Essay Rewrite — Jon Gonzoph

Does Violence in Games Perpetuate Violence in real life?

In most research situations, an ideal experiment is not needed. Normally, many studies on a similar topic will conclude similar results, and a researcher can use those results as a point of comparison to judge other studies by. If writing a paper with a thesis that agrees with the results, it is simple for a researcher to support their thesis by citing these studies. If the opposite, a researcher still has a concentrated group of conclusions to try to find a fault with, and finding studies that don’t come to these results is still a fairly simple matter.

Analyzing the effects of violence in video games does not follow the pattern shown above. It is a controversial subject, and for every study finding a link between violence in games and some negative effect is another claiming that no link exists. Even studies that agree on a general effect differ in concluding on the severity and length of this effect. In a case such as this, an idealized experiment is sorely needed, as it would allow a researcher a sort of template to compare any studies to, consequentially allowing them to separate the strong studies from the weaker ones. This idealized study cannot be found by comparing studies with similar results, for all that would lead to bias by the researcher; instead, only the methodology and the ways the studies interpret the results should be considered. Since the most common study either confirms or disputes the idea that video game violence causes an increase in aggression in real life, I shall be comparing several studies to determine which have the more stringent methods. From this I should be able to find a few criteria to judge studies on, in the hopes of being able to remove those that are obviously biased or otherwise compromised. Though a “perfect” study is unlikely, establishing even one or two criteria to sort studies will be a great help in finding reliable information.

One vital aspect to consider when evaluating studies is how they measured increased aggression. For example, compare the study in Singapore by Sorick et. al. to the study on German adolescents performed by Moller and Krahe. In the first study, four different measurement scales and questionnaires are used; these scales have been in use for years and are thus believed to be fairly accurate (Skoric). These methods of measurement are lists of questions measuring the test taker’s feelings on a variety of hypothetical problems and situations. Each subject’s answers are compared to both the control group and the accepted normal results. In contrast to the first study, not only did the second study only use two methods of measuring aggression, but one of those methods was taken from another of the author’s studies and had not been tested for reliability by an outside source. Both of these experiments used the Buss-Perry Aggression Questionnaire, but the first study used all 29 questions and the second study only uses 7 questions mixed with another 7 questions from a scale used for measuring a completely different type of aggression (Moller).

The conclusions to be drawn from this comparison are fairly evident. A study should use as many tools for measuring aggression as is reasonably possible, for that lessens the chance for anomalous results. Additionally, these tools must be rigorously tested before being used. If one were to use unproven tools, the data gathered is weak due to the possibility of warping the tools to allow the tester to manipulate the results to match with his or her expectations or the tests being flawed in some way. This applies equally to both studies seeking to prove or disprove any negative effects in violent video games.

Another vital variable to consider when judging the worth of studies is the timeframe involved. Studies on aggression in video games can generally be sorted into two categories: those that take place in one session, lasting anywhere from a few hours to a day, and those that test over a longer time period. It would be normal to assume that studies with a longer timeframe, such as 3 weeks in the case of the aforementioned Singapore study or an additional 30 month check as in the case of the German one, would produce conclusions more applicable to average video game use. Even if a short term study conclusively found that playing a video game increases aggression immediately after, that conclusion would be easy to ignore if the effect fades by the time the video game player has had a chance to interact with anyone else or move on to a different activity. [Leaving this spot open for a line with the idea of “Additionally, since aggression tests have been able to attribute an increase in aggression to a variety of activities, showing that one more follows this trend is not very compelling.” But Academic Search Premier is down for me in the past few days, so I’m having trouble finding the source.] Conversely, a long time study that proved the same result would be much harder to brush aside, because it is now proven that violence in video games has a lasting effect.

However, there is a widely held belief in the theoretical model known as the General Aggression model, which states that “media violence exposure not only leads to an immediate increase in aggression in a particular situation but also contributes to the development of an aggressive personality of the game player over time” (Moller). Following the GAM model would mean that even studies done in only a few hours would as effective as long term studies because any increased aggression found there would carry over into a longer time period. The problem is that GAM is not certain to be effective, with one study — “Internet Fantasy Violence: A Test Of Aggression In An Online Game.”  – finding results that directly contradict it. Over a month, the testers found that there was no difference in result between the group who played the same violent game for at least 56 hours and the control group that did not, whereas the GAM method would only be validated if there was an increase in aggression observed over this time (Williams).

Conclusions regarding this variable are more difficult to come to. Though the GAM has some studies that find it does predict behavior, the lack of consensus on this issue leads me to believe that the effects of short term studies should not be extrapolated over longer timeframes. Interpretations of results that subscribe to the GAM theory should also be analyzed closely, because it could skew the author’s views. However, it is not necessary to disregard those results entirely; just the specific sections that predict an increase in aggression over time without their own appropriate data to validate this conclusion. This conclusion only applies to the studies seeking to prove a link between video game violence and increased aggression.

In conclusion, though I have not been able to come to any sort of template indicating an ideal experiment for studying violence in video games, I am able to make some generalizations about which studies are superior. In regards to time, due to the uncertainty of the reliability of GAM and goal of finding the overall effects of video game violence, studies over longer periods of time will be preferred to those that only measure the effects of one gaming session. Studies that gather results using well-known and proven tools will be preferred over studies that use personally created or modified tool. In addition to this, studies that gather data based on multiple scales are preferable to those that only use one scale. Though other significant methodological differences exist, assembling a reference base of studies that meet these criteria is the first step on truly understanding the issue of violence in video games.

Works Cited:

1. Skoric, Marko M. et al. “Grand Theft Auto IV Comes To Singapore: Effects Of Repeated Exposure To Violent Video Games On Aggression.” Cyberpsychology, Behavior & Social Networking 14.10 (2011): 597-602. Academic Search Premier. Web. 7 Mar. 2012.

2. Möller, Ingrid, and Barbara Krahé. “Exposure To Violent Video Games And Aggression In German Adolescents: A Longitudinal Analysis.” Aggressive Behavior 35.1 (2009): 75-89. Academic Search Premier. Web. 7 Mar. 2012.

3. Williams, Dmitri, and Marko Skoric. “Internet Fantasy Violence: A Test Of Aggression In An Online Game.” Communication Monographs 72.2 (2005): 217-233. Academic Search Premier. Web. 7 Mar. 2012.

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