23 Class MON APR 12

End-of-Semester Schedule

  • WED APR 28 will be our last full-class meeting for the semester. By then, your end-of-semester Portfolio will be complete, will have been double-checked for completeness, and will be available to your Professor for final grading.
    • During Finals Week FRI APR 30—THU MAY 06, instead of meeting as a class, and instead of having a Final Exam, you’ll meet with your professor one time in a one-on-one in a Zoom room to conduct your “Final Grade Conference.”
  • Between today and MON APR 26, when your PORTFOLIO IS DUE, only 4 classes remain, and 14 days.
  • If you’ve been keeping up, by now you have posted your 3 short arguments (Definition, Causal, and Rebuttal), and your Visual Rhetoric Rewrite, have a robust White Paper, perhaps one or more short argument rewrites, and will have no trouble posting the first draft of your Research Position Paper by next WED APR 21.
  • There are no special Deadlines for your Short Paper Rewrites, but when your Portfolio is due, on MON APR 26, you’ll need two Rewrites (out of the 3 Definition/Causal/Rebuttal set) AND a Visual Rhetoric Rewrite.
  • If you haven’t posted your 3 short arguments, you are now officially behind.
  • There is no longer time to interact with your Professor over all three of your Short Arguments, receive meaningful feedback, post significant Rewrites, and prepare to compile the results into your Research Paper.

Riddle: The Soccer Penalty Kick

penalty kick

What’s the smartest kick?
To the shooter’s strong side, which the goalie is more likely to guard?
Or to the shooter’s weak side, which the goalie is more likely to block if he guesses right?

The authors of Think Like a Freak give us some details to help us decide.

  • The goal is 12 yards away.
  • It’s 8 yards wide and 8 feet tall.
  • You will kick the ball at 80 miles per hour.
  • The kick will arrive at the net in 0.306818 seconds
  • The goalie can’t wait for you to kick. He has to guess and fling his body toward his choice before you make contact with the ball.
  • Overall, at the elite level, 75% of penalty kicks are successful.
  • If he chooses wrong, your odds of success are about 90%.
  • You want him to choose wrong.
  • Whether you’re left- or right-footed, 57% of goalies will guard your strong side. 41% of the time, they’ll guard your weak side.

Answer in the Reply field below and Post Comment:

  1. What’s the best way to improve your odds of kicking the ball where the goalie isn’t?
  2. Why do so few kickers make the most logical choice?

The Rest of the Agenda

  • You will need to show revision cycles for your Portfolio.
    • IF YOU HAVE NOT ALREADY RECEIVED FEEDBACK ON TWO SHORT ARGUMENTS:
      • Choose a Short Argument (Definition, Causal, or Rebuttal)
      • Add it to the Feedback Please category
      • In a Reply below your chosen Argument, leave a detailed note describing the sort of feedback you require.
        • If you fail to leave detailed instructions, you will receive no feedback.
  • Check Banner for Evaluation of Teacher Effectiveness
    • If you have received this notice, I’ll give you class time to complete the Evaluation
  • Tips for APA Style Citation and References

Revision Examples

helmet

Taking helmets out of football is a very counterintuitive idea itself.

Taking helmets out of football is counterintuitive.

It may seem as if this will hurt the players, but in fact it will help protect the players.

Playing unprotected will help players, not hurt them. 

No helmets will make keep players from taking risky, hard hits, and cause them to have more caution when playing the game.

Playing bareheaded will keep players from tackling head-first, sparing them from head, neck, and brain injuries.

They all will be protected from severe concussions, spinal cord injuries, and developing CTE later in life.

They will be protected from severe concussions, spinal cord injuries, and late-developing CTEs.

There is however, some opposition to this counterintuitive idea.

There is, however, some opposition to this counterintuitive idea.

Many people feel as if there would be no change to the amount of head injuries sustained in a football game.

Many people feel there would be no reduction to the number of head injuries sustained in a football game.

They feel as if players will still hit hard, and make risky plays.

They feel players will still hit hard and make risky plays.

Today football helmets are evolving more and more everyday.

Football helmets are evolving.

Risk compensation is when protective equipment prompts individuals to act more aggressively which increases the potential for injury.

“Risk compensation” is the tendency of players to risk injury through reckless play when equipment upgrades make them feel invulnerable.

If you give an individual better protective equipment, they are going to have an increase in aggression, causing more injuries.

More-protective equipment encourages reckless play, causing more injuries.

Helmets may have been upgraded, and made to absorb hits, but they still do the same damage.

Today’s helmets absorb more hits, but players’ brains suffer the same damage.


Resources for Improving your Work before Portfolio

PORTFOLIO TASK

Annotated Bibliography

  • DUE DATE MON APR 19

Portfolio Task

25 Responses to 23 Class MON APR 12

  1. christianity19 says:

    What’s the best way to improve your odds of kicking the ball where the goalie isn’t?

    Hit the ball where the goalie is not going to be.

    Why do so few kickers make the most logical choice?

    Hitting the ball into the corner

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  2. thecommoncase says:

    the best way to improve your chances of getting the ball in the goal is to kick it in the middle, because the goalie will have already moved at that point and is not going to expect you to kick in the middle. I’m honestly not sure why they don’t do this.

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  3. mrmba1 says:

    Kick to where the goalie originated from (the center). If they dive in advance, they can’t defend the center.

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  4. carsonwentz1186 says:

    Schedule Professor Grade Conference for finals week
    Soccer Penalty Kick Riddle
    Goalie chooses side of goal to block before the kicker even kicks the ball
    Best way of kicking ball: observe what side the goalie seems to be leaning and kick to opposite side
    Why do so few players make logical choice: I believe they are too confident in themselves or are incapable of aiming their kicks
    It is time to begin revising short arguments and visual rhetoric assignments (receiving feedback is necessary to do so)
    It is essentially mandatory to ask for specific feedback on your essays to make effective revisions
    Sentence Polishing exercise (Get to the point and eliminate unnecessary wording)
    Annotated Bibliography Due Monday (APR 19th)
    (I really need to add the new sources I used onto the White Paper ASAP)
    Researched Position Paper Due Wednesday (APR 21st)
    You can chop down an entire paragraph written to achieve a word count in just one or two sentences
    Just the use of syntax can dramatically change the strength of your sentence and overall essay
    Keep an eye out for plus and minus of scholarship (read through essays at least twice to make sure)

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  5. honeysucklelilac says:

    End of Semester Schedule
    -April 28th is the last full-meeting for the semester
    -all three arguments should be posted, finish them by this week
    -finals week will be time for grade conference
    Riddle: Soccer Penalty Kick
    -is the better strategy to shoot to your strong side or your weak side?
    -the best way to improve your odds of kicking the ball where the goalie isn’t would be to shoot straight center
    -so few players pick the most logical place the goalie is not going to be because they don’t want to be seen kicking the ball straight at the goalie
    The Rest of the Agenda
    -you will need to show revision cycles for your portfolio
    -aka it’s time to start working on those revisions if you want better grades
    -the sooner and more detailed you make the kind of feedback you want, the better your feedback will be
    Revision Examples
    -if you’re having trouble revising your portfolio first drafts, look at these examples and cut down on words to make the 1000 more meaningful
    Portfolio Task
    -DUE MON APR 19
    -3000 word researched position paper due WED APR 21
    Annotated Bibliography
    -look at the model, you want to have the cited source, background info AND explain how you used it
    -due monday, if you update your white paper you can just copy and paste it
    at this point you are technically behind, panicking will not help it is time to double down as best as you can and just try and finish the semester
    -your paper is an argument and the purpose is to persuade readers of your opinion
    Resources for Improving you Work before Portfolio
    -brevity and clarity
    -magical dependency
    –independent clauses emphasize claims
    –dependent clauses minimize objections
    -scholarship plus and minus
    –you have to show evidence of your research
    –blend your attitudes with your scholarship
    –if you have to think about whether or not to cite something CITE IT

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  6. justheretopass says:

    4/12/21
    * We opened up class to discuss how fast the year is coming to an end

    * By wed the 28th we should have our portfolio will be complete 

    * During finals week APR 30-Thu May 06 instead of class we will have a one on one in a zoom room to conduct your final grade conference. 

    * Professor had a soccer riddle. The riddle was a penalty shot and we were trying to decide what is the best way to improve your odds of kicking the ball to where the goalie isn’t. The answer was kicking the ball down the middle because goalies spend 5% covering the middle 

    * Your portfolio needs to have feedback on all of our arguments and you must respond to feedback too. 

    * You should ask specific questions when you ask for feedback. 

    * Professor will give you better feedback because he knows what you want now 

    * We then worked on removing unnecessary words in sentences 

    * Keep your annotated bibliography to up to 15 of your most useful sources 

    * No fewer than 10 sources 

    * Beware if your sources come from the public press and advocacy website 

    * How its constructed is 

    * The apa citation 

    * background information 

    * How I used it into your paper 

    * Don’t represent the work of others as your work 

    * Don’t recycle old work from earlier this year 

    * Be careful not to quote out of context. 

    * Annotated Bibliography is DUE mon April 19

    * 3,000 Word Research Paper DUE Wed April 21


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  7. johnwick66 says:

    Writing portfolio due April 26th
    Make sure to complete all requirements placed for the portfolio which are 3 short arguments (Definition, Causal, and Rebuttal), and your Visual Rhetoric Rewrite, have a robust White Paper, perhaps one or more short argument rewrites

    Best place to kick the soccer ball where the goalie is not gonna be is to aim towards the middle since the goalie usually has to predict where the ball is gonna go

    As you are putting together your portfolio make sure to include the new rewrites to two of your short arguments

    Once you complete your rewrites you can ask the professor for a polish (grammar, sentence structure, etc.) check.

    Due next Monday: Annotated Bibliography
    Due next Wednesday: 3000 word research position paper

    What to include in the Annotated Bibliography: Include the citation of the source, the background of it, how it was used in the papers
    It should have between 10-15 sources
    Call the post “Bibliography” -Username

    Use a broad range of credible source types for the bibliography.

    Make sure to look over the resources for improving your work for the research paper.

    For your claims make sure to use very clear (as well as simple ones) (don’t turn a idea in 150 words if it can be said in 25)

    Magical Dependency:
    Independent Clauses Emphasize claims
    Dependent Clauses Minimize Objections

    Scholar ship plus or minus:
    Plus: presenting positive evidence of your scholarship, including your research of relevant material

    Minus: representing the work of others as your own, posting your own earlier work as done for the course,
    Quoting, paraphrasing or summarizing the words, thoughts, or even the argument sequences of others without citation

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  8. icedcoffeeislife says:

    End of the semester schedule
    The last full-class meeting is on Wednesday, April 28th
    Pick 2 out of 3 short paper rewrites
    Final conferences will be during finals week
    Riddle
    Which is the strongest side to kick a penalty goal
    The kicker has to decide where the logical position that the goalie is going to be in.
    75% of the penalty kick goes to the defense’s strong side so the goalies go to defend the strong side and 25% to the left side.
    The strongest places to kick the ball is in the middle
    The rest of the agenda
    You are more likely to get feedback if you ask specific questions for feedback.
    If you are failing to make a revision to your paper, you will not receive any more feedback
    Revision examples
    We looked at different sentences that need help or severely edited.
    The sentences were about wearing helmets in football.
    Portfolio Tasks
    An annotated bibliography is due Sunday April 19thIt should consist of 10 to 15 sources that we have collected throughout our research process
    If you keep up with your white paper the annotated bibliography will be easily completed.
    The only change would be how I’m going to use it, to how I used the information.
    Researched Persuasive argument is due April 21th
    The paper is a compilation of all the research that we have done over the course of the semester.
    It is a minimum of 3,000 words

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  9. mrmba1 says:

    4/12
    Begin rewrites*** four classes left.

    Final polishing stage:
    – Eliminate redundant words
    – Parallelism – items in lists should be same part of speech
    – Review grammar rules

    Annotated bibliography – 15 sources, describe background & use
    When creating the 3000 word essay don’t add fluff, be brief.

    Magical Dependency
    – Independent Clauses emphasize claims (like subject/ stand alone)
    – Dependent Clauses minimize objections (like adjective/ supportive)

    Side Notes:
    – Scholarship and End of year conferences
    – Bibliography due Sunday
    – 3000 words due next Wednesday

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  10. thecommoncase says:

    -I am not hopelessly behind!
    -be ready to beef up portfolio, due APRIL 26
    -focus on content revisions, professor does not want to polish anything until the actual ideas is strong and clear
    -Get in rewrites!! at least 2 from short arguments and a visual rhetoric rewrite
    -add your sources to the white paper; begin your annotated bibliography
    -I have at least 12 sources I think
    -the same material we use for the white paper and our annotated bibliography can be the same
    -annotated bibliography is a summary of the source and an explanation to why they were used
    -look at the annotated bibliography model
    -be sure to thoroughly explain your source summary and why you used it because your reader is not reading the article, so they don’t know why it’s relevant
    -when useless language is removed, the actual strength of the argument is revealed
    -the professor has plenty of pages to look at when revising your essay, lots of things to help

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    • davidbdale says:

      Love this:

      -be sure to thoroughly explain your source summary and why you used it because your reader is not reading the article, so they don’t know why it’s relevant

      3/3

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  11. -There are about 2 weeks left.
    -A penalty kicker stands 12 yards from a soccer net.
    -You should kick the middle once the goalie throws himself to one side.
    -You should have 10 to 15 sources annotated in your bibliography
    -The annotated bibliography is due on Monday.

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  12. imgoingswimming says:

    We start the end of the semester schedule
    The soccer penalty kick is the riddle for today. They should kick directly down the middle because the goalie will jump to one side or the other but not stay in the middle.
    We should stay on top of our assignments and start doing revisions if we haven’t done so already.
    We went over polishing our sentences, we should cut unneeded information from our sentences and focus on the main ideas of each sentence.
    We need to update our annotated bibliography, excluding the current state of research. 10 to 15 sources should be in this.
    Due April 21st is our research positions paper which is 3,000 words, I may have some repeating thoughts in all three 1,000 word arguments. I need to organize some more ideas I believe that way I am not wordy.

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  13. person345 says:

    Four classes remain. Portfolio is due MON 4/26 (SUN 4/25 @11:59). Start revisions to short arguments and visual rhetoric. The best way to improve your odds is by aiming your kick right down the middle. Player don’t really do this strategy. You cannot ask for feedback if nothing is done for revisions. Examples of revisions. Annotated bibliography is due next MON April 19th (Sun the 18th @11:59). Bibliography needs 10-15 sources and a paragraph on “How I used It”. The research paper is the Definition, Causal, and Rebuttal arguments together. Paper is due WED April 21st. An idea that is 200 words can be cut down to just 25 or 30 words. Independent Clauses Emphasize claims and Dependent Clauses Minimize Objections. Give credit to any source you use. Not citing counts as a violation of academic integrity. Don’t misrepresent sources.

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  14. christianity19 says:

    4-12-21

    • WED APR 28 will be our last full-class meeting for the semester. By then, your end-of-semester Portfolio will be complete, will have been double-checked for completeness, and will be available to your Professor for final grading.
    • During Finals Week FRI APR 30—THU MAY 06, instead of meeting as a class, and instead of having a Final Exam, you’ll meet with your professor one time in a one-on-one in a Zoom room to conduct your “Final Grade Conference.”
    • Between today and MON APR 26, when your PORTFOLIO IS DUE, only 4 classes remain, and 14 days. If you’ve been keeping up, by now you have posted your 3 short arguments (Definition, Causal, and Rebuttal), and your Visual Rhetoric Rewrite, have a robust White Paper, perhaps one or more short argument rewrites, and will have no trouble posting the first draft of your Research Position Paper by next WED APR 21.
    • There are no special Deadlines for your Short Paper Rewrites, but when your Portfolio is due, on MON APR 26, you’ll need two Rewrites (out of the 3 Definition/Causal/Rebuttal set) AND a Visual Rhetoric Rewrite.
    • If you haven’t posted your 3 short arguments, you are now officially behind. There is no longer time to interact with your Professor over all three of your Short Arguments, receive meaningful feedback, post significant Rewrites, and prepare to compile the results into your Research Paper.
    • The soccer penalty kick riddle is about how to a score on the goalie
    • An independent clause is a clause that can stand alone as a sentence (i.e., it expresses a complete thought). A dependent clauses (or subordinate clause) is one that cannot stand alone as a complete sentence (i.e., it does not express a complete thought). Remember that a clause has a subject and a verb. An example of an independent clause is I enjoy sitting by the fireplace and reading.
    • A subordinate clause, dependent clause or embedded clause is a clause that is embedded inside another clause. For instance, in the English sentence “I know that Bette is a dolphin”, the clause “that Bette is a dolphin” occurs as the complement of the verb “know” rather than as a freestanding sentence. An example of a dependent clause is Than his sister can.
    • The Paper is an Argument. Its purpose is to persuade readers of the rightness of your opinion based on the evidence you’ve compiled and synthesized.
    • The Paper compiles the work of the entire semester. It uses elements and material from your Definition Essay, your Causal Essay, and your Rebuttal Essay.
    • The Paper shows evidence of significant research. It blends what you have learned form academic and other sources with your own personal experience and observations to produce a unique point of view that could have been produced only by you.
    • The Paper meets the minimum 3000-word requirement. It makes the most of those 3000 words, wasting none on BS or boilerplate. It is not wordy or repetitive.
    • The Paper achieves the high standards of academic integrity. It cites its sources accurately and thoroughly, borrows nothing without citation, and credits every outside influence.
    • The Paper includes a References section. Most papers will need to cite 10 sources to accurately credit the influence of the materials compiled. Be very concerned if your paper cites fewer than seven.
    • Post your Research Position Paper before class on WED APR 21. Include References. Title your post Research—Username. Publish your definition essay in the Research Paper category and your own Username category.
    • Annotated Bibliography is due 4-19-21
    • Portfolio task 3000-word researched position paper is due 4-21-21

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