03 Class WED JAN 30

Here is a lesson in creative writing.

First rule: Do not use semicolons.

They are transvestite hermaphrodites representing absolutely nothing. All they do is show you’ve been to college.

—Kurt Vonnegut Jr., A Man Without a Country

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41 Responses to 03 Class WED JAN 30

  1. johndoe5555 says:

    We learned to write summaries by putting the information into out own language so that it seems as so the material was originally ours.
    It is necessary to leave out information irrelevant to your narrative when writing a summary.
    We are the authors of our summaries, don’t mention the authors who’s material you’re summarizing.
    We use our words to convince our readers of our point of view.

  2. hazelnutlatte123 says:

    Semi-colons are IMPORTANT
    -Riddle: find the African American (Charlize Theron born in South Africa and is an American citizen while Denzel Washington is a born American).
    -make sure to put hypothesis in the my hypothesis category
    -Writing Is recursive and has multiple steps to becoming a complete paper
    -use your sources by finding their purpose
    -purposeful summary is more inclusive
    -your job in writing research is to incorporate the ideas from as many sources as you can.
    – synthesis of your own ideas and best ideas you can find from research
    -purposeful summary=strategic
    -watched video on three-parent child
    – Invitro with DNA from three people
    -Find something counterintuitive in article and use that for the purposeful summary
    -use an idea in purposeful summaries that you can shape an argument with
    -write as if you are describing things for yourself (first hand)
    -make sure to put purposeful summaries assignment in both categories

    • hazelnutlatte123 says:

      The three Parent Baby is only passed on through female generations so it is not a useful solution to having all newborn children healthy.

      • davidbdale says:

        Thank you for taking up this challenge, Latte. What you say is certainly true. Does it matter? If the condition is rare (and particularly if it’s not passed down through heredity), one generation solves the problem, right?

        But I could be wrong. I wasn’t listening for that detail.

    • davidbdale says:

      Purposeful summaries are actually LESS inclusive, MORE exclusive; they exclude all material that does not contribute to the summarizer’s argument.
      3/3

  3. rowanstudent2 says:

    Started off class talking about a quote by Kurt Vonnegut Jr. He says not to use semicolons even though they are very useful. They separate a independent and dependent clause.

    Riddle
    “Find the African-American”
    Denzel Washington or Charlize Theron
    Washington was born in America as were his parents, while Charlize Theron was born in South Africa and an American citizen so she is the African-American although Washington has African descent.

    Access Checklist
    Made sure everyone did everything up to date

    My Hypothesis in Two Categories
    Made sure our hypotheses were in two categories (“Blog Name” and “My Hypothesis”)

    Purposeful Summary Lecture/Demo
    It is important to create an article your own and make the material your own paper
    Writing is a recursive process
    As you confront your new sources, your first job is to determine what about them is important
    Parts of the article are relevant or irrelevant. It just depends on the purpose of your paper.
    As long as you give credit to the author of the source to avoid plagiarism.
    You should try to incorporate as many sources as you can to show that you did really well during the research project.
    A purposeful summary is a strategic summary.

    Ethics of a Three-Parent Baby
    Watched a video about making babies with three kinds of DNA
    Starts off the summary with “It seems counterintuitive that…”
    It left out a lot of information like that it was a news report, the participants, etc.

    Africa Should Screen Americans for Measles
    A Nigerian writer mocks US disease concern

    Electric Cars
    “New Study: Electric Vehicle Use Does Not Reduce CO2 Emissions”
    It actually has an effect if the country is coal-based mainly

    Purposeful Summary Assignment
    Strategies to Consider
    Try to create topics that argue with your own opinion
    Don’t begin citing your article
    Don’t use the words “talks about”
    Begin summaries with “It seems counterintuitive that…”
    Make an argument of your own, one that maybe contradicts the original argument
    Write as if your describing it first hand
    Argue and persuade
    Do the Apple FacePalm article as one and use two from Counterintuitivities Category
    DUE NEXT WEEK

    • davidbdale says:

      First reaction:
      Electric Cars
      “New Study: Electric Vehicle Use Does Not Reduce CO2 Emissions”
      It actually has an effect if the country is coal-based mainly

      Actually, the benefit of electric cars is apparent in countries that DON’T burn coal or other fossil fuels for electricity. If electricity is generated clean (as with hydro turbines), then it eliminates CO2 emissions BOTH at the plant, and in the car.

    • davidbdale says:

      They separate a independent and dependent clause.

      Actually, semicolons separate complete sentences or INDEPENDENT clauses. I should have corrected the student who said otherwise instead of being impressed that he knew and shared about clauses.

      4/3

  4. nousernamefound1 says:

    Riddle:
    Denzel Washington is considered African American, but wasn’t born in Africa. Charlize Theron was born in Africa and is American. We need to specify the definition of African American, it needs more clarity.

    Purposeful Summary:
    Be able to read some examples, but at the same time gain a better understanding of what the professor mean by counterintuitive. A “purposeful summary” doesn’t bother to recount the entire subject matter of an article. Without identifying the author, it will be considered plagiarism. Be proud of your findings. Start with “It seems counterintuitive that”, before every purposeful summary.

    Ethics of a Three-Parent Baby:
    Objective is to prevent birth defects. This percentage is low but its still important for the baby. Dr explained that it doesn’t create hair or experience, but that might be opinion based. The DNA should only be used if the mother wants a more healthy baby. You can transfer the mitochondria and still have a successful pregnancy, but the practice hasn’t been shown on humans. My approach would be a negative approach. I would have to see the price of the procedure.

    Africa Should Screen Americans for Measles:
    Africans fear Americans more than they we fear them. Africa wants Americans screened before they visit the country. Measles is more contagious and with the history of measles in the U.S, Author says that we should fear ourselves. The United States has problems seeing problems in their own country because they are always worried about whats going on in another countries.

    Notes: You can try to argue the other side of the argument at any time in this class. Do not begin by saying “In the article, ……..”, this is your summary. Also the author of the article should never be brought up in the summary. You have turned it into your own article.

  5. g903254 says:

    Purposeful Summary

    The ability to turn a source into something that fits your purpose. Determine what is important. In a regular summary you would have to list all important details, but with a purposeful summary you don’t have to. You only have to take points that you can incorporate into your own point of view. However little you borrow you limit “plagiarism attacks.” Be proud of discovering a new source of information. Hiding the fact that you learned from other people hurts your argument. It’s best to have many sources. A Purposeful Summary is a Strategic Summary. Start with, “It seems counterintuitive that . . .” Doesn’t identify author, doesn’t pull quotes, and only generated by the author of the Purposeful Summary. Practice changing the material into your own language.

    Ethics of a Three Parent Baby

    Counterintuitive because it is “normal” to have only two parents, but in the UK it’s possible to have three through Vitro-Fertilization. Very experimental. Replacing mutated cells with normal cells. 1/10th of a percent is the third parent. tiny, but important. DNA used is very specific to only fighting mutations. The DNA doesn’t effect structural features. Is it too expensive for the “everyman?” How successful? Attempted with embryos, but never carried to term.

    Africans should Screen Americans

    More Africans are inoculated against measles than Americans. In America inoculation percentage at 95% which is dangerous because it can cause a large outbreak that couldn’t be protected by the “herd.” Measles is nine times contagious as Ebola. Mexico has a higher inoculation rate than the U.S. Counterintuitive that all immigrants must have a full panel of immunizations while Americans don’t.

    Electric Vehicle Use Does Not Reduce CO2 Emissions

    Very inefficient in delivery of electric charge. Still uses fossil fuels through charging electric vehicles. If your country is coal based then electric cars are worse then gas powered vehicles, but country like Paraguay which are hydro-electric based are great for having electric vehicles.

    No requirement to be honest. Do not begin with, “In the article . . .” Suppress the identity of the article and its author(s). Write in the first person. This summary is for a purpose by arguing, demonstrating, and persuading.

    • davidbdale says:

      Beautiful work overall, G. I’m very impressed with your formatting, decision to cluster Notes around each of the Summaries.

      If your country is coal based then electric cars are worse then gas powered vehicles,

      *If your country is coal-based, THEN electric cars are worse THAN gas-powered vehicles.

      4/3

  6. wazoo1234 says:

    purposeful summaries: As you confront sources you must decide what information is important and relevant. It is about the job and place your putting your work to. It is exclusionary compared to a regular summary. Incorporate own ideas and make your own masterpiece.Synthesis of your own ideas of the research you found. Strategic summary. Find something counterintuitive and use that to solely focus on a topic. do not name sources/ authors. Electric vehicles are not safe for environment. They still run on coal. You can adopt any attitude to the material you like. You can. lie about what you believe. You are the author. Write as if it is your own work. Must begin with the phrase: “It seems counterintuitive that”. Argumentative and persuasive, use words to convey that.

    • davidbdale says:

      It is about the job and place your putting your work to.

      It is about the job and place YOU’RE putting your work to.

      “It seems counterintuitive that”.

      “It seems counterintuitive that.”
      Periods and commas ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS go inside the quotation marks.

      Strong Notes overall.
      3/3

  7. daphneblake25 says:

    -purposeful summaries are more like arguments
    -determine what about first sources is most important
    -exclusionary process vs a summary which is encompassing everything that was said; ps only incorporate what you think is important
    -avoid plagiarism by citing source origin in summaries
    –synthesis of your own ideas and inclinations
    -its similar to gm food that farmers and bioengineers spruce up with wax and other seemingly fine chemicals to have a longer shelf life
    -how long until the world is no longer having natural birth and partaking in a build-a-bear like system for their children
    -gateway medical procedure for governments to delve deeper into human Bodie and customize them per say into what they want them to look like; cover up
    -leave out any irrelevant information that doesn’t help prove the author’s point
    -good excersice is to argue the other side of something you disagree or agree with
    -three purposeful summaries due by next Tuesday feb 5
    -do not use the language “the author talks about an earthquake”
    -start all summaries with “it seems counter intuitive that”

  8. nina525 says:

    Semicolons are used to separate dependent and independent clauses.
    Turning sources into your own and recording the information into your paper is a strategy towards purposeful summary
    A regular summary is more inclusive
    A purposeful summary allows you to shape information to your own idea.
    When summarizing articles begin with “It seems counterintuitive that”.
    It s possible to produce a summary of an artel that is the complete opposite of the authors claims
    Practice changing material into your own language.
    Years ago, the world was afraid the ebola would take over.
    New measles outbreak in Washington State
    Purposeful summary may or ma not contain all the information given by the original author.
    Electric cars can be expensive, but ill be running on coal and natural gas.
    Lithium batteries within the car are highly explosive.
    Never use “Talks about” language” because you are the author when writing a purposeful summary.
    Choose two articles from the counterintuitive category and write a purposeful summary about them, and the “FaceTime Bug”.
    Due Tuesday, 11:59 pm!

    • davidbdale says:

      Semicolons are used to separate dependent and independent clauses.

      Actually, semicolons separate complete sentences or INDEPENDENT clauses. I should have corrected the student who said otherwise instead of being impressed that he knew and shared about clauses.

    • davidbdale says:

      “It seems counterintuitive that”.

      Periods and commas ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS go inside the quotation marks.

      Strong Notes overall.
      3/3

  9. chavanillo says:

    Semicolon separates dependent and independent claws. Charlize was born in South African. She is a African American. Denzel Washington is an American. He was born here in America. I will be writing 3 short papers. To determine what is important about the. If ask to summarize chapter summarize it. More exclusionary process more inclusive it represents all what the article said. The part of the piece of the material that you could. shape it on your own needs. Purposeful summary may in fact share very little of the content of the original sources. It does remain truth to the original, or to a credible. Find 3 sources and summarize them in 2 paragraphs to highlight idea. Pick 2 and one we all have to due. A video of 3 humans making one baby.

    Summary:
    DNA doesn’t determine how they look like. Mitochondrial is affected it causes diseases. Is really expensive. It’s successful to make normal children. Vitro fertilization. Genetic technology to make normal babies. Or just for rich people. It seems counterintuitive that… start like this. Technique on what is happening. Rich people will be able to afford healthy babies. For this kind of summary we need to practice to change the material and make it our own as if we written it. Not using names or authors from the sources.

    Summary:
    Measles is breaking up in Unites states. It killed 430 children a day in 2011. We fear more fro them. Africans were screening Americans. Africans should be screened before coming to America because measles are very dangerous like the ebola. They were all forcibly immunized against measles. Even tough there country is a higher rate than the US.

    Summary:
    Coal, Oil and gas. Pollution. CO2 foil. Electric vehicle use does not reduce CO2. Only be running by coal because everything is going to be with electricity.

    3 summaries: Show integrity don’t need to be sincere. As long your writing indicates an understands of the counterintuitive. My own work summary. Start with It seems counterintuitive that…. Use what your learn about the earthquake. Convince the reader of your point of view. To turn it in title is summary-Username. One for the apple bump bug and 2 of my chosen. campany Paying hackers that could be a counterintuitive.

    • davidbdale says:

      Semicolon separates dependent and independent claws.

      Actually, semicolons separate complete sentences or INDEPENDENT clauses. I should have corrected the student who said otherwise instead of being impressed that he knew and shared about clauses.

  10. jets1313 says:

    Notes
    – semi colons separated dependent and independent clauses, does both the job of a period and a comma
    purposeful summary:
    – Most important technique of research writing
    – writing Is recursive, it goes back and forth based on readings and writings
    – find the important parts of the text in which you can incorporate ideas that help support your claim
    – Is a strategic summary
    – don’t need to identify authors, or say say he said this or she said that.
    – need to change it in to your own language
    – leave out anything irrelevant to the main argument
    – in HW summary begin with “Its seems counterintuitive that”

    Homework
    – 3 purposeful summaries
    – read articles from the counterintuitive list
    – your writing should indicate an understanding of the counterintuitive argument
    – write as if its Its a 3 paragraph summary of your own work
    – use what u learned to make an argument of your own
    – due Feb 05 midnight

    • davidbdale says:

      Semicolon separates dependent and independent claws.

      Actually, semicolons separate complete sentences or INDEPENDENT clauses. I should have corrected the student who said otherwise instead of being impressed that he knew and shared about clauses.

    • davidbdale says:

      Very strong distillation of the purpose and technique of Purposeful Summary, Jets.
      3/3

  11. pomegranate4800 says:

    “Helpful Lesson:”
    – Semicolons separate independent and dependent clauses.
    Riddle:
    – Denzel Washington was born in America. Charlize Theron was born in south Africa and is literally a African citizen, but she also lives in America.
    Purposeful Summary:
    – It is important to make a source your own and show its true purpose.
    – Summarizing the chapter would entail taking all the important points out of the chapter.
    – A purposeful summary is more inclusive.
    – You’re essentially finding a piece of detail that you can use to fit your needs, and understand things in your own point of view.
    – Your job is to incorporate your ideas from many sources.
    – It’s supposed to be a synthesis of your own ideas.
    – It is a strategic summary that could be different from other people who are reading the same material.
    – Ignores a lot of information and participants. Does not have to identify that it is a news report, or author, or the fact that it could be a discussion.
    – No reason to be honest. You can lie about what you believe.
    Three Parent Baby:
    – The three parent baby is taking DNA from two female eggs, but it is only passed on through female generations. It is not worth it to try if you’re not 100% positive of having a girl.

    • davidbdale says:

      Semicolon separates dependent and independent claws.

      Actually, semicolons separate complete sentences or INDEPENDENT clauses. I should have corrected the student who said otherwise instead of being impressed that he knew and shared about clauses.

    • davidbdale says:

      – Summarizing the chapter would entail taking all the important points out of the chapter.
      – A purposeful summary is more inclusive.

      Not exactly, Pomegranate.
      Summarizing an entire chapter as pure summary would involve eliminating many details, but to be complete it would have to cover all the main points. By contrast, a Purposeful Summary is more EXCLUSIVE. It can ignore anything irrelevant to the new author’s purpose (in this case: you!).

    • davidbdale says:

      Three Parent Baby:
      – The three parent baby is taking DNA from two female eggs, but it is only passed on through female generations. It is not worth it to try if you’re not 100% positive of having a girl.

      Umm. The primary benefit to the primary parents of including the mitrochondrial DNA of a third “parent” is achieved immediately in the “first” new generation. The child of “three parents” avoids the genetic disaster of faulty mitrochondrial DNA from the primary mother.

      The new genetic characteristic transfers only through female offspring, but that’s OK. The 100% positive benefit has already been achieved with the first birth.

    • davidbdale says:

      Nonetheless very fine Notes, Pomegranate, despite all my quibbling.
      3/3

  12. nj908 says:

    purposeful summary is a strategic summary
    the UK has now been allowed to create a three parent baby
    open with “it seems counterintuitive that…”

  13. nyaj32 says:

    Semicolon: Separates an independent and dependent clause
    Purposeful Summary represents only the parts of the source that you are interested in
    Purposeful Summaries allow the reader to pick out only information that is necessary for their own research. It is a more efficient way to gather information from your sources to be used in your research.
    Start my summaries with, “It seems counterintuitive that.”
    You can use any attitude while writing summaries. You can argue for a side that you disagree with. Draw any conclusions that you would like.
    One Sentence Summary: It seems counterintuitive that having three parents to help a baby be healthier is good because it can cause more unknown problems down the road.

  14. biggarz7 says:

    Semicolons are used to separate an independent and dependant clauses
    Purposeful summaries are used to shape what you need for your essay
    These summaries surpress the article and author
    Take any side of an argument you want
    Electric vehicles do help the environment however like everything it has setbacks

  15. doorknob9 says:

    Semi colons separate dependent and independent clauses. Africans and American is about how Charlize Theron was born in South Africa and Denzel Washington was born in the United States. Make sure to make a source your own and show its true purpose. Purposeful Summaries also let the audience pick out only information that is necessary for their needs. Give credit to the author to avoid plagiarism. It’s counterintuitive that there would be such thing a as a three parent baby but that’s what is happening in the United Kingdom. The perks of this is in case a woman has an unhealthy egg with defective mitochondrial DNA, the second woman’s healthy egg can replace it. It’s counterintuitive that Africans have more to fear from American visitors than we have to fear from them but due to an outbreak of measles coming from the United States, that’s what’s happening. Measles is nine times as contagious than Ebola and killed 430 kids a day in 2011. If the disease reaches Africa, it can cause a huge measles outbreak there too. The United States cares more about immigrants carrying diseases into our country than about our citizens sending them to other countries as well. It’s counterintuitive that people hire photographers and throw them into scenes of grave danger on the basis of the audiences need to understand catastrophes and then accuse them of putting out material about such events. Electric car can drastically lower the amount of carbon emissions drivers produce. Make sure all in text citations are in APA style.

    • davidbdale says:

      Semi colons separate dependent and independent clauses.

      Actually, semicolons separate complete sentences or INDEPENDENT clauses. I should have corrected the student who said otherwise instead of being impressed that he knew and shared about clauses.

    • davidbdale says:

      Very strong Notes, Doorknob. I like that you crystallized the counterintuitivity of the examples.
      3/3

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