Enough About You- PardonMyFrench

Enough About You

Money seems to have a big role in society; having less makes it harder to get further. Money is valuable in different ways, even when it can’t be seen physically. In today’s society, faith must be maintained in the government and banking system in hopes that money is being handled in the proper manner. If not, all money would be hidden under mattresses around every Americans houses. I have no clue what happens in the banks, or how they take care of money. I always thought money was simple; people were either rich or poor—that’s it. However, being introduced to this assignment, the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts now seem similar. We don’t actually ever see money being transferred. When paychecks are given out, cash isn’t what is handed out, nor does anyone receive a physical check. The money’s all directly transferred to a bank account, and we must trust that all the money is really there.

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3 Responses to Enough About You- PardonMyFrench

  1. davidbdale says:

    Very nice, PMF. Just a couple notes.
    —every Americans houses.
    That can’t be right.
    —However, being introduced to this assignment, the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts now seem similar.
    This says that the Fei and other currencies were introduced to this assignment.
    Nice work overall.

  2. pardonmyfrench13 says:

    Yea I just noticed the incorrect wording. Maybe I should have put “around every American home” instead.
    Thank you!

    • davidbdale says:

      Good fix. Let me help with the other.
      When you say

      However, being introduced to this assignment, the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts now seem similar.

      there’s no subject to attach the “being introduced” phrase to. Readers need to know who was introduced, so they grab the nearest candidate, in this case: The Yap Fei. Therefore, the sentence confusingly claims that the Fei, having been introduced to the assignment, now seem similar. That can’t be what you meant. The correction is to supply a subject for the introducing.

      However, having been introduced to this assignment, I now see similarities between the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts.

      OR, better yet, avoid those “being introduced” phrases altogether:

      However, this assignment makes clear the similarities between the Yap Fei, US gold, French francs, Brazilian cruzeros, and debit accounts.

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