The ROBUST VERBS Exercise Modeled

One of your classmates has submitted a set of revisions for the “Robust Verbs” paragraph. It contains some good work, but also neglects a substantial number of available improvements.

Consider this post an example of the sort of advice you might have received if I were doing feedback on all your posts. It will be very thorough—and probably seem completely over the top—since I will have to do only one.

You may want to return to your own Robust Verbs post for revisions after you see this. I won’t grade them individually, but they’ll become part of your Non-Portfolio collection at the end of the semester. Be radical. It’s just one paragraph, but it can be an extraordinary paragraph.

I’ll respond to the post sentence by sentence:


Vancouver faces a huge problem with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits.

—Faces is a pretty robust verb (better than is for sure), but it could be stronger to describe a town struggling with heroin addiction and crime. 
—Scan your work always for double-tells. First you say there’s a problem; then you say what the problem is. First you say there are several advantages; then you name the advantages. Here the double-tell is 1) faces a huge problem; 2) addicts committing crimes.
—What’s the solution? If “addicts committing crimes” is an obvious problem, you don’t have to call it one.
—What’s the real SUBJECT of the sentence? Vancouver? Addicts? Crime? Vancouverites?
—What are the robust VERBS that address those subjects?:
—POSSIBLE SUBJECT/VERB PAIR: Vancouver is suffering a crime surge.
—POSSIBLE SUBJECT/VERB PAIR: Heroin addicts are devastating Vancouver. 
—POSSIBLE SUBJECT/VERB PAIR: Vancouver residents are threatened.
—The strongest candidate is Crime. It’s a huge problem if there’s enough of it. But what kind of crime is the issue here? “Crimes to support their habits” says the original. Those would be property crimes: burglary, robbery, breaking-and-entering, muggings. 
—And who cares about property crimes? The City? Or the Residents? 

POSSIBLE REWRITE: Heroin addicts are mugging and stealing from Vancouverites in huge numbers to support their habits.


“Free heroin for addicts” is a program that has continued to do everything to stop addicts while crime rates have increased significantly due to addicts.

I had to add the verb is to this sentence. It was missing from the original.
—Continued and increased are fairly robust verbs (better than is for sure), but let’s take a close look and decide whether continuing and increasing are the best actions to describe the situation.
Doing and stopping are also represented here, but in the weaker roles of infinitives (to do, to stop), not primary verbs, weaker because of their supporting role.
—Scan your work always for needless verbs to be. Here we can easily eliminate the is by re-phrasing: The “free heroin for addicts” program has continued.
Eliminate repetition whenever possible. You’ve already said addicts are committing crimes, so you can cut “crime rates have increased significantly due to addicts.”

—What’s the real SUBJECT of the sentence? “Free heroin for addicts”? The crime rate? 
—What are the robust VERBS that address those subjects?:
—POSSIBLE SUBJECT/VERB PAIR: “Free heroin for addicts” is solving that problem.
—POSSIBLE SUBJECT/VERB PAIR: The crime rate has decreased because of “free heroin for addicts.”
—The strongest candidate is the program. It keeps addicts from mugging and robbing people (which reduces the crime rate).

POSSIBLE REWRITE: “Free heroin for addicts” is solving that problem.


It’s clear addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives.

The verbs here are is and have. Neither is robust. The gerund getting (a weaker verb form) is also used.
—What’s the real SUBJECT of the sentence?: Addicts.
—What do the addicts do?: Struggle.

POSSIBLE REWRITE: Addicts struggle to get through their days.


Activities like jobs, interactions and relationships are hard to continue solely for their using habits.

The verb here is are. The infinitive to continue (a weaker verb form) is also used. We can do better than that.
—We already know addicts are struggling with their days. And let’s use get through as a primary verb. Combining this sentence with the one before gives us: 

POSSIBLE REWRITE: Addicts struggling with addiction can’t get through the day, let alone keep a job or maintain a relationship.


Heroin users will do whatever they have to just to possess the drug.

—The verb here is do, and the sentence contains an infinitive (a weaker verb form) to possess.
—A prior sentence already says addicts are robbing and stealing to buy drugs. That’s already better than the vague “do whatever they have to.” 

POSSIBLE REWRITE: Addicts mug, burgle, and rob to support their habits. 


Breaking and entering as well with stealing are the crimes typically committed.

POSSIBLE REWRITE: Addicts mug, burgle, and rob to support their habits.


The limits are endless to where the addicts will go to retrieve the drug to feed their addiction.

POSSIBLE REWRITE: Desperate addicts mug, burgle, and rob, or worse, to support their habits.


The flaw in the program won’t help addicts stop using heroin, but instead save the city from the rising crime rate.

—Help is a pretty robust verb. Save is pretty good too. The participial using (a weaker verb form) is also used. But let’s be sure we have the subjects right.
—The subject appears to be “the flaw,” which does not appear to be identified. Whatever the flaw, it doesn’t end addiction, but it is reducing the crime rate.
—Obviously, the answer to the mystery is that NOT ENDING ADDICTION is the flaw.

POSSIBLE REWRITE: While the program does not end addiction, it is reducing  the crime rate.


By providing the drugs, the addicts will be off the streets, in all will prevent them from committing minor street crimes, and out of the hospital.

The primary verbs here are be and prevent. The participials providing and committing (a weaker verb form), are also used.
—I strongly suggested you eliminate introductory “By phrases” in the paragraph for this reason: The sentence says that THE ADDICTS PROVIDE THE DRUGS. We know they don’t, but the grammar says, “The addicts—by providing the drugs—will be off the street.” That’s just wrong.
—The other grammar error here is to attempt to combine “committing street crimes” and “out of the hospital” as objects. “Out of the hospital” isn’t an object at all.

—What’s the real SUBJECT of the sentence? It doesn’t have one. SOMEBODY is providing the drugs, but the sentence doesn’t identify WHO. I suggest the city of Vancouver.

POSSIBLE REWRITE: By providing clean heroin, the city KEEPS addicts off the street and out of the hospital, and ELIMINATES the need for them to rob and steal.


Hospitals shouldn’t have to look after drug users who choose to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles, on top of that not being able to pay for the hospital fees.

—What’s the real SUBJECT of the sentence? Hospitals? Users? Drugs? Needles? Fees?
—What are the robust VERBS that address those subjects?:
—POSSIBLE S/V PAIR: Hospitals don’t have to care for addicts.
—POSSIBLE S/V PAIR: Heroin addicts no longer clog the emergency rooms. 
—POSSIBLE S/V PAIR: Bad drugs and unsanitary needles no longer land addicts in the hospital.

—The strongest candidate is the ADDICTS, who used to buy bad drugs, use dirty needles, and clog the emergency room without being able to pay for their care. They don’t do that now.

POSSIBLE REWRITE: Heroin addicts unable to pay for their treatment no longer clog the emergency rooms with illness brought on by bad drugs and dirty needles.


“Free heroin for addicts” gives people heroin the cleanest way possible, but this act will only fix the city, not the addicts’ wellbeing.

—Gives and fix are fairly robust verbs. And the name of the program, “Free heroin for addicts,” is the right subject.
—A prior sentence has already said that “the program does not end addiction but is reducing  the crime rate.” So this sentence may not be needed at all.

POSSIBLE REWRITE: While the program does not end addiction, it is reducing  the crime rate.

Put it all together

Heroin addicts are mugging and stealing from Vancouverites in huge numbers to support their habits. “Free heroin for addicts” is solving that problem. Addicts struggle to get through their days. Addicts struggling with addiction can’t get through the day, let alone keep a job or maintain a relationship. Addicts mug, burgle, and rob to support their habits. Addicts mug, burgle, and rob to support their habits. Desperate addicts mug, burgle, and rob, or worse, to support their habits. While the program does not end addiction, it is reducing  the crime rate. By providing clean heroin, the city keeps addicts off the street and out of the hospital, and eliminates the need for them to rob and steal. Heroin addicts unable to pay for their treatment no longer clog the emergency rooms with illness brought on by bad drugs and dirty needles. While the program does not end addiction, it is reducing  the crime rate.

Eliminate the Repetitions 

Heroin addicts are mugging and stealing from Vancouverites in huge numbers to support their habits. “Free heroin for addicts” is solving that problem. Users struggling with addiction can’t get through the day, let alone keep a job or maintain a relationship.  Desperate addicts mug, burgle, and rob, or worse, to support their habits. By providing clean heroin, the city keeps addicts off the street and out of the hospital, and eliminates the need for them to rob and steal. Heroin addicts unable to pay for their treatment no longer clog the emergency rooms with illness brought on by bad drugs and dirty needles. While the program does not end addiction, it is reducing  the crime rate.

Final Polish 

While heroin addicts in large numbers have been mugging and stealing from Vancouverites for years to support their habits, a “free heroin for addicts” is solving that problem. Users struggling with addiction can’t get through the day, let alone keep a job or maintain relationships, so, to support their habits, they commit property crimes that often lead to violence. By providing them with clean heroin, the city is keeping addicts off the street and out of the hospital, and eliminating the need for them to rob and steal. Furthermore, addicts unable to pay for their treatment no longer clog the emergency rooms with illnesses brought on by bad drugs and dirty needles. While the program does not end addiction, it is reducing the crime rate, keeping Vancouverites healthier, and saving the city money.

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Rebuttal- person345

Hi Professor Hodges, I am not sure where to start my Rebuttal argument. There is not many refutations against Covid-19 and travel deprivation.

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Grammar Exercise – iwantpopsicle

If a primary caretaker has a negative attitude towards their child, it increases the risk that their child will grow up hostile towards others. And it’s not just aggression towards others that results from child abuse; a large amount of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. The reason for this negative behavior is that the children don’t learn appropriate techniques for handling life’s disappointments. If you aren’t raised with coping skills, you’re much too likely to act ‘inappropriately’ than if you have developed more reasonable approaches. The effect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers”, is that everyone gets the child they deserve.

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Grammar Exercise- Thecommoncase

When primary caretakers release negative attitudes towards their child, it increases the risk of their child become more hostile towards others. Not only does hostility towards others result from child abuse, a large number of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. This negative behavior occurs when children do not learn appropriate techniques for handling life’s disappointments. If a child is not raised with coping skills, they’re much more likely to act inappropriately than if the child had developed these coping skills. The effect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers,” is that everyone gets the child they deserve.

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Grammar Basics-person345

If a primary caretaker has a negative attitude toward a child, they increase the risk that their child will grow up hostile towards others. And it’s not just aggression toward others that results in child abuse; a large amount of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. The reason for this negative behavior is because children don’t learn appropriate techniques for handling life’s disappointments. If a child is not raised with coping skills, they are likely to act “inappropriately” then if they have developed more reasonable approaches. The affect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers”, is that everyone gets the child they deserve.

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Sonnet 29

FIOS was screening a movie in which someone playing Shakespeare was talking to someone playing his patron and king. Shakespeare was laying on the praise pretty thick, and the king knew full well we was being lathered up, but they were both enjoying the game.

Shakespeare topped off his praise with some lines that ran:

When, in disgrace with fortune and men’s eyes,
I all alone beweep my outcast state,
And trouble deaf heaven with my bootless cries,
And look upon myself and curse my fate,
Wishing me like to one more rich in hope,
Featured like him, like him with friends possessed,
Desiring this man’s art and that man’s scope,
With what I most enjoy contented least;
Yet in these thoughts myself almost despising,
Haply I think on thee, and then my state,
(Like to the lark at break of day arising
From sullen earth) sings hymns at heaven’s gate;
       For thy sweet love remembered such wealth brings
       That then I scorn to change my state with kings.

That’s Sonnet 29 he was reciting, one line of which I particularly like and want to use the next time a friend of mine has something I want, like friends to go out with on a weeknight:

Featured like him, like him with friends possessed,

The double “like him, like him” slays me. OK, so maybe I get a little carried away. But, hey, it’s Shakespeare.

Today I wanted to share something with you from that sonnet, and by accident, I ran across this, which is what I’ve decided to share:

It’s going to make Shakespeare a lot easier to memorize. There’s a Rhetoric lesson in there for those who can find it. Enjoy the song. [The last lines slay me now. Thank you, Rufus.]

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Causal Rewrite – mrmba1

Long Live Drummers

Of all the ways to extend and increase the quality of one’s life, few would’ve guessed that drumming would help in doing just that. Drummers are typically stereotyped as the wild card or animal of every band- with little help from the muppets. They’re the one that’s in the clouds more than on the ground, and more often than not making questionable and risky life choices. However, compared to other members of a band such as guitar players and vocalists, the drummer is the healthiest of all. Comparable to the likes of cycling and swimming, drumming is a great means of physical exercise. It is also a great mental workout when it comes to coordination, and a perfect social amplifier and medium when it comes to the community of performing music. Assisting in all aspects of health, drumming is a great choice to lead a healthy, long lasting life.

Everyone knows that to be healthy, you must exercise regularly. So it would make sense that being healthy enough to live longer can be attributed to exercise or vigorous physical activity. Through a study performed by the University of Gloucestershire, drumming- specifically of the rock and pop genres- has been found to have the same physical demands as activities such as “running, cycling, ice and field hockey, and competitive volleyball.” (De La Rue) The study took several drummers and gave them a specific beat to play while measuring their heart rates. They found that the peak heart rate of the drummers was around 186bpm, which qualifies drumming as a vigorous physical activity and therefore exercise. “The time spent engaged in vigorous activity is sufficient that there are likely to be long-term health benefits from prolonged participation,” and while the life span of drummers specifically has never been researched, it’s clear that this abundant amount of exercise is only helping their health. Exercise through drumming provides enough METs, which is a measurement of the amount of energy it requires to sit (otherwise known as a metabolic equivalent), to where these individuals that were studied “have a significantly reduced risk of mortality from cardiovascular diseases.” From this study it’s clear as to what the physical benefits of drumming are, but physical health isn’t all that attributes to a long lasting life.

Emotional health is just as important, and being immersed in the musical experience of drumming has been proven to assist in this aspect as well. Of course it’s clear to everyone how drumming can be a form of anger management, however it is also a means of meditation. Drumming presents a way for people struggling emotionally to increase the quality of their mood as well as alleviate anxiety.  The act of drumming requires immense concentration, “which can prevent worrying,” it causes “deep breathing, which can counteract anxiety, social support which can reduce feelings of isolation, learning which keeps the mind active, and regular commitment that motivates people to remain active.” (Perkins) For mental health to flourish, it’s understood that five elements are required to do so; positive emotions, engagement, relationships, meaning, and a sense of accomplishment, (Perkins) and drumming- even the world of music as a whole- satisfies all aspects. The drumming community alone provides immense support and a sensation of belonging, and the act of creating music through rhythmic drumming is perfect training for the mind. This sense of belonging and meaning through creating music is ideal for those who feel as though they don’t have a place or purpose- emotions that can lead to and cause a variety of mental health issues as well as the possibility of taking one’s own life. Of course there’s not a direct correlation stating that drumming prevents suicide, however those who have outlets and a means of dealing with stress ultimately have more positive thoughts and healthier lives.

Mentally, the drums are heavily reliant on coordination and focus, which are a must have for drummers. This vast amount of cognitive refinement that accompanies drumming is perfect for people who suffer from anxiety, depression, ADD, you name it. Focusing and committing to the drums requires a great deal of concentration and commitment as well, which for many aides in alleviating these irritating and sometimes maddening mental disorders. High amounts of stress as well as mental turmoil, such as a sense of hopelessness, affect the lifespan of those who suffer, even affecting cardiovascular health. (Maria S. Kopp) With drumming helping to reduce this stress and help mentally, it can act as a medium in reaching an extended life. Patients suffering from depression and other disorders are often introduced to a drum circle, and following the circle one patient said that “I would go away and I had them [rhythms] in my head… the sound we produced was amazing. I focus on a sort of driving, repetitive thing that I just liked,” which provided an escape. (Perkins) It allows the busy and crowded minds of these individuals to fixate on one task, a task that requires so much concentration that the negatives are drowned out- like meditation. 

To live a long healthy life, all aspects of health must reach a high level of adequacy- physical, mental, and emotional. Drumming, as a medium, assists in all of these aspects. Having an outlet and activity as mentally demanding as drumming assists in cognitive strength and mental health, and being a part of it’s community and having a sense of purpose through the instrument provides emotional support. The physical benefits are clear as well, comparable to several high intensive activities. Overall, drumming satisfies all necessary subcategories of health, and can lead to a longer, healthier life.

Works Cited:

De La Rue, S. E. Energy Expenditure in Rock/ Pop Drumming. 2013. https://bit.ly/39qRuVl 

Kopp S., Maria. Where psychology meets physiology: chronic stress and premature mortality. 2003. https://bit.ly/3szmFp1

Perkins, Rosie. Making music for mental health: how group drumming mediates recovery. 2016. https://bit.ly/3sBRysO 

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Causal Argument – mrmba1

Long Live Drummers

Of all the ways to extend and increase the quality of one’s life, few would’ve guessed that drumming would help in doing just that. Drummers are typically stereotyped as the wild card or animal of every band- with little help from the muppets. They’re the one that’s in the clouds more than on the ground, and more often than not making questionable and risky life choices. However, compared to other members of a band such as guitar players and vocalists, the drummer is the healthiest of all. Comparable to the likes of cycling and swimming, drumming is a great means of physical exercise. It is also a great mental workout when it comes to coordination, and a perfect social amplifier and medium when it comes to the community of performing music. Assisting in all aspects of health, drumming is a great choice to lead a healthy, long lasting life.

  Everyone knows that to be healthy, you must exercise regularly. So it would make sense that being healthy enough to live longer can be attributed to exercise or vigorous physical activity. Through a study performed by the University of Gloucestershire, drumming- specifically of the rock and pop genres- has been found to have the same physical demands as activities such as “running, cycling, ice and field hockey, and competitive volleyball.” (De La Rue) The study took several drummers and gave them a specific beat to play while measuring their heart rates. They found that the peak heart rate of the drummers was around 186bpm, which qualifies drumming as a vigorous physical activity and therefore exercise. “The time spent engaged in vigorous activity is sufficient that there are likely to be long-term health benefits from prolonged participation,” and while the life span of drummers specifically has never been researched, it’s clear that this abundant amount of exercise is only helping their health. Exercise through drumming provides enough METs, which is a measurement of the amount of energy it requires to sit (otherwise known as a metabolic equivalent), to where these individuals that were studied “have a significantly reduced risk of mortality from cardiovascular diseases.” From this study it’s clear as to what the physical benefits of drumming are, but physical health isn’t all that attributes to a long lasting life.

  Emotional health is just as important, and being immersed in the musical experience of drumming has been proven to assist in this aspect as well. Of course it’s clear to everyone how drumming can be a form of anger management, however it is also a means of meditation. Drumming presents a way for people struggling emotionally to increase the quality of their mood as well as alleviate anxiety.  The act of drumming requires immense concentration, “which can prevent worrying,” it causes “deep breathing, which can counteract anxiety, social support which can reduce feelings of isolation, learning which keeps the mind active, and regular commitment that motivates people to remain active.” (Perkins) For mental health to flourish, it’s understood that five elements are required to do so; positive emotions, engagement, relationships, meaning, and a sense of accomplishment, (Perkins) and drumming- even the world of music as a whole- satisfies all aspects. The drumming community alone provides immense support and a sensation of belonging, and the act of creating music through rhythmic drumming is perfect training for the mind. This sense of belonging and meaning through creating music is ideal for those who feel as though they don’t have a place or purpose- emotions that can lead to and cause a variety of mental health issues as well as the possibility of taking one’s own life. Of course there’s not a direct correlation stating that drumming prevents suicide, however those who have outlets and a means of dealing with stress ultimately have more positive thoughts and healthier lives.

  Mentally, the drums are heavily reliant on coordination and focus, which are a must have for drummers. This vast amount of cognitive refinement that accompanies drumming is perfect for people who suffer from anxiety, depression, ADD, you name it. Focusing and committing to the drums requires a great deal of concentration and commitment as well, which for many aides in alleviating these irritating and sometimes maddening mental disorders. High amounts of stress as well as mental turmoil, such as a sense of hopelessness, affect the lifespan of those who suffer, even affecting cardiovascular health. (Maria S. Kopp) With drumming helping to reduce this stress and help mentally, it can act as a medium in reaching an extended life. Patients suffering from depression and other disorders are often introduced to a drum circle, and following the circle one patient said that “I would go away and I had them [rhythms] in my head… the sound we produced was amazing. I focus on a sort of driving, repetitive thing that I just liked,” which provided an escape. (Perkins) It allows the busy and crowded minds of these individuals to fixate on one task, a task that requires so much concentration that the negatives are drowned out- like meditation. 

  To live a long healthy life, all aspects of health must reach a high level of adequacy- physical, mental, and emotional. Drumming, as a medium, assists in all of these aspects. Having an outlet and activity as mentally demanding as drumming assists in cognitive strength and mental health, and being a part of it’s community and having a sense of purpose through the instrument provides emotional support. The physical benefits are clear as well, comparable to several high intensive activities. Overall, drumming satisfies all necessary subcategories of health, and can lead to a longer, healthier life.

Works Cited:

De La Rue, S. E. Energy Expenditure in Rock/ Pop Drumming. 2013. https://bit.ly/39qRuVl 

Kopp S., Maria. Where psychology meets physiology: chronic stress and premature mortality. 2003. https://bit.ly/3szmFp1

Perkins, Rosie. Making music for mental health: how group drumming mediates recovery. 2016. https://bit.ly/3sBRysO

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Causal Rewrite- KobeBryant

WHY IS SLEEP NECESSARY

Why is sleep necessary? Sleep is undoubtedly one of the most important requirements for efficient human functioning. It plays a very vital role in ensuring the wellness of the human body, both physically and mentally. Not only does it help you maintain your physical and mental health, it also helps in maintaining a healthy lifestyle along with ensuring safety from a number of fatal diseases. It is usually said that the mood in which you wake up is largely dependent on the type of sleep you have been in. This, in itself, is proof of the importance of sleep in our lives. While sleeping, our body finally gets its share of rest, and it also gets sufficient time to rejuvenate from all the wear and tear that it went through during the entire day. Sleep aids in the proper functioning of the human brain, and its deficiency can cause several different health issues in people. There are several chronic health issues which arise when the human body is not getting its desired rest and sleep. This, in turn, affects the way an individual’s body works and also affects their entire personal as well as professional life cycles.

It has been proposed, by some, that humans do not really need to sleep, and that we do so only out of habit. However, much research would suggest otherwise. It is true that some individuals, such as people who suffer with insomnia etc, are able to live on very small amounts of sleep, but nevertheless, they do need some. Although there is evidence that some can go extensive amounts of time without sleep, studies of sleep deprivation have found that there may be severe consequences of not sleeping at. Randy Gardner, for example, went without sleep for 11 nights. By the end of this period, he suffered severe hallucinations and paranoia. He found interacting with other people difficult and even lost some of his sense of personal identity. Sleep deprivation is one of the biggest factors in children’s behavior. There are a number of reasons for children to get a good night sleep. It is not only important to adults but it is crucial in kids. Physical activity and cognitive thinking do well together when a child gets enough sleep. The effects on a child’s sleeping habits can be profound in a negative or positive way. People show sleepiness in different ways and children have an even bigger spectrum on signs of theirs. It is up to parents, guardians, and teachers to really understand the importance of sleeping habits and the benefits of a child that is well rested.

When you fall asleep your body releases a hormone called, melatonin, that stimulates your body preparing it to fall asleep, giving you the sensation of feeling drowsy. When we get a good night’s rest we usually wake up feeling great and rested. Not receiving proper sleep may make you late to school, forget about important tasks, or even make you feel irritated. Sleep affects our appearance, attitude, as well as our performance on daily activities. Even with children it is most times obvious how to tell when a child is sleepy. In older kids, an appearance and attitude can be good indicators they do not have proper sleeping habits. We can better detect a teen having sleep deprivation. If a teen has dark circles under their eyes, pale face, and becomes agitated over something small we can assume they haven’t had a good night sleep.

Sleep deprivation is serious and without sleep your body won’t function to its full potential. Having a thrown off sleep schedule can really mess up your cognitive functions and can potentially ruin your perception of time. Tips to help sleep would be to make sure your mattress is comfortable and supportive. The one you have been using for years may have exceeded its life expectancy about 9 or 10 years for most good quality mattresses. Have comfortable pillows and make the room attractive and inviting for sleep but also free of allergens that might affect you and objects that might cause you to slip or fall if you have to get up. There are many factors that fall into sleep deprivation. Getting good amounts of sleep can help. There are several benefits of getting a good sleep at night. It helps you maintain your body weight so that you do not become obese and add to this; there’s also the fact that people who sleep well at night often eat less than those who don’t, which also helps with the weight. Getting adequate sleep also increases your productivity by making you feel more energetic and giving you the time you need to rest. It also helps our lives be in a good mood, and good sleep puts a person in a good mood. Sleeping enough also allows our minds to function correctly and in a better way therefore we can think better, and we also have a better memory power upon sleeping enough.

Getting good amounts of sleep is incredibly vital to our mental health and physical well-being. If we do not get enough sleep, we might get burnt out and not be able to carry out our lives in the way that we should be able to. Without the ability to do this, life can become painful and full of difficulties that may become complex over time therefore we must all take the initiative in our own lives to sleep on time and wake up on time to avoid any mental or physical blockages.

Work Cited:

Importance of Sleep Essay | Essay on Importance of Sleep for Students and Children in English – A Plus Topper

Sleep Is Important To Your Child’s Health | Sleep Scholar

What makes us sleep? | NICHD – Eunice Kennedy Shriver National Institute of Child Health and Human Development (nih.gov)

The Importance of Sleep for Kids – Johns Hopkins All Children’s Hospital

Why sleep is important and what happens when you don’t get enough (apa.org)

Why Do We Need Sleep? | Sleep Foundation

Why is Sleep Important? | American Sleep Association

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Causal – KobeBryant

WHY IS SLEEP NECESSARY

Why is sleep necessary? Sleep is undoubtedly one of the most important requirements for efficient human functioning. It plays a very vital role in ensuring the wellness of the human body, both physically and mentally. Not only does it help you maintain your physical and mental health, it also helps in maintaining a healthy lifestyle along with ensuring safety from a number of fatal diseases. It is usually said that the mood in which you wake up is largely dependent on the type of sleep you have been in. This, in itself, is proof of the importance of sleep in our lives. While sleeping, our body finally gets its share of rest, and it also gets sufficient time to rejuvenate from all the wear and tear that it went through during the entire day. Sleep aids in the proper functioning of the human brain, and its deficiency can cause several different health issues in people. There are several chronic health issues which arise when the human body is not getting its desired rest and sleep. This, in turn, affects the way an individual’s body works and also affects their entire personal as well as professional life cycles.

It has been proposed, by some, that humans do not really need to sleep, and that we do so only out of habit. However, much research would suggest otherwise. It is true that some individuals, such as people who suffer with insomnia etc, are able to live on very small amounts of sleep, but nevertheless, they do need some. Although there is evidence that some can go extensive amounts of time without sleep, studies of sleep deprivation have found that there may be severe consequences of not sleeping at. Randy Gardner, for example, went without sleep for 11 nights. By the end of this period, he suffered severe hallucinations and paranoia. He found interacting with other people difficult and even lost some of his sense of personal identity. Sleep deprivation is one of the biggest factors in children’s behavior. There are a number of reasons for children to get a good night sleep. It is not only important to adults but it is crucial in kids. Physical activity and cognitive thinking do well together when a child gets enough sleep. The effects on a child’s sleeping habits can be profound in a negative or positive way. People show sleepiness in different ways and children have an even bigger spectrum on signs of theirs. It is up to parents, guardians, and teachers to really understand the importance of sleeping habits and the benefits of a child that is well rested.

When you fall asleep your body releases a hormone called, melatonin, that stimulates your body preparing it to fall asleep, giving you the sensation of feeling drowsy. When we get a good night’s rest we usually wake up feeling great and rested. Not receiving proper sleep may make you late to school, forget about important tasks, or even make you feel irritated. Sleep affects our appearance, attitude, as well as our performance on daily activities. Even with children it is most times obvious how to tell when a child is sleepy. In older kids, an appearance and attitude can be good indicators they do not have proper sleeping habits. We can better detect a teen having sleep deprivation. If a teen has dark circles under their eyes, pale face, and becomes agitated over something small we can assume they haven’t had a good night sleep.

Sleep deprivation is serious and without sleep your body won’t function to its full potential. Having a thrown off sleep schedule can really mess up your cognitive functions and can potentially ruin your perception of time. Tips to help sleep would be to make sure your mattress is comfortable and supportive. The one you have been using for years may have exceeded its life expectancy about 9 or 10 years for most good quality mattresses. Have comfortable pillows and make the room attractive and inviting for sleep but also free of allergens that might affect you and objects that might cause you to slip or fall if you have to get up. There are many factors that fall into sleep deprivation. Getting good amounts of sleep can help. There are several benefits of getting a good sleep at night. It helps you maintain your body weight so that you do not become obese and add to this; there’s also the fact that people who sleep well at night often eat less than those who don’t, which also helps with the weight. Getting adequate sleep also increases your productivity by making you feel more energetic and giving you the time you need to rest. It also helps our lives be in a good mood, and good sleep puts a person in a good mood. Sleeping enough also allows our minds to function correctly and in a better way therefore we can think better, and we also have a better memory power upon sleeping enough.

Getting good amounts of sleep is incredibly vital to our mental health and physical well-being. If we do not get enough sleep, we might get burnt out and not be able to carry out our lives in the way that we should be able to. Without the ability to do this, life can become painful and full of difficulties that may become complex over time therefore we must all take the initiative in our own lives to sleep on time and wake up on time to avoid any mental or physical blockages.

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Importance of Sleep Essay | Essay on Importance of Sleep for Students and Children in English – A Plus Topper

Sleep Is Important To Your Child’s Health | Sleep Scholar

What makes us sleep? | NICHD – Eunice Kennedy Shriver National Institute of Child Health and Human Development (nih.gov)

The Importance of Sleep for Kids – Johns Hopkins All Children’s Hospital

Why sleep is important and what happens when you don’t get enough (apa.org)

Why Do We Need Sleep? | Sleep Foundation

Why is Sleep Important? | American Sleep Association

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America Runs on Prescription Drugs

The United States of America heavily relies on prescription drug use. In fact, over 131 million adults take some type of prescription drug, which means that there is a high demand and high profit within the pharmaceutical industry. Opioids are a very popular drug that makes doctors and pharmacies large sums of money, and even though the damage from the opioid crisis has been catastrophic, it is still prescribed by doctors because they are being paid to do so by opioid manufacturers. With no other pain reliever on the market that’s as effective as opioids, the pharmaceutical industry believes that the benefits outweigh the deadly cost, and no alternative drug could ever compete. The response from the government about the opioid epidemic has been ineffective, since the crisis has only worsened with the past three decades. With Big Pharma lobbyists within the government, no research is being funded by the government to find a solution. The pharmaceutical industry refuses to consider other types of pain medication and the government’s neglect towards medical research funding caused the opioid crisis.

Opioids are used as pain-relievers, and can be prescribed by doctors for many types of physical ailments. But the United States is in the middle of an opioid epidemic, so the amount of opioid prescriptions should be decreasing or at least be heavily discouraged, but unfortunately that is not the case. In 2017, the Harvard T.H. Chan released a study titled Physicians’ opioid prescribing patterns linked to patient’s risk of long term drug use which explained how “the results suggest that differences in clinicians’ prescribing habits may be helping to fuel the opioid epidemic sweeping the United States.” Doctors are persuaded to prescribe opioids by the manufacturers who make the drug. These manufacturers are trying to make as much money as possible, and will bribe doctors to prescribe opioid medications while being well aware that people die every day due to opioid overdose. Most of these doctors are making thousands of dollars by prescribing opioids, which falsely makes them believe that there is a lot of value in the drug. The doctors are just as corrupt in this situation, and are just as responsible as the opioid manufacturers for causing the opioid epidemic, for continuing to fuel it.

Even though not every person prescribed an opioid becomes addicted, the increase in opioid use inevitably leads to an increased risk of a person succumbing to an opioid addiction. Harvard T.H. Chan’s study also revealed that, “one out of every 48 people newly prescribed an opioid will become a long term user.” Prescription opioid medications are commonly used by people who suffer from chronic pain. Manufacturers capitalize on this, and make opioid medications very expensive since people need it to function throughout the day without pain. The government only helps those who can be covered by medicaid, and has done very little to help the other thousands of people who cannot afford their medications. If people can no longer afford their medications, they might turn to more dangerous options.

The illegal drug market is equally as large as the United States’ pharmaceutical industry, and both profit off people that become addicted to opioids. People who can no longer afford a pharmaceutical medication often replace their medications with an illegal drug. Opioids act as a gateway drug to more deadly drugs like heroin when a person feels like they have no other option that can treat their pain. Heroin is the most dangerous type of opioid and is considered to be a Schedule I drug, meaning that it is not used in any type of medication and is considered highly addictive according to the DEA. Now these regular people who simply wanted to find affordable treatment are involving themselves in illegal activities with potentially dangerous drug dealers, putting themselves in more desperate situations. Even if opioid users do not turn to illegal drugs, there are other ways they can obtain the drug that will relieve their pain and cravings. Some people injure themselves enough to where they can be given pain relievers in the emergency room. A disturbing act like that shows how disorienting opioid use can be, and what lengths people will go to to relieve their cravings.

Addiction is a disease that ruins people’s lives, and the government’s handle on the opioid epidemic makes their lives worse. In an article titled, Are Substance-Use Disorders in the USA a Crime or Crisis? Restorative Justice to Reclaim Voting Rights for Disenfranchised Nonviolent Offenders, writer Tyriesa Howell states that “while many states, cities, and counties are initiating lawsuits against prescription opioid producers for their roles in the opioid epidemic, a federally responsive war on pharmaceutical opioid sales has not been initiated and physicians have only been recommended to reduce overprescribing pain medication through the use of prescription drug monitoring programs.” The government has laws in place that punishes those caught in the act of drug dealing. But putting people in jail does not help them after suffering from opioid abuse, and many people relapse once they are released. Some nonviolent drug offenders are given the option to go to a rehabilitation center, which are effective but expensive. If people had to turn to cheaper and illegal drug alternatives, then it is unlikely that rehab is affordable for them. The opioid epidemic affects more than the health of opioid users, it affects their family, their job, and their reputation. If the government made efforts to eliminate the source of the problem, opioid prescriptions, then no one would be addicted to them in the first place.

Instead of trying to find an alternative drug, the government continues to allow doctors and pharmacies to distribute drugs to people who could be using alternative pain therapy that has less damaging repercussions. Unfortunately, there is little research being done on possible alternatives. There is currently no drug within the pharmaceutical industry that has enough credibility to be a reliable source of profit, and if the industry cannot profit, then they will certainly have no interest in it.

Sources

Physicians’ opioid prescribing patterns linked to patients’ risk for long-term drug use. (2018, June 22). Retrieved March 27, 2021, from https://www.hsph.harvard.edu/news/press-releases/opioids-addiction-physicians/

The more opioids doctors prescribe, the more they get paid. (2019, September 16). Retrieved March 27, 2021, from https://www.hsph.harvard.edu/news/hsph-in-the-news/opioids-doctors-prescriptions-payments/

University, G. (2019, February 13). Prescription drugs. Retrieved March 28, 2021, from https://hpi.georgetown.edu/rxdrugs/#:~:text=More%20than%20131%20million%20people,and%20those%20with%20chronic%20conditions.

Tyriesa, H. H. (2019). Are substance-use disorders in the USA a crime or crisis? restorative justice to reclaim voting rights for disenfranchised nonviolent offenders. Journal of Human Rights and Social Work, 4(2), 103-107. doi:http://dx.doi.org.ezproxy.rowan.edu/10.1007/s41134-018-0069-0

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