Definition – l8tersk8ter


I was pretty blunt in my critique of l8tersk8ter’s Introduction, but it represents a very common fault I blame on high school writing classes. Don’t “ease into” your subject. Readers aren’t patient. They’ll find something else to do.

Read l8tersh8ter’s Introduction first. Then see an edited version in the Replies.

Needs a Title

Adolescence is a period of life that brings on many different experiences for everyone, but nonetheless it is a period that everyone goes through during their teenage years. One of the common experiences of adolescents is the unavoidable high school experience. Now, not everyone completes a high school education, some may drop out and choose to pursue their GED instead, or maybe just find a job, or maybe something completely different given their individual circumstance. There are others that may go through high school from the comfort of their own home and not actually through a school system. Their high school building is their house so they are not truly immersed in the environment of a high school building and all that it has to offer. According to the Education Data Organization, as of 2018 there were 15.8 million students enrolled in secondary/high school, with the rate of enrollment trending up. Focusing on this population of adolescents that are enrolled in a school, attention can be brought to mental vulnerability of this age group. (kept for example)

Adolescents as a Vulnerable Population

Adolescents are in a period of life that is unavoidable and can shape their futures for in ways both positive and negative. While many different experiences occur at this time, one of the common ones is the high school experience. According to the Education Data Organization, as of 2018 there were 15.8 million students enrolled in secondary/high school, with the rate of enrollment trending up. That is a significant number of teenagers in schools. Focusing on this population of adolescents that are enrolled in a school, attention can be brought to mental vulnerability of this age group. Adolescents are a population of people that are very unique. They are have vast differences from both adults and children. Their minds are developing and new life experiences can influence them strongly for both good and bad. They are at high risk of mental issues if not properly guided, which is why they can be considered. A vulnerable population.

It is important to first understand the concept of a vulnerable population. The Indian Journal of Community Medicine states that the literal definition of vulnerability means the state or condition of being weak or poorly defended. Basically, the people that fall into these categories of vulnerable populations are susceptible to adversity. There is a high chance that a problem will arise among these people as opposed to among the people that are not included in a vulnerable population. For a broad example, we can split people into two groups with one being people that fly in airplanes and the second being people that do not fly in airplanes. The population that would be vulnerable to getting in crash is the one that flies in the airplanes. The other population is not in that situation and therefore would not be susceptible to that happening. Now this example should be taking lightly because it can be interpreted to suggest that the population you are grouped with is a choice. Someone could choose not to fly and then they would no longer be susceptible. However with most vulnerable populations this isn’t the case. If someone’s situation is influenced by race, gender, socioeconomic status (SES), or other factors similar to those, those are obviously circumstances out of the control of the individual or the population as a whole. In fact Holly R. Farley even identifies that the most commonly considered vulnerable populations are ethnic minorities, low SES, the LGBTQ+ community, and people with disabilities. In this case of adolescents, the population you are grouped with is definitely not a choice because you cannot choose your age. You will be a teenager whether you want to or not.

Teenagers, also commonly referred to as adolescents, are a population that is vulnerable to mental health illnesses. The Review Article alludes specifically to vulnerability of young people as being found among those more exposed to risks than their surrounding peers. According to Farley, a big reason adolescents are vulnerable population is because they are developing. When you are a teenager you feel the same way as everyone else: you are too young to be treated like an adult but too old to be treated like a child. This is a big transition stage in life. Teenagers are not mature, but their maturity is developing. This point in one’s life comes with a lot of pressure. There are more responsibilities than before, school gets a little bit harder, you have to learn how to handle and organize everything, No one is holding your hand and guiding you in quite the same way as you have been used to up until now. Other risk factors to vulnerability is that it is a time where you are trying to fit in and conform with peers, you start to explore your sexual identity, you have increased use of technology, and this is just to name a few that Farley mentions. This further shows the changes and growth that is happening at this stage. There are so many new aspects to life that each teenager is exploring. They are easily shaped by the environment around them. They can be pressured into doing things that they do not actually want to do as an attempt to fit in and have friends. This can include using substances like drugs or alcohol, or something even simpler like cracking jokes in class at the expense of their reputation and success. Teenagers in high school are faced with academic and social stress, which if not provided aid in tackling these obstacles then things can have a turn for the worse.

Adolescents are vulnerable to many kinds of mental illness and/or issues. One of the most prominent mental illnesses is depression. Farley provides statistics that of the 12% of the US population that is made up of adolescents, 30% are reporting symptoms of depression each year. A striking stat is that suicide is the second leading cause of death between ages 10-24, a range that starts just short of adolescence and just a few years past. These high rates of illness can be due to the fact that these teenage years are a time of physiological changes, as previously discussed. Depression, however, is not the only mental illness seen among this vulnerable population. Other mental health issues could be anxiety, which could be generalized or attributed to social interactions. Social anxiety may stem from the environment the adolescent is in and problems that arise, but also could be the very cause for such problems. It may inhibit the ability to make friends or to get involved, which are important factors to the healthy development of adolescents. Other illnesses could be eating disorders that stem from the pressure to fit a certain body image. This is especially common among teenage girls but can be seen in boys as well. They could have generalized emotional disorders which results in a lack of properly processing, dealing with, and channeling emotions. All of these mental health issues can be connected to the vulnerability of the adolescent population. They are a group of people susceptible to struggling if they are not properly guided in the right direction.


Bustamante, Jaleesa. “K-12 Enrollment Statistics [2020]: Totals by Grade Level + More.” Education Data Organization, 6 Sept. 2019,

Farley, Holly R. “Assessing Mental Health in Vulnerable Adolescents.” Nursing2020, vol. 50, no. 10, 2020, pp. 48–53., doi:10.1097/01.nurse.0000697168.39814.93.

Shah, Dheeraj, et al. “Defining and Measuring Vulnerability in Young People.” Indian Journal of Community Medicine, vol. 40, no. 3, 2015, p. 193., doi:10.4103/0970-0218.158868.

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Visual Rhetoric- oaktree1234


Oaktree starts with a very strong first set of notes that blend keen visual descriptions with visual analysis.

I respond with detailed observations about the first :01.
Please review before you post your own Visual Rhetoric draft.

0:01-0:02 The ad begins with a close up of a dinner plate that appears to be only half finished. We can assume the meal being eaten is dinner since the plate has peas, macaroni and possibly chicken on it. The room is very dim implying that it’s later in the day. The half-drank glass of milk next to the plate shakes just slightly as if a door was just slammed. A crumpled up napkin sits alongside the plate as if someone had thrown it down in a hurry. It appears that this plate is not located in a restaurant, rather a home. The worn, wooded table, simplistic silverware, and smorgasbord of foods on the plate imply this is a casual home cooked meal. This scene automatically appeals to the pathos of the viewer since it’s a comfortable, familiar setting. 

0:03- 0:13 The camera pans to a middle aged man sitting at the same table that the unattended plate was on. He appears to be a working man, dressed in a shirt and tie. The fridge behind him is covered with cards, calendars, sticky notes, and artwork, implying that this man most likely has children. We never see another parental figure in the clip implying this man could be a single father. The man glances upward with an irritated expression on his face. The direction of his gaze seems to point to the ceiling or top corner of the room. He then glances back down at his plate only before quickly glancing back upwards towards what perhaps could be the upstairs of his house. The man winces as if a loud or startling sound just occurred. He clenches his jaw and looks away with a distressed expression. He looks off into the upward direction of the room one more time and lets out a deep sigh. By creating this visual of a working class man raising children on his own, they are appealing to the viewer’s ethos. Who’s more trustworthy than a hard working single father?

0:14- 0:21 The camera pans backwards revealing the entire table the man is sitting at and more of the room. We see that the man is in what appears to be a middle class home; no lavish furniture or appliances. The man is again looking up at what we assume to be the upstairs of the house. He utters only a couple words while still looking in this direction. At 0:16 the words “Never stop being a dad.” appear on the screen, implying the other individual is his child. He then slowly lowers his gaze until a notification on his phone pulls his attention back to the table and he grabs his phone. The careful selection of scenery adds to the ethos appeal. By demonstrating that this man lives an average, middle class lifestyle, he is instantly more relatable and seems credible. The pathos of the viewer are also targeted through the text on screen. A vast majority of viewers either are a father figure to someone else or have a father figure in their lives. The impact of “never stop being a dad” is that the viewer is forced to imagine either not having their father figure in their lives or no longer being that figure to someone else.

0:22-0:23 The screen pans to a close up of a text message conversation. The most recent incoming text message reads: *heart icon* U 2. This response indicates that the man was previously telling his child he loved them. This short clip automatically appeals to pathos by demonstrating the bond between a father and child. 

0:24-31 The camera pans back to the man’s face. After reading this heartfelt text message, he appears to look relieved, much different than the beginning of the clip. He shakes his head as a subtle smirk creeps across his face. He pops what appears to be a french fry in his mouth and continues to shake his head as he chews. Finally he glances back up to the upstairs of the house, where we assume his child has been residing. This scene is relatable to parents as well as children. The ad suggests that although being a father isn’t always easy, it’s well worth it.

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Safer Saws — SmilingDogTheProfWants


Smiling Dog’s post here is extraordinarily good.
Before you publish your own Safer Saws post, you would be wise to read both this post and your beloved professor’s feedback.

  1. Manufacturers: “the mechanism for stopping the blade is much different between the two saws” This is an effort at claiming that the safety devices on the saws are different. This is an Analogy claim, as it claims that only the mechanism for stopping the blade is different and nothing else. Although the point of Bosch’s version is to not destroy the blade the technology is exactly the same and definitely violates the patent as the means of stopping the saw is the byproduct of the sensor that tells the mechanism to stop.
  2. Customers: In a quick video demo we see, without any words, a factual claim that shows that this product works undeniably and in one of the worst case scenarios you will get a scratch that barely bleeds. The customer can easily see this video and say to themselves as an active user that this is the safest and best invention on the market for this product and is well worth the money and may even make it easier for others to explore using the tool with no prior experience.
  3. Industry Spokespeople:  “a fan of your fingers” is an evaluative claim that performs the simple task of getting you to say “yes I do happen to be a fan of keeping them,” and so you now feel that if you’re in the market (or maybe just want the benefit of not losing a finger) for a SawStop saw. This implies that other saws will lead to you losing your fingers if you don’t own this version of the product.
  4. Consumer Safety Advocates: “The closest parallel we can find to a story like this is that of a seatbelt” This is an evaluative claim that aims to inform the reader that in terms of saw blades this is the safest you can get for right now. The only evidence is the continued lack of injury using the SawStop over other table saws/blades and the immediate violation of a patent when trying to replicate the idea of the saw stop by Bosch.
  5. Injured Plaintiffs: “Saws Cut Off 4,000 Fingers a Year.” and the industries refuse to create new and more safety measures. This is a numerical claim that provides the reader with the estimated preventable injuries caused by a product that has been made safer by other producers. All of those people probably wish they had a SawStop the day it happened, as long as they value their finger that is.
  6. Personal Injury Lawyers: “for more than a decade” this tells the audience the technology to prevent you from losing a finger has existed for a very long time, people having lost a cumulative of a few 10 thousand fingers to a preventable situation as a result of profiting by the big corporations. This is an ethical claim as though the device works near perfect now it’s obvious that it would still take time to develop, but regardless of it the company with the money and means to produce it have refused to do it, costing their consumers their fingers over a $60 replacement blade.
  7. Government Officials: “Power tool industry too powerful to regulate.” Despite the obvious good of not having people cut off their fingers the government cannot alter the large corporation’s production or now hazardous product. This is an evaluative claim because although it is a universal good not to lose a finger the industry is too strong to change their stubborn ideals so hastily. This statement also implies that it is up to the consumer to make the change because if the company won’t change then the people have to stop buying their products and start buying from other companies safe products.
  8. News Reporters: “Bosch has officially entered the limb-saving table saw market.” This is a result of Bosch releasing his own version of the SawStop that was withheld due to a patent conflict with their competitor. This is an evaluative claim as the reporter says that Bosch has officially entered, implying he wasn’t in it or didn’t care about it before. And the limb-saving table saw market isn’t a real market and is simply meant to persuade you into buying the product or boosting your image of Bosch in your head and making you want to buy the product more.
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Visual Rhetoric- runnerd4

Thank you, Runner, for posting early.
Classmates, please read both Runner’s thoughtful analysis AND your Professor’s Reply to the First Five Seconds before posting your own version.


In the first five seconds of this video, we see a man (Keenan Allen) and little girl who I suppose is his daughter. He is spinning around his daughter in the air. The little girl is in a yellow shirt with light blue/grey pants. The man is in a white tee shirt and blue jeans. They are both smiling. I think the creator included this in the video to appeal to pathos. The happiness between the father and daughter adds to whatever argument they are trying to make. I am also thinking that they used Keenan Allen as a way to appeal to ethos through celebrity endorsement.


The frame switches to the same man and his son. The son is wearing a navy blue shirt and a pair of khaki shorts. The son is very young, maybe about a year old. They are also dancing together like the man was doing with his daughter. The father is holding his son and dancing around with him. The man is smiling and the son also seems to be pretty content and making happy baby faces. I think the creator included this also to appeal to pathos. The happiness adds to the argument (fatherhood involvement).


In this moment, it shows Keenan playing the piano. For his kids? He seems to be a good piano player based on how smoothly his fingers are moving on the keys. I could be wrong though because I have the video muted.


The next frame shows Keenan playing for his kids so they can have their own little band. There seems to be another 2 people in the frame to the right, but I cannot figure out who, maybe another daughter and his wife. His daughter is playing on her little drum set. This little scene displays the idea of fatherhood involvement because he is part of their little band, a key part too. This scene is very wholesome and would make the audience smile, appealing to pathos.


This frame shows the inner workings of the piano. I believe that the creator used this to compare the beauty and intricacy of how the piano works to the beauty and intricacy of the family working together as one. All of the piano works together to make the beautiful sounds while all of the family comes together to create a beautiful relationship.


The daughter and the man were dancing while the film director’s clapperboard comes in to end the film. I think that this whole piece mainly used ethos and pathos to get their point across. They used celebrity endorsement. The celebrity endorsement shows that if even a man so busy could have an active involvement in their children’s lives, so can you. The pathos is from the joy from the interaction of Keenan and his children.


The last seconds of the video add to the message that men should be involved in their children’s lives. It displayed in white letters on a black screen “Make a Moment” and “#DanceLikeADad”. It also included a website for more information. These last slides concluded the piece.

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Casual- cardinal

I’m not quite ready to start my essay yet, but I do have an idea of where I could take it. Right now, my hypothesis is about how streaming services have been more successful with diversity than conventional Hollywood and will therefore render Hollywood obsolete. That in itself is a cause and effect, I think. The idea of “the diversity in streaming content will cause Hollywood to be obsolete” will likely be a major part of my essay. I’m also thinking I can add more layers and say that general audiences and workers in the entertainment industry are getting more and more vocal about a desire for better diversity, which causes streaming services to listen and deliver that because they’re a new branch of entertainment and want to remain current, therefore rendering slowly-progressing Hollywood obsolete. I’m not sure if I can get quotes to prove every one of those details, and I could probably find quotes to refute some of those details, but that’s my train of thought.

Is this a good direction to go in, or is it far too obvious? Do I need to be more counterintuitive in order to succeed, or will this suffice? I think my white paper will give you a pretty good idea of the research I’ve done if you want to see the ideas I’ve been working with. Also, I’m a bit concerned that I haven’t changed my hypothesis again. This hypothesis has been working really well for me and that feels concerning. Please let me know if I need to come up with something more challenging or shocking.

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Open Strong-Hailthegreat8

Authoritarian parents get precisely what they deserve: children who do everything they can to resist the control exerted from above and rebel in various, unpredictable ways, including but not limited to failing all their classes as a deliberate rebuke to their parents’ demands. Suppose you have an Authoritarian parent or know someone who does. You should know what those parents expect from their child. Authoritarian parents have really high expectations from their children; they fight for their children to succeed in their field. My aunt is an example of an Authoritarian parent. I remember talking to my cousins, and they said their mom is really strict and doesn’t play any games when it comes to academics, there are no excuses when they receive a specific grade, and if they do receive a bad grade, they receive many backlashes.

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Safer Saws-Hailthegreat8

Inventor- Dr. Steve Gass was one of the four founders that invited the great technology called SawStop. The reason he created SawStop was that he wanted to make a blade fast enough to stop injuries. The SawStop that he and coworkers started prevented multiple amputations in the United States and stopped many serious injuries. 

Reluctant Manufacturer-“one, one thousand of a second.” The creators of SawStop are explaining the amount of time it takes for the saw to stop when it’s about to hit an object. For example, a finger, for instance, and to this day, there hasn’t been any injury from SawStop.

News Reports- A invention like this hasn’t been created before. Something new that can change the way we look at technology.

 Industry Spokespeople- “Salty well-conducted all-beef frank.” That tells that because people’s hands are sweaty, the machine reacts and knows when to stop when it close to contact with flesh. People that work throughout the day end up sweaty.    

Consumer safety advocates- “It saves a finger but mangles a machine.” That shows that the SawStop machine will always shut down when it comes in contact with human flesh, but stated in the video, “it mangles the machine.” 

Industry Spokespeople- Commentator, stated in the video, “Energy has to go somewhere when it stops.” He says that the energy is moved to the SawStop Module. “which acts like the crumple zone in a car.” 

Steve Gass- “A little nervous” Steve Gass is scared that the machine might cut off his finger because it’s not truly tested, and there could still be some problems to fix. 

 Injury Lawyer- It can prevent injuries from happening. The video shows that SafeStop can protect people. You have a higher chance of avoiding an injury with this machine. 


“SawStop Saves over 6.000 Finger!” Festool, 

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Open Strong- Jeffbezos

Open Strong 

  1. Approximately 46.6 million people are living with mental illness in the United States. That’s 1 in 5 adults who will be living with a mental health condition at some point in their lives. This does not exclude our college athletes who are at a greater risk. With young athletes the number is jaw dropping. With over 33% of college student athletes experiencing depression, anxiety, and other health conditions. Then there is the aspect of only 10% of these students will ever get help. On top of mental Health, college athletes struggle more at having a social life, making money, schooling and physically more than all professional athletes. 

2.Everyone grows up hearing that College will be the best time of your life. You make friendships that are unbreakable, you do whatever you please, and party like there is no tomorrow. To student athletes, it is the exact opposite. College athletes grind everyday at all levels of collegiate sports. They risk their mental health, social life and physical health every single day. 6am wake up calls, then class at 10am, these students put more strain on themselves then professional athletes everyday. 

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Causal – l8tersk8ter

I could use some help getting started professor. I know that my White Paper is probably not up to the standard that would allow you to provide good feedback, but I still wanted to make this post. I plan on having my White Paper improved by tomorrow night. I do have some ideas for my paper though. I think a good route to go would be how being on a competitive team causes different positive effects, such as positive reinforcement, how to cope with loses, how it feels to contribute, etc (I know those are kind of broad but they’re just example for now). I would then do how all of those effects can then cause positive self-esteem or maybe how they cause positive mental health since I feel like my hypothesis is kind of drifting towards that topic. This argument would take on the structure of a causal chain. I will work on my White Paper and look forward to your feedback.

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Causal Argument- oaktree1234

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Open Strong- gabythefujoshi

Working Opening 1:

Americans need to stop talking about mental health. The mental health advocates and practitioners that have educated to many the importance of mental illnesses are predominately White Americans. Looking at Ted talks and television, there are mainly Causians advocating mental health awareness. This is what shys away minority groups like Latinos. For the latin community, especially that are first generation immigrants, mental health illness is a “white man’s” problem or that it’s not real. Because of this stigma, children of first generation immigrants don’t get the medical attention needed to treat illnesses like depression or anxiety. There is a lacking number of psychologists and counselors that are part of minority groups like Latinos or African American that publicly speak out about what mental health is, the illnesses, and why it’s important. To rid of the cultural stigma that exists amongst Latino immigrants, there should be better representation of minority groups amongst mental health advocates.

Working Opening 2:

Mental health illness is such a mainstream subject that it’s actually harder to discuss. Mental health topics like depression, suicidal, and anxiety have now become common term, especially in the todays youth that those clinically diagnosed symptoms or illnesses have lost their meaning. They went from something taboo that was reserved and not publicly discussed to something that can be found as a Facebook meme. Perhaps it’s the attempts of Western media to incorporate mental illness representation in different television, movies, and social media posts. In turn, it’s not making people comfortable accepting their issues, but it’s making it more uncomfortable and there still remains a negative connotation to mental illnesses. Normalizing mental health and making it mainstream to the youth of today is more detrimental in the process riding the cultural stigma of mental health.

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Professor, I don’t know if these are good arguments for my casual argument, but here is what I have so far. I might need some help to actually to start writing.

  1. Authoritarian Parents show no love to their children.
  2. Authoritarian Parent hurt their child mentally
  3. Authoritarian Parent-children always succeeds in their field.
  4. Authoritarian Parents have stringent rules that must be followed.
  5. Authoritarian Parents think that obedience is love.
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Professor, I don’t know if these are good arguments for my casual argument, but here is what I have so far. I might need some help to actually to start writing.

  1. Authoritarian Parents show no love to their children.
  2. Authoritarian Parent hurt their child mentally
  3. Authoritarian Parent-children always succeeds in their field.
  4. Authoritarian Parents have stringent rules that must be followed.
  5. Authoritarian Parents think that obedience is love.
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Safer Saws – gooferious

  1. Table Saw Injury Lawyer: Unfortunately, the manufacturers have refused to adopt it” this statement is saying that there is indeed technology out there that can prevent injuries from happening due to table saws but the manufacturers refuse to add this new feature onto newer makes of table saws. I believe this to be a moral claim as moral judgement can be used to persuade others that manufacturers should in fact adopt this new safety method regardless of the additional cost.
  2. Injured Plaintiffs: In the case of Carlos Osorio, the man who now has two unusable fingers and three fingers with no feeling due to a table saw injury was ultimately compensated for the negligence of the table saw company, One World Technologies. He was given $1.5 million in damages; this is a numerical claim as a set number was used to demonstrate exactly how much Osorio was given.
  3. Consumers: The table saws that do have the safety feature which prevent injuries to those who use it by stopping when coming in close contact to human flesh have received nothing but praise and good reviews. This can be identified as a causal claim simply for the fact that: having the table saw included with the safety feature (cause) will result in no complaints regarding injuries from those who buy it (effect).
  4. News Reporters: “If Table Saws Can Be Safer, Why Aren’t They?” is the title of an article published on the NPR website. The title alone makes a evaluative claim. News reporter, Chris Arnold, asks and judges why manufacturers haven’t added on this life-saving feature that Steve Gass invented that prevents injuries when it comes to table saws.
  5. Government Officials: In a news article titled Feds might force table-saw makers to adopt radically safer technology, the author states that the federal regulators are considering making Gass’ invention as a mandatory add on to table saws. This possible new rule proves to be a causal claim because if government officials were to set in place the requirement of Gass’ add on safety feature then as a result less injuries would arise due to the fault of table saws.
  6. Manufacturers: “You commissioners have the power to take one of the most dangerous products ever available to consumers and make it vastly safer” is what Steve Gass said at a public hearing for his new invention. He is using ethos to get people to acknowledge that his way is the right and safe way to go about regarding table saws. This is a moral claim.
  7. Safety Advocates: “The closest parallel we can find to a story like this is that of a seatbelt”. This statement is an analogy claim as it is comparing the new table saw feature which can prevent injuries to those who use table saws to that of a seatbelt which gives those in a vehicle an extra layer of protection should they get into an accident.
  8. Industry Spokesperson: The SawStop company has given the information regarding one of their products saying: “The saw weighs 79 pounds and retails for $1299”. This statement can be seen as a numerical claim as it tells us the readers the weight and cost of the product that is trying to be sold to consumers.
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