Grammar Exercise—runnerd4

Original:

If a primary caretaker has a negative attitude toward their child it increases the risk that they’re child will grow up hostile towards others. And its not just aggression toward others that results from child abuse; a large amount of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. The reason for this negative behavior is because the children don’t learn appropriate techniques for handling lifes disappointments. If you aren’t raised with coping skills, your much to likely to act ‘inappropriately’ then if you have developed more reasonable approaches. The affect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers”, is that everyone gets the child they deserve.

Revised

If primary caretakers have a negative attitude toward their child it increases the risk that their child will grow up hostile towards others. It’s not just aggression toward others that results from child abuse: a large number of children raised by abusive parents also harm themselves. The reason for this negative behavior is that the children aren’t raised with coping skills, they’re much more likely to act “inappropriately” than if they have developed more reasonable approaches. The effect of poor parenting as reported by Dr. Geoffrey Dahmer in “The Bully Papers,” is that parents get the child that they deserve.

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