21 Class WED APR 10

Writing Advice

Just Passed Scenic Views

The problem with this sign should be obvious, but just to be sure, let’s talk about the serious mistake it makes.

INSERT CLASSROOM DISCUSSION

Any writer making the same mistake would have to return her reader’s attention back to the material he’s already read and analyzed, draw his attention to things he might have missed, prepare him after the fact to receive information in the most effective way, and talk him out of conclusions he’s already drawn. All because she failed to put the sign AHEAD OF THE SCENIC VIEWS instead of behind them.

This paragraph makes the “Just Passed Scenic Views” mistake:

In a recent poll, 51% of Americans estimated that most or some of the food they eat is genetically modified (or contains GMOs) while the rest claimed that they eat “no GMOs” or “not too much.” Further, 65% of those who knowingly eat a fair amount of GMO food claim to have read a lot about genetically modified foods, while a whopping 75% of GMO-abstainers admit they have read nothing about these foods. You would think these results would be the other way around if modified organisms were as terrible as some perceive them to be. Instead, the poll revealed that most of the people who are consuming GMOs have gathered a lot of information on them, while 75% of the people who stay away from these foods admitted to reading absolutely nothing about them.

This paragraph tells readers to watch for “Scenic Views Ahead”:

Evidence shows that adults who are educated about genetically-modified foods (GMOs) accept their safety and consume them without hesitation. In a 2018 Pew Center Research Poll, 65% of respondents who knowingly eat a fair amount of GMO food report that they have read a lot about GMOs and feel well-informed. Those who admit ignorance about GMOs, on the other hand, fear and avoid them. Among GMO-abstainers, many of whom admit to having “health concerns” about the products, a whopping 75% admit they have read nothing about genetic modification or GMO foods.

Help when you need it.

Located in the Campbell Library, the Writing Center offers help to students from experienced tutors eager to assist their peers by appointment.

Rowan Writing Center tutors provide opportunities that enable student writers to discover and develop effective writing and composing practices. We offer a space where writers of many genres can find support at any stage of the writing process.  From brainstorming ideas, organizing them, revising drafts and checking citations, the RWC and its tutors provide a comfortable environment for students to improve and succeed.

Link to the Rowan Writing Center website. Register here, “meet the tutors,” and make an appointment.

Prepping for the Portfolio

White Paper—Annotated Bibliography

Until now, your White Paper has served as the repository for sources you found to support your Definition, Causal, and Rebuttal Arguments. As such, it should contain roughly 15 sources, many of them academic.

It should also contain Purposeful Summaries of those sources, Practice Openings, maybe a section called “Current State of my Research,” or “What I’m Still Looking For,” random notes about searches you’ve conducted, and for each source you’ve consulted, sections called “Background,” and “How I Will Use it.”

But it probably doesn’t. You’ve been busy.

As you construct your Portfolio, you’ll be adapting the contents of your White Paper into an Annotated Bibliography. The more complete your White Paper is, the easier you’ll find this process.

Let’s look ahead to the transition from a working document to the Annotated Bibliography you’ll submit as part of your Portfolio.


PORTFOLIO TASK

Annotated Bibliography

  • MON APR 22

Writing Advice

Examine an Argument

  • Ag-Gag Laws
    • Follow the link and examine the linked documents before class on MON APR 15

13 Responses to 21 Class WED APR 10

  1. nousernamefound1 says:

    Writing Advice-

    Just Passed Scenic Views
    You can see that he/she made a mistake with the conclusion. It’s not always your fault as a writer. The knowledge you get from reading material can mislead you. Instead, the phrase should be AHEAD OF THE SCENIC VIEWS. You never want to discuss something behind you. The paragraph on GMO’s show a good example on how the phrase “just passed scenic views” works. The people who accept it listen and the people who don’t think the reading is about them ignore it. In reality you want everybody to listen then make the decision to either rely on the material or don’t rely.

    Help- Campbell Library is always the place to go to if you need help. The writing center gives out good advice to make your paper standout more. “Rowan Writing Center tutors provide opportunities that enable student writers to discover and develop effective writing and composing practices. We offer a space where writers of many genres can find support at any stage of the writing process.  From brainstorming ideas, organizing them, revising drafts and checking citations, the RWC and its tutors provide a comfortable environment for students to improve and succeed.”

    -Agenda
    Annotated Bib/Mon April 22
    Part of portfolio

    Ag-Gag Laws/Follow the link and examine the linked documents before class on MON APR 15

  2. rowanstudent2 says:

    Writing Advice
    – Any writer making the same mistake would have to return her reader’s attention back to the material he’s already read and analyzed, draw his attention to things he might have missed, prepare him after the fact to receive information in the most effective way, and talk him out of conclusions he’s already drawn
    – make sure to state your point with much detail in the beginning, not after you made your essay

    Help when you need it
    – Rowan Writing Center tutors at the Library

    Prepping for the Portfolio
    – White Paper — Annotated Bibliography
    – update if needed
    – it should contain purposeful summaries, practice openings, current state of my research, what I’m still looking for, random notes, background of sources, and how I will use those sources
    Annotated Bibliography
    – adapt from White Paper
    – Background (give link to article) and How I Used It
    – 10-15 sources
    – broad range of credible source types
    – “How I Used It”
    – name is Bibliography-rowanstudent
    – due in two weeks (Monday April 22nd)

    Examine an Argument
    Ag-Gag Laws
    – reading assignment
    – think about animals, how we treat them, and to what extent we need to be honest about how we produce our food.

    Writing Advice
    – wield your statistics
    – having them is pointless when you don’t know how to use them
    – readers need to be told how your number compares to the range of possible numbers
    – a statistic by itself means nothing until you place it into context
    – except for experts in the field of your endeavor, your readers are at your mercy to interpret the value of the numbers you share
    – readers count on you to guide them to an understanding of the importance of the evidence you present

  3. doorknob9 says:

    Annotated bibliography due Monday April 10th
    Top 15 sources should be used for annotated bibliography
    Make sure notations are accurate
    Healthy siblings have survivor guilt when their sibling is disabled or sick
    Ag-Gag Laws is counterintuitive
    Confining animals to small living spaces means more tender meat to be sold
    Activists sneak in to meat packaging plants and video tape meat packaging practices
    Goal of this is to get meat packaging firm in trouble, make people eat less meat
    Meat processors want to make access into their facility illegal

  4. hazelnutlatte123 says:

    – bibliography due april 22
    – do not fall behind on revisions
    – stay on task to make it easier for you
    – go to rowan writing center
    – update white paper with why you did use it or why you chose to not use it
    – bibliography must have a range of credible source types
    – cannot only use popular sources
    – you can use only scholarly sources
    – when changing white paper, put the value of the sources and post to bibliography
    – follow links on the “Ag-gag Laws” and prepare for discussion in class on April 15th

  5. pomegranate4800 says:

    Notes:
    – If you have to explain something after you say something, it’s too late
    – Visual rhetoric rewrite due April 15
    – Revisions due every to every other class
    – The writing center is a good resource
    – Update white paper
    – Purposeful summaries
    – annotated bibliography
    – unacceptable if you only used magazines and such.
    – You must include a peer reviewed source.
    – Thats what makes it academic

  6. daphneblake25 says:

    -just as the sign, “just passes scenic views”, your essay shouldn’t lay out a lot of information before the writer makes his/her point
    -writing center in Campbell library if help needed with essays
    -annotated bibliography includes purposeful summaries
    -no more than 15 sources
    -includes: a link to the website and app cited
    -and the background of the citation and how you used it in your paper
    -broad range of credible source types

  7. nina525 says:

    Scenic views
    When scenic views are passed it is too late to understand the views unless you go back
    It is much more effective to tell them up front what the audience is about to receive
    Utilize the writing center in the library
    Annotated bibliography due April 22nd, collect citations ‘
    Take sources from White paper and purposeful summaries
    include short essay citations as well
    Include links
    A range of credible source types
    Publish it to bibliography, under the tag user name and bibliography
    Background or summary of article must be at least a paragraph two and include what the article addresses
    Monday reading: meat producers and how they car for their animals
    displaying how they treat their animals during processing
    Argument to make the process public or to only make it visible to police
    Public slaughter houses, instead of hiding there treatment toward animals

  8. mysterylimbo says:

    When writing makes sure to tell the reader your point before quoting or anything of the sort. Statistics make any paper stronger but it could lack a strong argument if the stat is counterintuitive.
    Write the biography and white paper 10-15 sources
    Visual rhetoric rewrite

  9. chavanillo says:

    Warm up:
    “Just Passed scenic views”
    -Is past tense
    What this means is= is wrong to say that.

    Good way to say it is “Scenic Views Ahead”
    – Just go straight to the point. Drawing the conclusion first.

    Help when you need it.
    Visual rhetoric rewrite a week from now.
    Rewrite of short arguments and long research paper.

    White Paper-Annotated Bibliography
    – Cite and write purpose summary for each source I use.
    – 15 or more sources

    Assignment Specifics
    Need to use academic sources.
    -10 to 15 resources
    -New York Times.
    Due April, 22, 2019

    Argument: Animal illegal killing
    -Meat processors want to make it illegal for everyone to collect data on what is happening in their facilities.

    Build your statistics:
    My Numbers is a good Number:
    -Readers need to be told hoe your number compares to the range of possible numbers. The statistics by itself means nothing until you place it into context.
    – A full 50% More then half
    -As high as 50% Less than half
    -Has improved to 50% Trand that is heading upward
    -Proud to announce we have achieved 50%
    -At 50%, the perfect balance

    Real life example:
    Michelle Obama , Her book your is talking frankly about infertility

    Minor In class Task:

  10. jets1313 says:

    Just passed scene views
    statistics should be introduced so readers know what they are looking at

    – Cambell Library is a very useful tool that you can use to improve writing and papers

    what is the logic to require someone to publicize evidence within three days

    – academic sources extremely value to convince readers your research is sound and that your argument is not just your opinion

  11. yourfavoriteanon says:

    Notes:
    – catch the reader’s attention and convince them before they make their own conclusions instead of adding the “just passed scenic views” sentences
    – fixing the white paper now will hellion the annotated bibliography
    – notations need to be accurate and detailed
    – add context to the statistics to whether they are bad or good

  12. wazoo1234 says:

    annotated bib due april 22
    Must have 10-15 sources
    Peer reviewed source.
    Use the writing center to help revise and finish essay
    Visual rhetoric due next week
    Must complete revisions as they are part of grade, cannot fall behind on them.

  13. nyaj32 says:

    Annotated bibliography is due on the 22nd
    Make sure that all sources are credible and are cited properly
    Visual rhetoric rewrite is due this Monday
    Revisions are apart of our grade so we can not fall behind on them
    When we are citing sources we must elaborate on heat is being said so that the reader understand what point is trying to be made.

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