Robust Verbs–dayzur

Original:

There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

Revision:

A huge problem is beginning to arise in Vancouver. Heroin addicts are taking to crimes to feed their addiction. Efforts are being made to contain the issue as in the case of programs like the “free heroin for addicts”. The program only focuses on one issue, the crime rate, and is actively keeping the people on heroin. Using heroin makes it so these people have a harder time getting through day to day and daily things we think may be easy, such as interactions and relationships, come a lot harder for these addicts. They will do anything to feed their addiction and even go to the lengths of breaking and entering, and stealing. If the people are given heroin, then the streets will be safer and the hospitals will be less active with those in withdrawal or need to feed their addiction. This distribution of heroin will be the cleanest way possible and prove to solve one issue. However, this is only one issue that is being solved, the crime rate. Addiction is still being fueled and will continue to flourish until the people see this as a problem again.

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