13 Class WED MAR 06

Wake Up

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13 Responses to 13 Class WED MAR 06

  1. doorknob9 says:

    Make sure to be responsive and unique in the safer straws assignment and make sure the claims quotes are very brief.
    “Life Choices” on a coffee cap with 4 words around it. The 4 words are fame, service, family, love and money. I’d pick family and love.
    Being a server is like being a writer. Don’t ask open ended questions, don’t promise that you’ll have important information to share later, don’t blame the kitchen, don’t apologize for what you don’t have, and never contradict your customer’s preferences.
    There’s 50 people in a room. 60% of them are blue, and the other 40% red. You can divide them up into a perfect representation where blue wins having 3 blue districts and 2 red districts, you can make them compact but not fair where there’s 5 blue regions and 0 red regions, or you can make them neither compact or fair where there is 3 red regions and 2 blue regions. Basically, you can make any combination you want if you put your mind to it.
    Open your intro paragraphs strongly and make sure you enforce what your claim is right away, choose a good opening sentence.

  2. nj908 says:

    Something from the bar is abroad statement that makes questions and does not help the customer make a decision
    Writing should like a restaurant setting
    The Kitchen is where you get your research from
    The Chef is you going to your classes and “sharpening the knives”
    The Server is also you and you are the one delivering the work or food to the customer or reader
    The Customer is the know it all that you are trying to give your point to

  3. daphneblake25 says:

    -not going to ask open ended questions
    -make points and evidence clear
    -“show the appetizers”
    -don’t give 1000 ways to look at something and confuse readers
    -“the server” is the writer
    -the chef and kitchen isn’t responsible for your tasks
    -the customer is your reader, they’re always right until convinced otherwise
    -you can’t persuade the reader you’re right in one sentence, but you can make them this you’re wrong
    -every sentence’s job is to keep them reading onto the next sentence
    -success in arguing depends on;
    1. persuasion
    2. truth

  4. yourfavoriteanon says:

    – If a new post at the top of the screen has a blue background, it is pinned
    – an open-ended question like “something from the bar?” makes the customer feel rushed, confused and anxious of what they want to order
    – writing shouldn’t say “I have a selection of appetizers” but it should show the appetizers and help make you the decision
    – no open-ended questions
    – no promising of sharing important info later
    – don’t apologize for what you don’t have
    – don’t contradict your customer’s preferences
    – first sentences are important because it can make or break an argument
    – arguments cannot be won in the first sentence
    – The job of sentence # 1 is to get them read sentence # 2 and so forth
    – the first paragraph should contain persuasion, truth, clarity, premises

  5. mysterylimbo says:

    There are 50 people in a room. 60% of them are blue, and the other 40% red. You can divide them up into a perfect representation. The first sentence of an essay of an essay is very important because it gathers the reader’s attention. Persuasion, truth, clarity, premise is necessary to present a good essay for the reader. don’t apologize for what you don’t have, don’t contradict your customer’s preferences, first sentences are important because it can make or break an argument, and arguments cannot be won in the first sentence.

  6. chavanillo says:

    Wake up:
    -pinned to the blog for reminder for due assignments.
    -I choose Love, and Services because thats is what is more important to me in life. I really don’ care about the value of money it comes and goes. Fame the same. That is just material for me. I’m a really a faith person.
    -A question from the bar will let you make a decision on what you worm’t to have. “Something from the Bar?” The bar tender gives you a brief list of drinks tat are close to what they want. Like if the peon want something that has to do with cocktail, then the bar tender will show the person the different kinds of cocktail they got.
    -Hint to the metaphor: Readers do the same thing. Faced with too much new data or too many choices—in absence of clear guidance—they retreat to their bunkers where you can’t begin to persuade them.
    -You don’t understand your job, which is to serve, and by serving to guide, and by guiding to sell, and by selling to improve your employer’s bottom line, and—by helping out absolutely everybody—to take home bigger tips from happier customers whose enjoyment has been lubricated by expensive cocktails.
    -Write about the drinks you want them to buy. Demonstrates the right way to offer up appetizers. The other is the way we write too often without even knowing we’re doing it.
    NOT TO DO:
    -Don’t ask open ended questions
    -Don’t promise that you’ll have important information to share . . . later.
    Don’t blame the kitchen.
    Don’t apologize for what you don’t have.
    Never contradict your customer’s preferences.
    TO DO:
    -“Instead of open questions: We have spectacular cocktails from our certified mixologist (I know. I didn’t know there was such a thing either, but she has the certificate to prove it! 🙂 ) But if you’re not drinking, I have flavored teas, a full line of soft drinks, fresh coffees and teas. I’ll even put a big bottle of sparkling water in a bucket of ice. (But I won’t let you think that “sticking with tap water” is an alternative.)
    “Instead of saying there are countless options: For big appetites I have a 22-ounce porterhouse; South Jersey magazine raves about our chicken Parmesan; but the best bargain on the menu is the brick oven pizza: 15 bucks and you’ll take half of it home.”
    “Instead of blaming the kitchen: We’re not used to being so crowded on a Thursday, but the review that came out in the local paper has us really hopping.”
    “Instead of saying the owner forgot to order seafood: There are no good mussels in the market this week after that storm in the Gulf; fortunately, the Maine lobster was unaffected and the 2-pounder is on special.”
    “Instead of arguing about your customer’s favorite cut: A lot of people say that, and I agree, so this is hard for me to say, but the filet mignon actually has less flavor than the rib-eye which benefits from all the marbling. Our chef handles both cuts really well. Want to try something new?”
    -If this is exactly like the advice you’ve received in every other writing class you’ve taken, I’d love to hear about your earlier experiences.
    -If, on the other hand, it’s a fresh way to consider the task of crafting an academic essay, well, I’d love to hear that too.

    Card Fee when buy on credit Pay 4% more, New government rules allows us to pass along this cost.
    (Paid Cash) Headline when you act a certain way A percentage %, Editorial explanation I care about you. “I want you to safe money.”
    – An argument cannot be won in the first sentence, but it can be lost.
    -First sentences are very important.
    -Most authors of articles of all kinds have trouble writing first sentences.
    -There are several ways an article can be started.
    -Some ways of starting essays are better than others.
    -If you are starting to write an essay, you should be very careful about your first sentence.
    -Readers are attracted to good opening sentences.
    The job of every sentence is to attract readers to keep on going. Keep them reading to follow you through the conclusion.
    – It makes two strong paradoxical claims.
    -It sums up a very strong argument the essay will make.
    -It is itself an argument.
    -It makes a challenge to the reader.
    -It’s memorable.
    -It can be debated, demonstrated, illustrated.
    -It’s a good example of itself.

    An argument cannot be won in the first sentence, but it can be lost. Success in arguing depends on persuading readers of the truth of a clearly stated premise. Let’s break that down:
    -Persuasion: “We will not prove anything in our essays. Proofs are for mathematicians, not essay writers. We will persuade our readers by being reasonable but firm. We’ll appeal to their logic (logos), their emotions (pathos), and their humanity (ethos). Any hint of illogic, cheap sentimentality, or prejudice, even in the first sentence, can make readers wary of our intentions. We don’t want them defensive; we want them receptive. If they dig in to protect a cherished belief before we get them to listen, WE LOSE the argument.”
    -Truth: “Truth is different than proof. While what we argue will be provocative, we’ll state our case truthfully. To be caught in a lie would completely destroy our credibility, without which WE LOSE the argument.”
    -Clarity: “Because the truth is multifaceted, true declarations can be richly ambiguous, but that’s no excuse to be unclear. Even as they describe nuanced opinions, our claims, to persuade, must be clear. The quickest way to lose an argument is to keep the reader wondering what we mean by what we say. If we can’t be understood, WE LOSE the argument.”
    -Premise: “It goes without saying that we need to convince our readers of something in particular. The premises cannot be false, but neither can they be obvious. They are premises because they require evidence and persuasion. Without them, WE LOSE the argument.”
    Due: 3/13/2019

  7. wazoo1234 says:

    like servers we as writers need to guide our readers the right way, eventually getting a “bigger tip” or better grade.
    demonstrate evidence and prove to readers and make them believe.
    No open ended questions.
    keep readers intrigued
    Have good first sentence to make reader read second sentence and not lose your argument.

  8. pomegranate4800 says:

    – After you choose your life path there is no going back.
    – When you hear the question, “Something from the bar?” you automatically assume it is alcoholic. However, they are asking questions to aid the customer in making a choice. It could help clarify what we want.
    – As writers, we will not ask open ended questions.
    – No saying there are countless options.
    – You are the server, your customer is your reader.
    – You can lose an argument in the first sentence. If you grab the attention of the reader there is no promise they will read sentence two.
    – The one job we have is to make sure they read sentence 2. Each sentences job Is to make the reader keep going.
    – The overall goal is to make the reader read all the way through.
    – When we get caught in a lie we are no longer persuasive.
    – If we can’t be understood, we lose.

  9. nina525 says:

    Coffee top: choosing two things to live with without the others
    Bar interpretation
    You are the server and the reader is the customer
    If you don’t have what your customer is asking for, don’t apologize, provide evidence or another alternative that will satisfy the customer instead
    If you manage to keep your readers attention you have accomplished the mission of engaging, arguing, and keeping the readers in question
    Keep attractive opening sentences
    Persuade readers that your premise is true
    If you are not understood you have lost the argument, but even with a good argument the writer can still lose
    Next Wednesday, the first opening paragraphs of your essay are due

  10. nousernamefound1 says:

    -Wake Up-
    Coffee cup with 4 buttons. Love, Money, Fame, or Service. If you were asked to choose two, what would you pick. Remember that once you pick two your stuck for life. You can’t commit to something that is permitted. I would pick love and money. Both of these would make me happy and I feel as though both of these have higher value than the other two. Service would be my next pick, but Fame is out of the discussion. I don’t care too much about fame.

    Something from the bar?
    The only thing you can get from this question is if the bartender can actually help with getting me something. Overwhelming possibilities of a question like this retreat readers to bunkers where you can’t persuade them. Most of the time when we are reading, we end up arguing with the text.

    Don’t ask open-ended questions.
    Don’t promise that you’ll have important information to share . . . later.
    Don’t blame the kitchen.
    Don’t apologize for what you don’t have.
    Never contradict your customer’s preferences

    -How to Open Lecture
    Instead of saying Card Fee when you pay with credit because the governed allows us too, you should say “Pay with cash to eliminate paying the extra 4 percent, because we love our customers.”
    You can lose all your readers with the first sentence. The first sentence is to get the readers to read number 2. Your first sentence can be a argument. PERSUADE NOT PROVE. YOU CANNOT HIDE EVIDENCE OR LIE, BECAUSE THEN YOU LOSE. YOU CANNOT WIN WITH NIT BEING CEAR.

    -Open Strong Anne Frank
    If you are Jew, you must beware of becoming a walking experiment even after death. Just a few days ago, a member of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints, performed a baptize on the well-known Anne Frank. They don’t feel sorry for Holocaust victims or Jews. They continue to perform the practices of Mormon posthumous proxy baptisms, despite church vows to stop such practices.

  11. jets1313 says:

    – don’t allow readers to make do many choices….guide the reader
    – most everything we write is an argument
    – an argument n not be one in the first sentence but it can be lost
    – first sentence has one job is to get your reader read sentence number 2
    – each sentence should keep readers reading
    – can lose an argument by making claim so outrages you can support it
    – first sentence can be an argument
    – should be very carful when writing first sentence
    – there are several ways an article can be started
    -objective of writing is to persuade readers of the truth clearly stated premise
    – try to provoke readers
    – can not lie (Only which evidence is more important than other)
    – need to be clear in order to win

    opening paragraph

  12. rowanstudent2 says:

    Wake Up
    Life Choices
    – the top of a coffee lid had four choices and you had to pick two for the rest of your life
    – I chose love and money because love makes me happy and money is great to have
    Something from the bar?
    – a question that may cause the opposite of the intended goal of making the customer get something from the bar because of hesitation and panic
    – guide your reader to the right conclusion
    – stay in charge of the subject matter
    – don’t ask open-ended questions
    – don’t promise that you’ll have important information to share later
    – restaurant analogy to writing: chef and server are you, the customer is the reader, and the kitchen is all your research gatherings
    Gerrymandering, explained
    – people are separated into districts
    – majority always wins

    How to Open Lecture
    – it’s all in how you say it
    – How to turn “Card Fee, when you buy on credit, pay 4% more, new government rules allows us to pass along this cost” into a positive way
    – “Pay with cash, when you act a certain way, save 4%, because the company cares about their customers”
    – choose the good opening sentence
    – the job of sentence number one is to get your reader to read sentence number two
    – the job of any sentence is to get your reader to read all the way through your argument to the conclusion
    – it doesn’t matter if the first sentence is true or not, as long as it’s intriguing enough to the reader
    – the first sentence depends on persuasion, truth, clarity and premise
    – you don’t have to prove anything in your essay, but persuade your reader to “your side”
    – state your case truthfully, don’t lie
    – be clear about your claim

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