Definition—profs22

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Healthcare is something that all citizens should have access to, but not just the ability to purchase healthcare, the ability to have it automatically.  It’s true that insurance companies can cover their customers, but under what consequences?  The lower class suffers the most with mental illness because they cannot afford to get treatment, or insurance.  As individuals suffering with mental illnesses continues to increase, the number of employers who are willing to provide benefits decreases.  People who suffer from such disorder are way more likely to experience poverty or unemployment thus will not be able to afford insurance on there own let alone the help they need.  The help that individuals need is there.  In our society today there have been major advancements in medicine and technology, but the one issues is, its not easily available.  With more and more people suffering from major psychiatric disorders, employers and insurance companies are more likely to limit coverage in order to save money.  It is proven that people who suffer from mental health disorders most likely are uninsured why people who have no history of mental illness are insured.  In the article titled Insurance Coverage of Mental Health and Substance Abuse Services for Children and Adolescents, the American Academy of Pediatrics writes, “To improve mental health services, it is important to address 3 issues: access, coordination, and monitoring”.  It’s that simple.  Everyone should be able to have to have access to healthcare, coordination of mental health services which is very unorganized, and monitoring which allows patients to have direct communication with health care services.  All of which should come as a right to all citizens, with the cost covered by insurance companies who seem to only be out for money and not the consumers best interest.

Not only do patients have to struggle with the cost of health care, but they have difficulty obtaining access.  The process to access mental health treatments are long and stressful.  Seeing different doctors and social workers as medication is not prescribed by a therapist.  Most of the time the psychologist (the therapist) and the psychiatrist (who prescribes the medication) do not communicate or work together and it makes the process very difficult.  For certain mental disorders a prescription is required to get medicine such as Xanax, Adderall, etc.  What’s even more shocking is that patients may be denied a prescription based on their age.  A study was conducted to compare individual’s ability to obtain a prescription with and without a diagnosis.  The end result was that a majority of individuals without a prescription were able to have access that medicine.  It appeared that patients within an older age range were less likely to get a prescription.  The study, written by Weichers in the article Prescribing of Psychotropic Medications to Patients Without a Psychiatric Diagnosis, argues that, “that prescribing psychotropic medication in the absence of a psychiatric diagnosis is not uncommon, increases with age of the individual, is more prevalent in general medical practice than in mental health specialty care, and is modestly accounted for by the severity of an individual’s general medical illness or by medical indications for use.”  When further investigating the study, it is shown that the categories were broken up into medication (with six subgroups) and diagnosis. It was then proven that age had a big influence on the results.  The end results proving the hypothesis to be true.  So why is it that in our society a person’s age influences whether or not they can get a prescription, and therefore access health services.  Access should be open to all, no matter age, or financial status.

It seems ironic that those who suffer more from mental disorders are less likely to be able to get the care that they need.  As individuals suffering with mental illnesses continues to increase, the number of employers who are willing to provide benefits decreases.  People who suffer from such disorder are way more likely to experience poverty or unemployment thus will not be able to afford insurance on their own let alone the help they need.  The help that individuals need is there.  In our society today there have been major advancements in medicine and technology, but the one issues is, its not easily available.  With more and more people suffering from major psychiatric disorders, employers and insurance companies are more likely to limit coverage to save money.  It is proven that people who suffer from mental health disorders most likely are uninsured why people who have no history of mental illness are insured.  Ronald Sturm and Kenneth Wells explain in Health Insurance May Be Improving-But Not for Individuals with Mental Illness, “The number of individuals without health insurance increased from 1979 to 1997. This has been attributed to declines in the number of employers offering insurance or in lower employer contributions (resulting in fewer employees electing coverage due to higher costs. Because individuals with major psychiatric disorders are at high risk for poverty (and least likely to be able to afford plans that require large contributions) or unemployment, persons with such disorders may be particularly vulnerable to becoming uninsured”.  In today’s day and age, one would think that health care would be available to all.  It is unjust that so many individuals must suffer and cannot get the treatment they need simply because the system is failing them.  Mental health should be treated at the same importance as physical health.  The numbers are rising, and something must be done to put an end to this suffering.  Those families who are poor and cannot afford the health insurance to get better are the ones who need it most, the only thing left standing in the way is for those big corporations to start thinking for the people and less for themselves.

References

“Insurance Coverage of Mental Health and Substance Abuse Services for Children and Adolescents: A Consensus Statement.” APP News and Journals Gateway, American Academy of Pediatrics, Oct. 2000. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1089099/pdf/hsresearch00009-0087.pdf

Wiechers, Ilse R. “Prescribing of Psychotropic Medications to Patients Without a Psychiatric Diagnosis.” Psychiatric Services, 1 Dec. 2013, https://ps.psychiatryonline.org/doi/full/10.1176/appi.ps.201200557

Sturm, Ronald, and Kenneth Wells. “Health Insurance May Be Improving-But Not for Individuals with Mental Illness.” Https://Www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/, https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC1089099/pdf/hsresearch00009-0087.pdf

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12 Responses to Definition—profs22

  1. Jessicariccio says:

    I have no idea why the font is so big but feel free to give as much feedback as possible because i would like to know how i can make this better. I took some writing from my white paper and i’m not sure if i was able to do that. I would like some feed back on my citations and reference list and i would also just like to know if i stuck with the definition argument theme or if i went off topic, thank you!

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  2. davidbdale says:

    Your first paragraph (introduction?) seems to be all over the map, so I’m going to break down the claims to see if there are several, or just a few that are repeated.

    HEALTHCARE IS A UNIVERSAL RIGHT.
    —Healthcare is something that all citizens should have access to, but not just the ability to purchase healthcare, the ability to have it automatically.
    —Everyone should be able to have to have access to healthcare, coordination of mental health services which is very unorganized, and monitoring which allows patients to have direct communication with health care services.
    —All of which should come as a right to all citizens, with the cost covered by insurance companies who seem to only be out for money and not the consumers best interest.

    PEOPLE ARE BEING DENIED HEALTHCARE.

    INSURANCE COMPANIES DON’T PROVIDE WHAT THEY SHOULD.
    —It’s true that insurance companies can cover their customers, but under what consequences?
    —With more and more people suffering from major psychiatric disorders, employers and insurance companies are more likely to limit coverage in order to save money.
    —All of which should come as a right to all citizens, with the cost covered by insurance companies who seem to only be out for money and not the consumers best interest.

    POOR PEOPLE GET THE SHORT END OF THE STICK
    —The lower class suffers the most with mental illness because they cannot afford to get treatment, or insurance.
    —People who suffer from such disorder are way more likely to experience poverty or unemployment thus will not be able to afford insurance on there own let alone the help they need.
    —It is proven that people who suffer from mental health disorders most likely are uninsured why people who have no history of mental illness are insured.

    EMPLOYERS ARE DENYING THEIR WORKERS HEALTHCARE
    —As individuals suffering with mental illnesses continues to increase, the number of employers who are willing to provide benefits decreases.
    —With more and more people suffering from major psychiatric disorders, employers and insurance companies are more likely to limit coverage in order to save money.

    THE MEDICAL ESTABLISHMENT IS NOT TO BLAME.
    —The help that individuals need is there.
    —In our society today there have been major advancements in medicine and technology, but the one issues is, its not easily available.

    DELIVERY OF MENTAL HEALTHCARE SHOULD BE IMPROVED
    —In the article titled Insurance Coverage of Mental Health and Substance Abuse Services for Children and Adolescents, the American Academy of Pediatrics writes, “To improve mental health services, it is important to address 3 issues: access, coordination, and monitoring”.
    —It’s that simple.
    —All of which should come as a right to all citizens, with the cost covered by insurance companies who seem to only be out for money and not the consumers best interest.

    I count 7 Main Ideas in your first paragraph. With that sort of overload, you can’t blame readers for getting confused, Profs. A good paragraph contains a single main idea with minor points permitted to expand and illustrate it. You’ve crammed 7 ideas into one and not expanded any of them.

    It’s unclear who you really blame for the problem(s) you identify. One seems to be that poor people can’t access healthcare. Another that employers are cutting back on the insurance they provide their workers. Another that the insurance companies themselves are somehow denying services. They may all be true, but saying so doesn’t convince your readers.

    My first recommendation would be to separate out your ideas into one paragraph each. Use the evidence you have for each to develop those ideas individually.

    Don’t worry about writing an Introduction yet. (The best time for that is AFTER you’ve written your body paragraphs.)

    LOOKING AHEAD.
    I couldn’t help but notice you repeated, verbatim, about 150 words of your introduction in paragraph 3.

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  3. davidbdale says:

    It’s a pretty rocky first draft, Profs. I wish we had a couple of weeks to work on it. I hope you have plenty of time over the next few days to commit to radical rewrites. I’ll put in the time to help you if you fully invest yourself in the effort, but I was hoping to see more work from you sooner than the day before Portfolios are due.

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    • Jessicariccio says:

      Ive just had so much work in all my classes, my advisor told me it would be possible to do an incomplete where i get more time to finish my work but im not sure if that would affect my overall credit or gpa

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      • davidbdale says:

        I completely understand that, Profs, and I sympathize. I’m still here to help you if you have the time and energy to put in the work. Your advisor is half right about incompletes. Here’s the policy for our course, taken from the Syllabus.

        Incomplete

        Very special circumstances only! Students in good standing with a B average at the time of their incapacity who suffer a serious illness, injury or pressing emergency which renders them unable to complete the required work for the course may be given a grade of I (incomplete) at the discretion of the professor and only by approved proposal.

        This would be available to students who had been regularly posting, for example, their short arguments, engaging in feedback conversations, and revising BEFORE suffering an emergency that prevented them from completing the coursework.

        Your options now are to press forward or withdraw, if you can still make the deadline.

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  4. davidbdale says:

    Your advisor assumes you have met the qualifications for an Incomplete. You have not.

    Incomplete

    Very special circumstances only! Students in good standing with a B average at the time of their incapacity who suffer a serious illness, injury or pressing emergency which renders them unable to complete the required work for the course may be given a grade of I (incomplete) at the discretion of the professor and only by approved proposal.

    This would be available to students who had been regularly posting, for example, their short arguments, engaging in feedback conversations, and revising BEFORE suffering an emergency that prevented them from completing the coursework.

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  5. davidbdale says:

    IMPORTANT CITATION ADVICE
    Fuller explanations are available at https://rucomp2.com/about/apa-citation/ but here are the essential corrections for your first citation:

    UNCORRECTED
    In the article titled Insurance Coverage of Mental Health and Substance Abuse Services for Children and Adolescents, the American Academy of Pediatrics writes, “To improve mental health services, it is important to address 3 issues: access, coordination, and monitoring”. It’s that simple.

    CORRECTED
    In the article titled “Insurance Coverage of Mental Health and Substance Abuse Services for Children and Adolescents,” the American Academy of Pediatrics writes, “To improve mental health services, it is important to address 3 issues: access, coordination, and monitoring.” It’s that simple.

    EXPLANATIONS
    —Article titles are punctuated with quotation marks, NOT italics. (Book titles and names of publications are italicized.)
    —Periods (and commas) go inside the quotation marks ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS ALWAYS.

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