Open Strong – gooferious

The world is a complex place filled with complex people. War, chaos and anarchy are still prevalent to this day. What drives a person to do unspeakable acts? Is it possibly a childhood trauma that has forever clouded their judgement and reasoning? Or is it merely for pure personal gain? What if I said that there was a way to decrease the chances of someone continuing to think in a manner so selfish and egocentric. Forcing young adults into therapy rather than the voluntary choice will increase the likelihood of them becoming outstanding members of society.

The word therapy can manifest different reactions to different people. Some don’t see the wrong in going to therapy while others blatantly refuse to even acknowledge it as a solution. Evidence shows whether we like it or not that therapy is a efficient way for people to release stress and work through their problems with the help of a professional. For those that cannot afford therapy, have no fear as therapy will now be available to any person who dreams of becoming a more educated, well-rounded adult. This is especially helpful for the young adults who have been through a world of pain and suffering, the one guarantee that comes with therapy is coming out as an outstanding member of society.

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2 Responses to Open Strong – gooferious

  1. gooferious says:

    Do these openings even make sense? Hopefully they do but if they don’t, is there anything you can let me know that can improve?

  2. davidbdale says:

    The world is a complex place filled with complex people. War, chaos and anarchy are still prevalent to this day. What drives a person to do unspeakable acts? Is it possibly a childhood trauma that has forever clouded their judgement and reasoning? Or is it merely for pure personal gain? What if I said that there was a way to decrease the chances of someone continuing to think in a manner so selfish and egocentric. Forcing young adults into therapy rather than the voluntary choice will increase the likelihood of them becoming outstanding members of society.

    I greatly admire the strength and the audacity of your premises here, Gooferious. The risk you take, of course, is that once you posit mayhem and global chaos, readers will be let down to discover your actual thesis is about having teens do talk therapy. You should also replace ANY rhetorical questions EVER with bold clear declarative claims. Maybe reversing the intensity direction is the way to go here. Young adults in need of therapy don’t always get it. They continue to act selfishly, mostly out of ignorance that there are alternatives. Unchecked, their impulses to feed their own egos and satisfy their hungers leads to psychopathy, violence, rage until death stops them or they end up on death row. But all that could be prevented by therapy in their youth.

    The word therapy can manifest different reactions to different people. Some don’t see the wrong in going to therapy while others blatantly refuse to even acknowledge it as a solution. Evidence shows whether we like it or not that therapy is a efficient way for people to release stress and work through their problems with the help of a professional. For those that cannot afford therapy, have no fear as therapy will now be available to any person who dreams of becoming a more educated, well-rounded adult. This is especially helpful for the young adults who have been through a world of pain and suffering, the one guarantee that comes with therapy is coming out as an outstanding member of society.

    This version opens like one of the REJECT sentences from “How to Open a Lecture.” There is no less effective way to start an essay than by insisting that XYZ means different things to different people. You’re not interested in ALL PEOPLE and EVERY point of view. Your readers aren’t either. Choose the one that matters and promote the heck out of it.

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