Causal Essay Rewrite – Tikeena Sturdivant

Slavery was not seen as a bad thing in the white man’s eyes even though it clearly was. If it was up to them slavery would go on forever! The effect of slavery was the last thing on their mind, they did not care about how blacks felt. The effect of slavery has negatives and positives. The positives come from blacks wanting to prove white people wrong and actually make something out of their lives which caused them to work hard. But even working hard didn’t change what the whites thought about them. The negatives were discrimination, less opportunities, being treated bad, and being looked down on. The things that blacks had to go through as a race was extremely crucial.

The Thirteenth Amendment  freed black slaves in the U.S, however, as a race we still suffered. The goal of this Amendment was to “abolish slavery and to eliminate both symbolically and practically the cause of the Civil War and threat to the stability of the Union.” The President of the United States at the time, Abraham Lincoln, believed that “men were created equally.” Many people disagreed with President Lincoln, whites thought they were always better than blacks.

The racial comments, thoughts, actions, and mindsets of whites did not change immediately. Blacks were still neglected by society and dealt with discrimination, they were freed physically but not mentally. Whites had a mindset that led them to believe that blacks were inferior to them and they were born to serve them.  So many laws were passed to protect blacks after slavery, the physically pain was over but as a race blacks still had to deal with negatives.

Unfortunately, slavery is the “heart of conflict” between white and blacks. Slavery still had a big influence on blacks even after emancipation. The Union Army encouraged blacks to become slaves again to avoid the discrimination that they would face. Personally, I would not be willing to go back and work for anybody but what can I do if no one is willing to help me? It was hard for them to find a job, a place to live, and a way to reunite with their family. One could argued that they went from being slaves to complete bums. They were basically forced to deal with the hardships of being a slave or be set free with nothing at all, which reminds me of the NFL lockout!

Professional football players are expected to accept the way they are treated because of the amount of money they are paid. Slaves may have not of been paid a lot of money but they had to accept the way they were being treated. After the emancipation some slaves chose to go back and some slaves chose to try living on their own. At the time slaves did have a choice just like football players have a choice to quit the team. People always seem to bring up the fact that Adrian Peterson could just quit, however, its irrelevant because after the Thirteenth Amendment slaves had a choice as well.

As many years went by things began to become better for Blacks in the US. Racism still exist but not as much as it did after emancipation. The black community is given more opportunities to work, own a house, and live peacefully. However, racism still exist and blacks still face more discrimination then any other race. Personally, I believe white men still feels superior to have a black person working for them. The perfect example will be football. It clear that President Lincoln’s “all men were created” belief do not apply in this country as much as it should. This does not even apply to the NFL! If all men and created equal, why are the men who are working the hardest is getting paid the least? The team owners are literally making money off of the NFL players, where most of them are black.

All the team owners are white an 72% of NFL players are black, which are more than half. Professor Hodges made a good point he said, “wealthy white men still gather in rooms to decide how many times a year to put their mostly black players onto the field to put on a show for the fans.” They are rich due to the black players performance on the field. How is it that they make more money then the players who work hard to play the game? I’m not saying that they shouldn’t be paid, however, I am saying they should not be making more than the players!

I can not think of anything to describe the labor of the NFL and what the players go through but “slavery by another name”. The team owners have just as much power has a slave owner would have had. I agree with our former President George Bush, he described slavery as “one of the greatest crimes of history.” These people should not get away with this hidden from of slavery. The NFL should actually be investigated, in which they were but I still feel as though some changes need to be made.


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2 Responses to Causal Essay Rewrite – Tikeena Sturdivant

  1. davidbdale says:

    That’s a significant improvement over your first draft, Tikeena. What else can you improve before the deadline?

  2. sturdi36 says:

    I don’t know, I’ve been reading it over and over to try and figure it out.

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