Definition Rewrite- person345

Stages of the Denial Travel

The Coronavirus or COVID-19 is a newly discovered virus that is wreaking havoc around the world. In January of this year, 800,000 new cases have been reported in the United States and 117 million globally. Cases are continuing to rise at an increasing rate. When the Coronavirus was declared a worldwide Pandemic in March of last year, countries around the world took necessary precautions by closing their borders to stop the spread. As a result, 90% of the world has been locked down and are required to stay socially distant.  

This has dramatically reduced travel. The high-volume shutdowns that are in effect forced people to not travel since airlines suspended all services domestic and international. People are now required to stay home and quarantine themselves.

 When people travel, they expect to gain satisfaction. It serves as an escape from their busy and stressful lives. There are different levels of satisfaction when traveling. In a journal article titled “Health and Wellness Benefits of Travel Experiences A Literature Review”, two researchers named Chun-Chu Chen from Washington State University and James Patrick from Texas A & M analyzed the emotions that a person feels during a vacation and they put them into four stages. Chen and Patrick named These stages: The Stages of Travel.

However, when people are getting denied the ability to travel for an intensive period, the opposite effects of the Stages of Travel occur. Instead of getting the benefits of travel such as happiness and satisfaction, they are feeling the opposite. A person’s satisfaction decreases throughout the process. These parallel stages are called the The Stages of Denial of Travel.

Not allowing people to leave their homes has devastating effects on one’s mental state. An article titled “The Psychological Impact of Quarantine and How to Reduce it: Rapid Review of the Evidence” written by multiple doctors and practitioners explains these effects. According to this article, quarantining within your home for an extensive period can contribute to psychological disorders such as Post Traumatic Stress Disorder (PTSD), insomnia, and anxiety. This is because people are unable to be in close contact with one another and socialize which contributes to even more effects such as loneliness and irritability. These factors are reflected in the Stages for the Denial of Travel. Since people are unable to travel and escape the stresses of life, they are confined in their homes without any physical interaction with other people.

When one goes on vacation, he or she goes through and experiences four stages of travel. Before vacation, a person is in the Anticipation stage. During this stage, people are generally happier because of the excitement and anticipation of going on a vacation to enjoy themselves for a couple of days. People also look forward to making memories and experience positive feelings while on their getaway.

The second stage of this process is called the experience stage. During the experience stage, a person is on the vacation enjoying themselves and making those memories they were excited about making. This increases satisfaction and carries over into the next stages of the Stages of Travel.

The third Stage of Travel is the Beneficial Stage which happens during and after vacation. Satisfaction is at its highest point during this stage.  Eventually, people begin to reflect on their experiences, and they carry over to when they return home. Those experiences are shared with others. The person who went on the vacation has high satisfaction and wants others to know all about their trip.

Then during the Fade-Out stage, The happiness and satisfaction gained from their travel experience starts to diminish and they return to their normal lives like going back to work and returning to school.

People rely on travelling for pleasure and satisfaction. Depriving them of those characteristics can have devastating effects on their mental health. Because of the worldwide shutdown of travel due to the Pandemic, many people are not gaining that happiness from going on a vacation. Instead, they are going through the opposite. These feelings are explained by The Stages of Denial of Travel. Satisfaction and happiness decrease throughout the stages of Denial of Travel. In the first stage, also known as the Fear stage, happiness starts to decrease because of the fear and growing anxiety of contracting the Coronavirus.

The next stage is known as the Negative Experience Stage The effects of this period have the opposite effect than the Experience Stage in the Stages of Travel. In this stage, people are fully experiencing what it is like to not have any close contact with others. They often deal with anxiety and boredom because they cannot leave their homes and be in physical contact with their friends and family.

 The third stage is the Harmful Stage. During the Harmful Stage, the negative effects, and consequences of the deprivation of travel come into effect. Sadness or the opposite of satisfaction is at its highest point here. The negative effects described earlier such as loneliness, Post Traumatic Stress Order, and anxiety take hold and begin to develop during this stage. Happiness and satisfaction are at their lowest during this. People begin to reflect their feelings and overall experiences of staying quarantined for a long period of time.

 The final stage of this process is the Fade In stage. During the Fade In stage, the anticipation of returning to normalcy and traveling increases satisfaction and happiness. When people are excited about finally traveling again after a long period of being isolated from the rest of the world, the negative consequences from the previous stages begin to fade away. People are finally looking forward to resuming their regular lives by being able to travel and congregate in person.

The Stages of the Denial of Travel reflect what the majority of people are going through especially during this current Pandemic. People are longing for a sense of normalcy so that they could leave their homes and travel at last. It is evident from Chun-Chu Chen and James Patrick’s Four Stages of Travel that travelling or going on a vacation is an important factor for psychological benefits. Taking away something that has many psychological benefits could eventually damage the human psyche.

References

  1. Chen, C. (2013). Health and wellness benefits of travel experiences a literature Review. Retrieved February 23, 2021.
  2. Brooks, S. K., Webster, R. K., Smith, L. E., Woodland, L., Wessely, S., Greenberg, N., & Rubin, G. J. (2020). The psychological impact of quarantine and how to reduce … Retrieved February 24, 2021.
  3. Ozdemir, M. (2020). (PDF) the novel Coronavirus Covid-19 crisis on Incoming … Retrieved February 22, 2021.

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5 Responses to Definition Rewrite- person345

  1. davidbdale says:

    Person, I like that you have introduced us to an interesting concept in your Introduction. The idea that Denial of Travel has consequences that mirror the benefits of travel is intriguing and offers a strong framework for your further observations.

    Since your concept and opening are strategic and sound, let’s spend a few minutes on structure.

    YOUR INTRODUCTION HAS TOO MANY MAIN IDEAS.
    Ideally, every paragraph as ONE main idea. When it turns its attention to a second idea, it should split itself into two. Your one paragraph is begging to be divided like so:

    1. The Coronavirus or COVID-19 is a newly discovered virus that wreaked havoc around the world. By 2021, there has been more than 800,000 cases in the United States and 117 million cases worldwide. Since the virus became a worldwide Pandemic in March of 2020, countries around the world began to shut down and close their borders to stop the spread. As a result, 90% of the world has been locked down and were required to quarantine.
    2. This rapidly influenced travel. Due to the high-volume shutdowns happening around the world, people were not able to travel since airlines suspended all services domestic and international. People were required to stay home.

    3. When people travel, they expect to gain satisfaction. It serves as an escape from their busy and stressful lives. There are different levels of satisfaction when traveling. In a journal article titled Health and Wellness Benefits of Travel Experiences A Literature Review, two researchers named Chun-Chu Chen from Washington State University and James Patrick from Texas A & M analyzed the emotions that a person feels during a vacation and they put them into four stages. Chen and Patrick named These stages: The Stages of Travel.

    4. However, when people are getting denied the ability to travel for an intensive period, the opposite effects of the Stages of Travel occur. Instead of getting the benefits of travel such as happiness and satisfaction, they are feeling the opposite. A person’s satisfaction decreases throughout the process. These parallel stages are called the The Stages of Denial of Travel.

    Could the 4 parts be combined into a single paragraph? They could, but only by reducing the amount of language devoted to your minor ideas.

    When travelers were identified as spreaders of the deadly COVID-19 virus, nations reacted by placing severe restrictions on international flights. As a result, millions of would-be travelers have been denied the many benefits of travel such as those enumerated by Chun-Chu Chen and James Patrick in “The Stages of Travel.” Turning all those benefits on their head, it is clear that people denied the happiness and satisfaction of travel must be suffering deprivations we will call “The Stages of Travel Denial.”

    Here all the essential claims of your original are preserved but in a paragraph in which every sentence contributes to the one main idea: Denial of Travel is detrimental.
    Sentence 1. Travel was restricted.
    Sentence 2. Would-be travelers were denied the benefits of travel.
    Sentence 3. We will describe the deprivations of denial that mirror the benefits of travel.

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  2. davidbdale says:

    I don’t ordinarily make grammar and sentence structure recommendations on the first draft, Person, but here I want to ask you to review your command of some verb tenses that are giving you trouble. Problems in ALL CAPS.

    The Coronavirus or COVID-19 is a newly discovered virus that WREAKED havoc around the world. BY 2021, THERE HAS BEEN more than 800,000 cases in the United States and 117 million cases worldwide. SINCE the virus became a worldwide Pandemic in March of 2020, countries around the world BEGAN TO SHUT down and close their borders to stop the spread. As a result, 90% of the world HAS BEEN LOCKED DOWN and WERE required to quarantine. This rapidly INFLUENCED travel. Due to the high-volume shutdowns happening around the world, people WERE NOT ABLE TO TRAVEL since airlines suspended all services domestic and international. People WERE REQUIRED to stay home.

    1. The Coronavirus or COVID-19 is a newly discovered virus that WREAKED havoc around the world.
      —The virus is still with us, so it is still wreaking havoc. History will say, “The virus wreaked havoc,” but while we’re in it, we say, “The virus HAS WREAKED havoc,” or “The virus IS WREAKING havoc,” or “The virus HAS BEEN WREAKING havoc.”

    2. BY 2021, THERE HAS BEEN more than 800,000 cases in the United States and 117 million cases worldwide.
      —When you specify what HAD OCCURED by any particular date or time, you stop counting cases TO THAT POINT. BY NOW there will have been more cases. But “By 2021, more than 800,000 cases in the United States and 117 million cases worldwide HAD BEEN REPORTED.” We have numbers for reported cases but no way to know how many actual (reported plus unreported) cases there HAVE BEEN.

    3. SINCE the virus became a worldwide Pandemic in March of 2020, countries around the world BEGAN TO SHUT down and close their borders to stop the spread.
      —The word SINCE signals that you’ll be describing something that happened on a particular date and continues to today. If countries ARE STILL shutting borders, you could say, “SINCE March of 2020, countries around the world HAVE BEEN SHUTTING down and CLOSING their borders to stop the spread.” But if they’ve stopped shutting borders, you need to say, “WHEN the virus became a worldwide Pandemic in March of 2020, countries around the world BEGAN TO SHUT down and close their borders to stop the spread.”

    4. As a result, 90% of the world HAS BEEN LOCKED DOWN and WERE required to quarantine.
      —The world was locked down, but it’s the people who were required to quarantine. So, “As a result, 90% of the world’s population HAS BEEN LOCKED DOWN and required to quarantine.”

    5. This rapidly INFLUENCED travel.
      —It did influence travel, and it continues to influence travel. (More specifically, since the word influence is too vague, it DRASTICALLY REDUCED travel.) So, “This HAS DRAMATICALLY REDUCED travel.”

    6. Due to the high-volume shutdowns happening around the world, people WERE NOT ABLE TO TRAVEL since airlines suspended all services domestic and international. People WERE REQUIRED to stay home.
      —Again, as in #1, the past tense would be appropriate if the virus were history, but since it’s still with us, along with travel restrictions, “The high-volume shutdowns that suspended domestic and international flights HAVE FORCED people to stay home and HAVE DENIED them the benefits of travel.”

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  3. davidbdale says:

    There’s a good essay in here, and I know you’re capable of writing it, Person. First drafts are just a way to get your ideas into good enough shape to share them, and you’ve done that well. I’ve graded the draft NOT as a first draft but to reflect how it would be graded if it were part of your Portfolio at the end of the semester. I think I’ve made clear that would be our process. Please don’t be satisfied with this first grade. Start making serious revisions to this draft, ask questions, continue the conversation, and from time to time put this post into the Feedback Please or Regrade Please categories for further interaction.

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  4. person345 says:

    Hi Professor, I have made some revisions to my Definition Rewrite. Is there anything else that I could do to improve my paper?

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  5. davidbdale says:

    There’s a disconcerting stop-and-start quality to your structure, Person. You spend considerable time leading up to the Four Stages of Travel. You rename them the Stages of Denial. You set the stage for a thorough description, and then . . . And then . . .

    You detour to the PTSD analogy and then again tease us with: “These factors are reflected in the Stages for the Denial of Travel.” So once again, we expect the payoff, but . . .

    Instead, you drop back a step and describe, painstakingly, the Stages of Travel.

    I won’t tell you HOW to fix this problem, but it was dysfunctional for this reader.

    Your overall plan for what to argue and your decision to parallel the advantages of travel with the disadvantages of denial are perfectly fine. It’s a solid, reasonable argument. But the structure, or maybe it’s just the sequencing, is very disconcerting.

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