Purposeful Summaries- person345

Do Multivitamins Really Work?

It seems counterintuitive that taking multivitamins could be dangerous for you. There is no evidence of multivitamins having health benefits and protection against diseases. Our whole lives, we were told by our parents and doctors to always take vitamins. But now it seems that vitamins have no effect on our bodies. In the United States, a third of Americans take multivitamins daily and because of that, companies such as the Vitamin Shoppe has sales growing in double digits every year. In truth, vitamins could be dangerous for people

Taking in an excessive amount of nutrients from multivitamins could lead to increased risk of illnesses such as an increased risk for heart disease. Taking Vitamin A while pregnant could cause birth defects. The FDA does not regulate supplement packaging warning against potential harmful side effects of multivitamins. This makes you wonder why are vitamins are not being regulated and why they are still on the market if they harm rather than help you? This seems unethical not to warn people of the potential risk of taking Multivitamins.

Clean Girls get Sicker?

            It seems counterintuitive that keeping little girls clean could make them sick. Boys when growing up are encouraged to play outside more and in turn are more exposed to germs and illnesses. Girls are often inside more and not exposed to bacteria as much. This is the Hygiene Hypothesis.

Girls are more susceptible to getting sick because they do not have as strong immune systems as men do. This is because they are not outside as much. Being outside and around bacteria will help strengthen your immune system.

 This is even more evident today because of the Coronavirus Pandemic. Little kids are inside more. Their immune systems are getting weaker since they are not getting exposed to germs that would otherwise strengthen their immune systems. Therefore, they are more likely to get sick.

Gun Regulation

It seems counterintuitive that a man named Jared Loughner was able to purchase a gun even though he was declared unstable to attend college and rejected by the army. Guns are not as regulated as some toys are. Guns have a higher chance of injuring and killing someone than toys are. Guns were designed to kill, toys were not. So, it is only fair to enforce more regulation of the sale of guns.

Each and everyday, more and more people are victims of shootings. Often, the shooter has a mental illness and thinks that killing people is an ok thing to do and more people are buying guns to protect themselves. People kill people. Guns are just the tool that kills.

To enforce stronger gun regulations, it is proposed that gun purchases should be limited to one purchase per month. Also, it is proposed that background checks should be improved so that people like Jared Loughner cannot get a hold of a firearm. Even though these gun regulations are unconstitutional in violating second amendment rights, it must be necessary to ensure the safety of people in this country.

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1 Response to Purposeful Summaries- person345

  1. davidbdale says:

    Let’s take a look at just one example, Person.

    It seems counterintuitive that a man named Jared Loughner was able to purchase a gun even though he was declared unstable to attend college and rejected by the army.

    Agreed, and well stated. You’ve ordered the premises correctly. The fact that he was too unstable for college should indicate he ought not to be buying assault weapons! But apparently it doesn’t.

    Guns are not as regulated as some toys are.

    Another strongly-stated counterintuitivity.

    Guns have a higher chance of injuring and killing someone than toys are.

    Here you need a better transition. It sounds like an unrelated claim when you don’t connect it to your other statements.

    Guns were designed to kill, toys were not. So, it is only fair to enforce more regulation of the sale of guns.

    You may be guilty of a bit of over-explaining here, Person, but nothing you say is incorrect.

    Each and everyday,

    Each and every day

    more and more people are victims of shootings.

    Victims of shootings get shot. When you can, use the robust verb instead of any noun. Every day, more and more Americans are shot by other Americans with mental illnesses who were granted gun licenses.

    Often, the shooter has a mental illness and thinks that killing people is an ok thing to do

    End your claim here because . . .

    and more people are buying guns to protect themselves.

    . . . because this part is irrelevant to your argument.

    People kill people. Guns are just the tool that kills.

    Yep. Again, over-explaining, but OK.

    To enforce stronger gun regulations, it is proposed

    Here you miss a chance to state your own position in JUST ONE WORD. “To enforce stronger gun regulations, it is RIGHTLY proposed . . . .

    that gun purchases should be limited to one purchase per month.

    This has nothing to do with Jared Loughner’s case and could be considered irrelevant to your narrow argument. You have only 3 paragraphs; you should use all 3 to advance a single strong premise.

    Also, it is proposed that background checks should be improved so that people like Jared Loughner cannot get a hold of a firearm.

    Back on track.

    Even though these gun regulations are unconstitutional in violating second amendment rights, it must be necessary to ensure the safety of people in this country.

    That’s a really weird ending that makes us doubt your sincerity. You’re either in favor or THIS regulation or you’re not.

    Nice work overall, Person. Your assignment has been graded at Canvas. You may revise this post for one week for a regrade if you wish. Remember to put the post into the Regrade Please category if you do.

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