Robust Verbs – clementine

There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits. The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts. The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts. It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives. Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using. By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug. The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing. There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction. The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin. It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to. By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes. This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital. It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug. This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible. This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

1.) There is a huge problem in Vancouver with heroin addicts committing crimes to support their habits.

Fixed: Felons who commit crimes, especially those who are heroin addicts, are creating a huge problem in Vancouver.

2.) The “free heroin for addicts” program is doing everything they can to stop the addicts.

Fixed: Addicts have been uncontrollable but the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program has a plan to stop these felons.

3.) The problem is that there is a large crime rate due to the addicts

Fixed: In the city of Vancouver, heroin addicts have caused the crime rates to increase.

4.) It is obvious that addicts have a hard time getting through their day to day lives

Fixed: *Can be deleted since this is known information to most people and doesn’t pertain to the program*

5.) Daily activities such as jobs, interactions, and relationships are hard to maintain because of the fact that they are using

Fixed: *Can be deleted since this is known information to most people and doesn’t pertain to the program*

6.) By heroin users being addicted, they will do whatever they have to do to get their hands on the drug

Fixed: *Can be deleted since this is more information about the heroin user which we do not absolutely need*

7.) The types of crimes committed are those of breaking and entering as well as stealing.

Trespassing and theft crimes are more likely to be committed by heroin addicts.

8.) There are no limits to where they will go to retrieve this drug so that they can feed their addiction.

Fixed: *This was already similarly stated in a previous sentence so we can delete it*

9.) The problem with this program is that it won’t help to ween these addicts off using heroin

Fixed: Although most drug addict programs help a victim slowly shy away from the drug, the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program does not which plays into the increase of crime rates in the city.

10.) It is only trying to save the city from rising crime rates that they’re up to.

Fixed: The program is not helping the addict, but is only trying to help the city be more safe.

11.) By providing the drug, these addicts will be off the streets, which in turn will prevent them from committing minor street crimes.

Fixed: The reduction of minor street crimes would be provided by the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program which in turn, give free heroin to the addicts.

12.) This will also keep the heroin users out of the hospital

Fixed: The “Free Heroin for Addicts” program will reduce the number of hospitalizations since the drug is being provided to addicts safely.

13.) It is pointless that the hospitals have to deal with people that want to use bad drugs or unsanitary needles and find themselves being unable to afford hospital bills and hard to cope without the drug

Fixed: Having addicts to continue to use unsafe ways to inject heroin is unnecessary if the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program could provide safety and benefit the addicts financially as well.

14.) This program gives people free heroin in the cleanest way possible.

Fixed: *Do not need this sentence since the previous sentence is saying the needle is already unsanitary and the program is providing safe ones*

15.) This will in turn fix the city  but not the addiction that these people face.

Fixed: The addiction of heroin will not go away, but the safety of Vancouver will greatly increase through the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program.

Revised and Edited Paragraph:

Felons who commit crimes, especially those who are heroin addicts, are creating a huge problem in the city of Vancouver. Addicts have been uncontrollable but the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program has a plan to stop these felons. In the city of Vancouver, heroin addicts have caused the crime rates to increase. Trespassing and theft crimes are more likely to be committed by heroin addicts. Although most drug addict programs help a victim slowly shy away from the drug, the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program does not, which plays into the increase of crime rates in the city. The program is not helping the addict, but is only trying to help the city be more safe. The reduction of minor street crimes would be provided by the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program which in turn, gives free heroin to the addicts. The “Free Heroin for Addicts” program will also reduce the number of hospitalizations since the drug is being provided to addicts safely. Having addicts to continue to use unsafe ways to inject heroin is unnecessary if the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program could provide safety and benefit the addicts financially as well. The addiction of heroin will not go away, but the safety of Vancouver will greatly increase through the “Free Heroin for Addicts” program.

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