Revised Rebuttal Essay– Tyson Still

Sorry, But I Win

When looking at teens today that are involved with gangs, people automatically think that there is no reason they should be in it. But behind the violence and the drug dealing is a lot of pain that needs to be healed. As results are found, it shows that more teens are becoming actively involved with gangs because of their problems at home. One looking from the outside in might not realize it because  the teen does not show that he/she are hurting on the inside, but honestly they are.

Teens that are dealing with home issues often do not know how to deal with them so they seek for attention outside of their home to take their mind off of the problems they’re having. Most teens that are joining gangs today are lacking the significance of having a father figure or positive male role model in their life so the have joined a gang to feel the comfort of love and support from the male type of bonding. They often do not learn how to become a man without some type of guidance.

Even though divorce can be a great cause of why fathers are no longer around for their kids, one might argue that divorce isn’t the reason kids a joining gangs. If evidence was to be taken into consideration then it would show that about half of the world’s marriages today end in divorce but not nearly half of Americas teen population have joined gangs.

Therefore saying the results of  divorce is a factor leading kids in to a gang related lifestyle is wrong. I totally disagree with that rebuttal if it was to be made because most divorce leads fathers or even mothers away from the family which is what causes the seeking of love by a father or even mother. No one is saying that divorce is the leading cause of teens joining gangs, but it does make a good argument to say that it might play a big role in it.

Another argument that could come about is why aren’t all kids or teens in gangs that do not have a father in their life? Even if they don’t have that positive male role model in their life as stated in the previous essay, why are they doing good in life without one?

My answer to that would be that not all teens take a divorce between their parents hard some might take it as a relief as if the father was abusive to the mother or even to them. Some children might not even have been born with a father around to get that attachment where they would need it in the future because they have had the chance  to experience it already. No one is the same so some people take to situations different than others.

Some children have they luxury of having a mother that know how to cope with the their child not having a father figure, that’s why when the child is being brought up they might not need the guidance of a male figure in their life because the mother is playing the role of the all around parent. If the child is small enough and the mother has another boyfriend or man in her life and he takes on the positive role of becoming the father figure then the child will not be in need of its biological father because the comfort and love is still being fulfilled.

Teens on the other hand might have a different view on this concept. What happens when they meet the new father figure that is suppose to be a positve male role model, but still isn’t used to having him around and they either want their own father back or want their mother to themselves? What if the “new father” is in the teens life but they aren’t making an attempt to fulfill the needs of the teen? One might continue to say that it is easier to mold a little child into accepting the fact that he or she has a new father in their life. After a couple of months they get used to him and start to forget about the divorce or break up. But for a teens who might have grown up with their father for  some odd years might not be able to adapt to that life style of beginning into a different family aspect.

I say yes it is easier to mold a little child into accepting a new father figure that has a positive insight on that childs life, but also it is easier for a teen to understand what happened and why it happened and then once they accept the fact that what did happen happened, they will begin to come around and realize life goes on. Now with that being said just because he or she accepts the fact of what did happen, they might then take that initial step and say well I don’t want to have a new father with my mother or as stated before the “new father” might not be playing that specific role correctly which can also lead to gang related people into the teens life as he or she starts to adapt to living in that type of environment.

There are benefits of not having a father around though. The most popular one is that you have a chance to be better than your father was. Teens might say that their father did this and didn’t do that but according to Brett and Kate “you don’t need your father to be your father figure” meaning you can find that father in someone else that is successful at being a great father.

I agree with that statement but that still doesn’t defeat the fact that most teens today that are being influenced by music and other people that live a life of crime, needs the father figure to be there for them. That’s why it is being proven that not having a father is leading kids to gangs because they don’t have no on to look up to so they follow the wrong people into the wrong life to live.

My main oint is that many arguments can be made to prove there are other reasons teens get led into the gang life, but if statistics are researched and shown my theory that not having a positive male role model leads kids into gangs as well can be proven.

Works Cited

Not having a father Kate Fogarty and Garret D. Evans Web.  April 3, 2012

Benefit of not having a father  Brett & Kate McKay on June 17, 2009

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2 Responses to Revised Rebuttal Essay– Tyson Still

  1. davidbdale says:

    Tyson, I have tried to warn you from the beginning that this is not a research paper you’re doing. You offer common sense theories about the dangers of an absent father, balanced by common sense theories about the benefits of not having a father present, and nothing can possibly be concluded.

    And you’re never willing to clearly identify what you mean by “having a father present,” which means you can change the definition any time you want. Readers (me included) feel completely manipulated when you shift the argument to suit your needs.

    In many ways, this is your best writing yet. You do seem willing to grapple with the several possible conclusions of a single bit of reasoning, but your conclusions are still so vague it’s impossible to say exactly what you have decided on any issue.

    The subject is admittedly complex. Everybody has a father, but his effect on every child is subject to a million variations. That’s why nothing but rigorous research can offer us any sort of clarity on what sort of father/child relationship results in gang membership. As you say: an absent father can drive me toward or away from gangs. An active father can drive me toward or away. A pathetic loser of a father can drive me toward or away.

    Sooner or later, if this is to be a meaningful paper, you need to find a way to make a clear claim: Fathers who themselves were gang members—but who got themselves out of gang life and learned to make better choices—are the best defense against kids joining gangs. Something like that would be great. What’s the closest thing you’ve found to a definitive rule?

  2. davidbdale says:

    Your “Revised” Rebuttal essay is identical to your original essay with the exception of the summary paragraph you added to the end, Tyson. The paragraph adds little, and the newer version can hardly be called a Revision.

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