Proposal, 5 Sources – Tikeena Sturdivant

I will be doing my research paper on Adrian Peterson’s comment of being a “40 million dollar slave”. This was first brought to my attention in my Africana Studies class when we were examining how African Americans feel today, knowing everything we as a race had to go through in the past. Adrian Peterson’s comment made me think and really ask myself what made him come to his conclusion. Do he have the right to compare himself to a slave? Is it more about the money or the treatment? This should be a very interesting topic to research because it will allow me to not only go into the true meaning of slavery but compare Adrian Peterson’s comment. At the end of my paper I want to be able to determine if he has the right to compare himself to a slave. A “40 million dollar slave” doesn’t make sense only because a real slave would of never saw 40 million dollars. However, for that exact reason I believe Adrian Peterson made this comment because of the treatment he might of been receiving. I’m also interested in what others had to say about his comment. I will not know until i do my research to see exact where everything comes together from Adrian Peterson’s point of view.

1. Slaves to the Game? Adrian Peterson and the ‘S’ Word

This article provides me with Adrian Peterson’s point of view and his issues with the team owners during an interview. This link also provides a video of Adrian Peterson addressing his comment and his feelings about it all.

How I intend to use it: I intend to use this as the main source of my paper, its the background information to why he made the comment. This is very important because without this information i won’t know exactly how Adrian Peterson feels and what made him say what he said.

2. Pampered black athletes lose sight of past struggles

This article by DeWayne Wickham examines the things that were said in William Rhoden’s book, Forty Million Dollar Slave: The Rise, Fall, and Redemption of the Black Athlete. It points out a few important parts of the book and explain very well. This article encouraged me to buy the book because the book can be another main source for my paper.

How I intend to use it: I intend to go over the things that were mentioned in this article until I am able to actually get the book. I will also research more due to this article because there are things that i feel can add to my paper.

3. America’s most wanted slaves: Black athletes bought, sold, traded

This provides basically proves that Adrian Peterson’s comment correct. It goes over ways black athletes can consider themselves slaves. Out of all the articles I came across while trying to find a source, this one caught and kept my attention! I

How I intend to use it: I will use this as well as Adrian Peterson’s opinion to make my research paper come together. I will compare this article to what Adrian Peterson said to see if the same points were made. I will also use this article to see if the author and Adrian Peterson will disagree on anything.

4. Slavery in the US

This source provides everything I need to know about slavery so my paper could be a success. It provides the history of slavery in the US, details about the slave trade, and every other part of slavery. I need this information to learn more about slavery and actually get a idea of what life as a slave would consist of.

How I intend to use it: I will make a comparison of Adrian Peterson and a actual slave. This would be impossible without knowing the history of slavery and what these slaves had to go through.

5. Have Pro Athletes Become the New Slaves?

This article provides information about a situation in the past with Jimmy Snyder, a commentator on the NFL Today show. He made a racial comment about black football players which is why he was fired. He claimed that “blacks were better athletes because they were bred during slavery”. He voiced his opinion a little to much which “reopened an old societal wound” said Ron Goodwin.

How I intend to use it: I will use this article to farther my research and go into details about Jimmy Snyder’s comment. Because Jimmy Snyder is a white man, was he being racist? Was he taking up for black athletes? What exactly was his claim? I want to know how did black athletes feel about this. Is Adrian Peterson alone with the way he feel? Or is he the only black athlete that spoke up and said something? I will find out Jimmy Snyder’s exact words and use all the information I gather in my paper.

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3 Responses to Proposal, 5 Sources – Tikeena Sturdivant

  1. sturdi36 says:

    Please take a look at this and let me know what changes I need to make.

  2. davidbdale says:

    Thank you for the invitation, Tikeena. As you know, I’m very much in favor of your using this very specific example as the focus of your research on the question of contemporary race relations. I hope you’ll be able to maintain this narrow focus and I’ll provide as much guidance as you permit me to keep you from broadening your project.

    Of course, the specific comment offers plenty of opportunity for arguments of the sort I’ve already covered in “Tips for Better Proposals.” Please review that post for advice on how to approach your narrow topic from a variety of angles.

    Your proposal contains several serious language problems I need you to address before the semester gets away from us. Just one example: “because a real slave would of never saw 40 million dollars.” First replace “would of never” with “would have never,” then fix the tense to “would have never seen,” then rephrase to “because a real slave would never have seen 40 million dollars.”

    Everything you write for the class, Tikeena, not only the formal papers, should reflect your very best writing skills. I always presume you’re submitting a polished final draft of even the shortest assignment and grade you accordingly. You now have a second chance to make this assignment the best work you can.

    Specifically about your source descriptions and proposed uses, I need to see more specificity. To say that an article talks about something does not say what the article says. You say:

    This article provides me with Adrian Peterson’s point of view and his issues with the team owners during an interview. This link also provides a video of Adrian Peterson addressing his comment and his feelings about it all.

    We don’t learn Adrian Peterson’s point of view, his “feelings about it all,” or what issues he has with team owners so we haven’t learned anything about your source. I would try to help you rephrase your statement to tell us those things in just a few words, but I find nothing here to rephrase. We need to know. You say:

    I intend to use this as the main source of my paper, its the background information to why he made the comment. This is very important because without this information i won’t know exactly how Adrian Peterson feels and what made him say what he said.

    Here you need to share with us (it doesn’t require a paragraph, but something!) “why he made the comment.” We need some indication, either here or in the source description, what “background information” the source contains.

    You’ve gathered interesting sources here, Tikeena. I disagree with several of your characterizations of them and their usefulness, but that’s of no concern at this stage. I’ll offer more advice about that after your revisions are made. For now, I want you to concentrate on making the clearest statements you can throughout this assignment.

    And of course, I expect you to list William Rhoden’s book, Forty Million Dollar Slave: The Rise, Fall, and Redemption of the Black Athlete. as a source and read it. You won’t be able to do a credible job of this assignment if you ignore it.

    Was this helpful, Tikeena? Please reply.

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