Practice Opening- Christianity19

To Completely eradicate Polio, we need to work together as nations to combat this serious viral illness. Also, to complete get rid of it we need to make people aware about it and its side effects and find a vaccine for it. Eradication of polio has been defined in various ways—as elimination of the occurrence of poliomyelitis even in the absence of human intervention, as extinction of poliovirus, such that the infectious agent no longer exists in nature or in the laboratory. I’m sure they can eradicate other viruses, so I see them doing the same thing to Polio.

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  1. davidbdale says:

    To Completely eradicate Polio, we need to work together as nations to combat this serious viral illness.

    Altogether true, but it doesn’t begin to indicate whether you think that will happen or not. Don’t wait too long to state your thesis.

    Also, to complete get rid of it we need to make people aware about it and its side effects and find a vaccine for it.

    Also true, but still not a thesis. Furthermore, we DO have a vaccine, several in fact, and have been using them with tremendous success for generations, but we haven’t yet achieved eradication.

    Eradication of polio has been defined in various ways—as elimination of the occurrence of poliomyelitis even in the absence of human intervention, as extinction of poliovirus, such that the infectious agent no longer exists in nature or in the laboratory.

    That’s two ways (not various). While what you say is true, and exhibits research, it doesn’t help us understand what your argument might be.

    I’m sure they can eradicate other viruses, so I see them doing the same thing to Polio.

    I see. Your thesis is that, by analogy, if we have successfully eradicated SOME viruses we should be able to eradicate Polio. It’s a fine thesis, but now I’m really confused about the rest of your material. Shouldn’t you be naming other viruses that have been eradicated and demonstrating that polio is similar to them? Those would be the useful observations needed to persuade us of your thesis.

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