Purposeful Summaries- imgoingswimming

Are Multivitamins Dangerous?

It seems counterintuitive that multivitamins would actually harm you rather than help you. It can be seen that nearly one third of Americans take multivitamins every day. On top of this the amount of people taking them has been increasing each year, but do they really help? 

In studies tested it was found that Vitamins really did not do all that they promised such as promoting breast health or keeping a healthy heart. These vitamins are not something that people actually need and seem to be a waste of money.

It seems that the majority of people actually get their needed vitamins from their food. It can seem that too much of these vitamins can actually hurt people. Too much iron in the elderly can lead to heart disease, and Vitamin A in pregnant women can lead to an increase in birth defects.

The Lack of warnings on bottles from the FDA puts unsuspecting people at risk. These vitamins are made to help people but are actually hurting them.

Extreme Parenting

It seems counterintuitive to force your child to work hard just so that they can be average. In China, and even in America, Chinese moms tend to make their children work extremely hard on schoolwork and do not let them participate in certain extracurricular activities. Some of these mothers do not let their children participate in sleepovers, watch tv, or participate in their own desired extracurricular activities.

Making children work hard is good for their work ethic and helping them with their knowledge, but is extreme parenting effective? This extreme parenting does not help the children develop in some ways such as social skills and developing who they want to be as a person.

This parenting style is extremely stressful on students in China and especially the Gaokao exam. The Gaokao exam has pushed students to suicide because of its importance.

In many cases majors in college are chosen by the parents which leads the students to be unhappy. By letting the parents choose the direction of their child it ends with them being average instead of letting them choose who they want to be.

How to Armor Planes

It may seem counterintuitive to armor planes in the spots they come back least damaged. In World War II the question was where to armor planes in order to keep them in the sky? 

The idea was to armor the planes that came back in the spots where they were most damaged. This would make sure that these damaged spots would be able to withstand enemy fire. 

Instead Abraham Wald said that the areas on these damaged planes should not be areas of concern, as the areas that were hit did not affect the plane and they were able to make it back.

Instead armor them in the areas that they were not damaged as the planes that came back were not hit in these spots, but the planes that crashed were hit in these spots. This ensured that these important spots on the planes were fully protected from German anti-aircraft fire.

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1 Response to Purposeful Summaries- imgoingswimming

  1. davidbdale says:

    Let’s examine your first specimen, Swimming.

    It seems counterintuitive that multivitamins would actually harm you rather than help you. It can be seen that nearly one third of Americans take multivitamins every day. On top of this the amount of people taking them has been increasing each year, but do they really help?

    —USAGE NOTE: The 2nd person is banned in this course. That means we don’t address our readers as YOU, YOUR, YOURS, YOURSELF, or YOURSELVES.
    —USAGE NOTE: Rhetorical Questions are also banned except for users who have a license, which can be earned by first demonstrating that they don’t harm your writing. (They almost always harm your writing.)
    —The Purposeful Summary is your place to demonstrate what you believe. It’s your chance to summarize IN YOUR FAVOR the material you’ve read in a way that fairly and ethically supports your argument. Once you claim that multivitamins are harmful, it’s counterproductive to ask the question: “Do they really help?”

    In studies tested it was found that Vitamins really did not do all that they promised such as promoting breast health or keeping a healthy heart. These vitamins are not something that people actually need and seem to be a waste of money.

    Eliminate wordiness whenever possible. “Studies prove vitamins don’t promote breast health, heart health, or any of countless other benefits. They’re a waste of money.

    [It seems that the majority] Most people [actually] get their needed vitamins from [their] food. [It can seem that] In fact, too much of these vitamins [can actually hurt people] is harmful. For example, too much iron in the elderly can lead to heart disease, and Vitamin A in pregnant women can lead to an increase in birth defects.

    The lack of warnings on bottles from the FDA puts unsuspecting people at risk. These vitamins are made to help people but are actually hurting them.

    —The lack of warnings puts nobody at risk. The dangers inherent in the product put users at risk. The lack of warnings is unconscionable, but since the law does not require them, the manufacturers avoid them.

    I hope those were helpful Notes, Swimming. Your grade has been posted to Canvas. You have a week to revise ALL THREE summaries for a regrade if you choose. Remember to put this post into the Regrade Please category after making your improvements.

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