Causal Argument-rowanstudent24

Abuse on Animals

Society has demonstrated in a number of different ways how mistreat an animal. It is a growing problem in the world today. It can be hard to identify that an animal is being abused but that’s no excuse for the problem to keep getting bigger. Animal Abuse appears to be more common in dysfunctional homes where people are uneducated in the area of caring for animals properly.

Dysfunctional homes are the main cause of animal abuse. The kids learn from their parents and if they see that their parents are abusing their pets as well as other family members then the kids learn that. They believe that is the way you treat another living thing which isn’t right. In the article, “Animal Abuse, Family Violence, and Child Wellbeing: Review,” the author, Samara McPhedran, states “Consequently, in families where any given form of family violence exists, animal abuse may also be more likely to exist.” When kids see abuse happening within the household, they’ll take that into their family when they grow up because that’s what they learned. It’s like a never ending cycle of animal abuse living in each generation. There are a couple things in the world that just convey this problem.

Vet’s today are supposed to love all animals. That’s why most of them choose the profession. Animals are their world and they always make sure they are being taken care of properly by the owner. Animal abuse should be a big thing to report if they suspect it but that doesn’t happen as often as people would think. There are vets that just don’t report it and continue to let it happen because they’re scared to say something. Georgina Mills states in the article, “Reporting Cases of Animal Abuse,” that a study done by “psychologists at the University of Kent, found that almost a third of the vets asked had suspected at least one incident of animal abuse in the past year, but only half of those had reported cases to the authorities.” Little things like these cause animal abuse just because it keeps the problem going since it’s not being reported.

Animal abuse can not only be found in dysfunctional homes but also within public events involving animals. For example, the circus is a big event that involves animal abuse. The trainers want them to perform certain acts but when they don’t do this they hurt them in some way. Deborah Nelson states in her article, “The Cruelest Show on Earth,” Despite years of denying it, Kenneth Feld has now admitted under oath that his trainers routinely ‘correct’ elephants by hitting them with bullhooks, whipping them, and on occasion using electric prods. He even admitted to witnessing it.” Kenneth Feld is the CEO of Feld entertainment who has operated the Ringling Brothers. The trainers are being educated incorrectly on how to treat the animals. The trainers must have abused an animal in some type of way before for them to have the heart to do this to the circus animals.

Another public event that is haunted by the presence of animal abuse is horse racing. Also done by the trainers as well. It was made known about the abuse of the horses in 2012 when an article was published by the New York Times. Bryan Denham, states in his article, “Intermedia Attribute Agenda Setting in the New York Times: The Case of Animal Abuse in U.S. Horse Racing,” that “On average, the Times reported , 24 horses die each week on U.S. race tracks; some break down during competition, while others sustain fatal injuries in practice sessions.” This is mainly because the horses are abused and very overworked from practicing. The abuse the trainers are committing on these animals can again originate from being uneducated in how to properly take care of an animal.

The origination of these trainers abusing an animal again cates back to learning that when they were younger. They most likely have grown up in a dysfunctional home where family abuse and animal abuse were both present. McPhedran also stated in her article, “Animal Abuse, Family Violence, and Child Wellbeing: A Review,” that “In a Utah shelter study, 22 women had children, and 32% (or 7 women) reported that one or more of their children had abused or killed companion animals.” She also states before that children of women in shelters are 20 times more likely to have witnessed animal abuse. The children see it and learn from that. It continues to haunt them throughout their life because they have no idea it’s a bad thing. That’s just what they were taught. The family dysfunctionality is causing these kids to grow up and become abusers.

The conflict of animal abuse has loomed over the world for quite a while. There are a lot of different causes to the different kinds of animal abuse. The abuse within horse racing as well as the circus is because the trainers are not taught to treat the animals with care. They just care about keeping the animals alive and the animals doing what they’re told to do and when they don’t do that they get hurt. Even when the horses are actually racing they’re whipped constantly to get them to go faster. Just little things like that can cause the animal to be in pain constantly. The trainers are taught when they are hired how to treat these show animals as well as learning from their childhood how to treat an animal the incorrect way. All this abuse goes back to the dysfunctional home. Parents fight all the time causing violence on the family members as well as the pets. The children seeing this causes them to be uneducated on how to properly care for an animal and it continues throughout their life until someone tells them that’s not right and demonstrates the correct way to them. This is a growing problem in society today and it’s like a never ending cycle because the abuse gets past on to each generation.

This entry was posted in Causal Argument, rowanstudent24. Bookmark the permalink.

2 Responses to Causal Argument-rowanstudent24

  1. davidbdale says:

    Paragraph 1. Your introduction contains important information, RS, but it has no punch, You should be able to paint a clearer picture of a household in which adults are being abused, children are being abused, animals are being abused. I imagine hitting in that house. Bones cracking. I see blood, split lips, bruises. I hear sobbing.

    Your language doesn’t convey any of that pain.
    1. Society has demonstrated a number of different ways animals are mistreated.
    2. The problem is growing.
    3. The problem is not always visible.
    4. It happens in dysfunctional homes.

    Paragraph 2. You should probably devote one paragraph to how kids learn to abuse animals by seeing ANIMALS abused, and another to how they learn from seeing OTHER PEOPLE abused. They’re different claims that you’re combining. The author you cite makes a claim about ANOTHER LIVING THING, which is a claim you might want to save until you’ve established both individually. Unless you focus on one at a time, you further sanitize your horror at the abuse. We don’t clearly picture EITHER a person or an animal when you ask us to consider abuse to LIVING THINGS. Your conclusion is that children who observe abuse will become abusive adults. Your goal is to demonstrate that they will abuse animals, but your claim could just as easily be that they grow up to abuse their kids or their spouses.

    Paragraph 3. You’ve switched gears here, RS. Your claim about vets doesn’t offer a causal explanation for why abuse occurs; it just offers a suggestion about why it doesn’t stop in certain cases. It’s a good point, but be clear about what you’re arguing. Personally, I’m not convinced by your single study that vets under-report abuse. But I do agree that “at least one incident” would probably not be enough evidence for anyone to report a suspected abuser. Your explanation that “they just don’t report it” out of fear is perhaps too judgmental. Have you done enough research to feel confident in this conclusion? More than 2/3 of vets did report abuse. That might be the best that can be expected.

    Paragraph 4. I’m disappointed to see that you feel the need to expand your hypothesis so far beyond the dysfunctional household, RS. You may be able to use examples of abuse from SEVERAL DIFFERENT areas of human behavior (the family home, the circus, sport, I suppose also hunting and fishing or even slaughtering), but if you allow yourself ALL THAT RANGE, you won’t be able to sufficiently focus your attention on a narrow proof worthy of 3000 words. [By the way, Ringling Brothers was forced by public pressure just a couple years ago to completely eliminate elephant performances from their circuses, so your point here is currently out of date.] I notice you tried to connect elephant training to “incorrect education” in how to handle animals, but I think you’d have to admit that trainers don’t have to have seen abuse in their families to use corrective training measures on the job.

    Paragraph 5. The same goes for your horse racing paragraph. It’s heartbreakingly sad that horses die so often on the tracks, but the motivation for working them so hard is VERY DIFFERENT from the motivation of a dysfunctional dad in an abusive home who just wants something weaker to work out his self-hate issues on. Behavior norms that exist in horse racing and which used to exist in elephant training are not the same as the abusive behavior toward pets in the home.

    Paragraph 6. The Utah study is the most chilling, but it’s WAY TOO SMALL to be conclusive, I’m afraid. Obviously 1 child killing 1 companion animal is very sad, perhaps terrifying, but there’s a big difference between 7 children beating their dogs to death and 1 child squeezing a bird too hard. We can’t tell from your report how many deaths occurred or how severe the abuse was in the 7 cases reported.

    Paragraph 7. You know your thesis is too broad when your explanation of your Causal Argument is A, B, and C, result in X, Y, and Z. Your conclusion tries to paint a picture of a web of abuse that can be caused in the home, or on the job, by adults who witnessed spousal abuse, or child abuse, or animal abuse in the home or by adults who have watched other adults behave badly to elephants or horses in their commercial pursuits. It’s just too much material to wrap into a single thesis.


  2. davidbdale says:

    Would you please provide References so I can follow your links back to your sources, RowanStudent? I’d like to help you find stronger evidence than you’re currently citing.


Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s