Cookie Boycott – Ally Hodgson

Controversy has been surrounding a video posted by a 14 year old Girl Scout imploring people to boycott Girl Scout Cookies. Taylor’s pleas are connected to the Girl Scouts admitting they allow transgender boys into the organization.

Taylor says she has been taught by the Girl Scouts to take action when she sees the need for change. This is compelling because she’s using the Girl Scout’s objectives against them. She outlines the problem; the Girl Scouts admitting transgender boys. Taylor uses quotes from a representative of the Girl Scouts to prove they do let in transgender boys. She reiterates that this means they let in boys “solely based on their wishes and desires.”

She then brings up her main problem with this; the fact that the Girl Scout organization is letting in transgender boys without letting the girls or their families know. This is wrong, she says, because the Girl Scouts represent themselves as an all-girl organization because the experience enriches the girls. She then abruptly brings up safety before strengthening her point on the experience girls in all-girl groups get. She says in all-girl groups, girls can relate to each other, be themselves, dress how they want and talk about things they’re uncomfortable talking about in front of boys. She explains how this is deceptive of the organization and then goes back to her previous point of safety. Taylor points out that they transgender boys would have to use the same bathrooms and sleep in the same bedrooms as the girls. She also brings up the fact that the male chaperones must sleep in separate facilities. Since Girl Scouts maybe be up to age 18, transgender males are technically adult males. She reads us an excerpt of a publication that says the Girl Scouts do not discrimination for any reason including gender.

She then brings our attention to “the real question” which is why the Girl Scouts are accommodating transgender boys despite all this. Taylor’s argument loses some credibility here. She believes the Girl Scouts are accommodating these children because the organization cares more about that than the girls in it. This particular point is the only one that doesn’t really make too much sense, it’s difficult to see the connection shes trying to make here. It seems she’s being very naive in this and doesn’t have too much proof.

She finally explains alternatives to buying cookies; alternatives which would help the individual troops with out “giving GSUSA more pocket money.” Taylor’s argument is well thought-out; her arguments are very clear. Giving alternatives was a very smart decision. Though I don’t agree with her point of view, I must say her speech was mostly convincing. Her use of publicly available writings was very helpful to her point.

 

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3 Responses to Cookie Boycott – Ally Hodgson

  1. davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

    Very nice work overall, Ally. I like the clarity of your claims.

    P3 is quite weak, though, in structure. Your decision to follow the chronology of Taylor’s remarks doesn’t relieve you of the responsibility to shape her comments into a coherent paragraph. It rambles. It shouldn’t.

    P4 is vague where it can’t afford to be: “all this,” “credibility here,” “more about that,” “this particular point,” “the connection she’s trying to make here,” “in this.”

    P5 Several comments here do you little good. “Taylor’s argument is well thought-out; her arguments are very clear . . . her speech was mostly convincing.” There’s nothing here to convince your readers.

    Grade Recorded.

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    • allyhodgson93's avatar allyhodgson93 says:

      P3 – paragraph structure is definitely a major problem I have with my writing. I don’t understand what I could do to make the paragraph better.
      P4- I agree, I just didn’t think about that while I was writing.
      P5 – What could I have written in place of this? I’m not very good at writing positive feedback as well as i am with negative.

      grade recorded.

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      • davidbdale's avatar davidbdale says:

        P3
        Instead of the she says, then she says, then she says method, Ally, name her arguments.

        Taylor may be afraid of transgenders or she may believe them to be creepy boys who want to spy on girls, but instead of addressing these prejudices directly, she complains that the GSUSA should have consulted the scouts before admitting transgenders. The girls had a right to expect that the national organization would maintain the all-girl status that has always been part of its mission, she says. All-girl groups provide a safe and enriching environment where girls can relate to one another without worrying about outside influences, particularly boys; scouts in troops are comfortable talking in ways they can’t when boys are around. What threat boys might pose beyond interrupting the girls’ conversation, Taylor never says, but she does express concern about sharing bathrooms and sleeping quarters with boys. Adult males accompanying girl scouts are always provided separate quarters, she points out, and a transgender girl scout approaching the age of 18 would more like an adult male than like a teenage girl.

        Does this example help you see the chain of reasoning that leads readers from one claim to the next, Ally?

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